19: Wolf's Bane
| Pending |
| Fixed Errata | ||
| (er) | Map: | Kaltersee -> Kaltesee |
| (er) | Map: | Anskaven -> Anskavern |
| (er) | Dedication: | For Caroline Thomas, Margaret Conroy & Sue Mongredien -> For Caroline Thomas, Margaret Conroy, & Sue Mongredien [LM] |
| (er) | The Story So Far: | elite -> élite |
| (er) | The Story So Far: | Naar - the King -> Naar, the King |
| (er) | The Story So Far: | freestate -> Freeland |
| (er) | The Story So Far: | monastery of the Kai -> Monastery of the Kai |
| (er) | The Story So Far: | Kai lord -> Kai Lord |
| (er) | The Story So Far [x2]: | new-found -> newfound |
| (er) | The Story So Far: | granite and gold, you -> granite and gold you |
| (er) | The Story So Far: | dispatched -> despatched |
| (er) | The Story So Far: | Three years earlier, -> Three years ago, [LM] |
| (er) | The Story So Far: | your body; you became -> your body: you became [LM] |
| (er) | The Story So Far: | para.3 uses both "Darkland armies" and "Darklands armies". The latter is unprecedented in the books and should be changed. |
| (er) | The Story So Far: | For ten unbroken years peace -> For ten unbroken years, peace [jb] |
| (er) | The Story So Far: | "The crowd were quietly hostile". Crowd is singular, so it should read: "The crowd was quietly hostile". [Anders Österberg] |
| (er) | The Story So Far [x4]: | Anskaven -> Anskavern |
| (er) | The Game Rules: | that you will find in the front of this book. For ease of use, and for further adventuring, it is recommended that you photocopy these pages. [so: remove] |
| (er) | The Game Rules [x2]: | ie, -> i.e., |
| (er) | The Game Rules: | ENDURANCE points fall to zero -> ENDURANCE points fall to zero or below |
| (er) | The Game Rules: | Grand Master Action Chart (you are still -> Grand Master Action Chart. (You are still [LM] [SO: This will affect all other GM adventures] |
| (er) | Grand Master Disciplines: | limited immunity to flames, toxic gases, corrosive liquids. -> limited immunity to flames, toxic gases, and corrosive liquids. |
| (er) | Grand Master Disciplines [x2]: | battle wounds -> battle-wounds (See also, 07cd:186; 11tpot:74; GM13-18, 20:GMD [x2]; 21votm:104, GMD; NO22-25, 27, 28:GMD; 26tfobm:190, GMD) |
| (er) | Disciplines: | [LM: Do the magi-magic and kai alchemy headings need to list the starting spells?] [SO: Well spotted! This extra material doesn't appear in the earlier books. Should this be back-ported to Books 13-18?] |
| (er) | Disciplines: | smell and -> smell, and |
| (er) | Disciplines: | footprints & tracks -> footprints and tracks |
| (er) | Disciplines: | against - hypnosis, -> against hypnosis, |
| (er) | Disciplines: | venoms & toxins -> venoms and toxins |
| (er) | Disciplines: | venoms and toxins -> venoms, and toxins right [LeRoy McSwain, Jan 2007] |
| (er) | Disciplines: | 500 yds -> 500 yards |
| (er) | Disciplines: | COMBAT SKILL -> ENDURANCE [so: as per Lone Wolf Club Newsletter 24] |
| (er) | Disciplines: | Magi-Magic -> Magi-magic |
| (er) | Disciplines: | battle magic -> battle-magic |
| (er) | Disciplines: | opposite and overleaf -> below |
| (er) | Disciplines: | [so: the list/illustration of Weapons for Weaponmastery is missing from the book.] |
| (er) | Disciplines [Kai-screen]: | The strength and capacity of these fortresses increases -> increase [LeRoy McSwain Feb 2007] |
| (er) | Disciplines [Telegnosis]: | Duration, and the protection of his inanimate body, increases -> Duration and the protection of his inanimate body increase [LeRoy McSwain Feb 2007] |
| (er) | Disciplines: | Grand Huntmastery -> footnote re: meals [DED: It is only in the Equipment section that is says "If you have chosen the Discipline of Grand Huntmastery as one of your skills, you will not need to tick off a Meal when instructed to eat." I was playing last night and I didn't read this line until after I'd already chosen Grand Huntmastery, and then chosen 2 Meals for my equipment. We could add a footnote here to explain the relevance of Huntmastery to meals] [jb: Add to main body as (er)] |
| (er) | Equipment: | Before you set off on your long journey home to Sommerlund, you took with you a map of Northern Magnamund [so: this is clearly wrong, and is copied directly from this section in Book 18. Perhaps it should say something like: "You have in your possession a map of Sommerlund and the Wildlands"] |
| (er) | Equipment: | (see the inside front cover of this book) [so: remove] |
| (er) | Equipment: | safe-keeping -> safekeeping |
| (er) | Equipment: | arrow(s) -> Arrow(s) [so: all] |
| (er) | Equipment: | effect that may have -> effect they may have |
| (er) | Equipment: | bow -> Bow [so: all] |
| (er) | Equipment: | 3 points -> 5 points |
| (er) | Equipment: | eg -> e.g. |
| (er) | Equipment: | Gold Crowns These are always carried in the Belt Pouch. It will hold a maximum of fifty crowns. [so: add this] |
| (er) | Equipment: | a sword or an axe -> a Sword or an Axe [LM / jb] |
| (er) | Rules For Combat: | on the inside back cover of this book [so: remove] |
| (er) | Rules For Combat: | This process of combat continues until ENDURANCE points of either the enemy or Lone Wolf are reduced to zero, -> This process of combat continues until the ENDURANCE points of either the enemy or Lone Wolf are reduced to zero or below, |
| (er) | Rules For Combat: | at which point the one with the zero score is declared dead. -> at which point that combatant is declared dead. |
| (er) | Rules For Combat: | with his ENDURANCE points reduced. -> with his ENDURANCE points possibly reduced. |
| (er) | Rules For Combat: | on the page after the Random Number Table -> in the back of this book |
| (er) | Improved Disciplines: | levels of Kai Grand Mastery you will -> levels of Kai Grand Mastery, you will [so: in harmony with the Improved Disciplines pages from books 14-18) |
| (er) | Improved Disciplines: | ie, -> i.e. |
| (er) | Improved Disciplines: | most-feared -> most feared |
| (er) | Improved Disciplines: | equipment and clothing, -> equipment, and clothing [so: note the proposed removal of the trailing comma] |
| (er) | Improved Disciplines: | 'Improved Grand Master Disciplines' -> Improved Grand Master Disciplines |
| (er) | Improved Disciplines: | The power and range of this skill increases -> The power and range of this skill increase [LM] |
| (er) | Improved Disciplines: | spell, a Kai Grand Thane is able -> spell, Kai Grand Thanes are able [LM/JB] |
| (er) | Improved Disciplines: | of their detection -> of detection [LM] [JB] |
| (er) | Improved Grand Master Disciplines: | Kai Grand Crowns with this discipline -> Kai Grand Crowns with this Discipline |
| (er) | 1: | drawbolt -> bolt [PAMoS] |
| (er) | 1: | Calder -> Caldar |
| (er) | 1: | force-field -> force field |
| (er) | 3, 123, 147: | Crypt Spawn hordes -> Crypt Spawn Hordes [LM] [jb: fix] |
| (er) | 6, 68, 70, 312: | Bow and -> Bow, and |
| (er) | 6, 312: | Bow or -> Bow, or |
| (er) | 8, 15, 86, 133: | enemy--Wolf's Bane-- -> enemy, Wolf's Bane, [LM] [jb: fix] |
| (er) | 9, 17, 172, 338: | imbedded -> embedded [ik: consistency with all other books] |
| (er) | 13, 99, 226: | curing -> Curing |
| (er) | 13: | cry, 'the -> cry. 'The |
| (er) | 14, 26, 58, 146, 152, 164, 198, 233, 270, 272, 277, 279, 290, 292, 293, 319, 329: | Brotherhood spell -> Brotherhood Spell |
| (er) | 18, 210, 251, 320: | at the front of this book [remove] |
| (er) | 18, 320: | Anskaven -> Anskavern |
| (er) | 19: | Monastery -> monastery |
| (er) | 21: | an emaciated Drakkarim -> an emaciated Drakkar [LM] [jb: fix] |
| (er) | 27, 78, 120, 160, 188, 298, 300, 344: | aura of evil -> aura of Evil [cf. Evil in 215, 285, 297] |
| (er) | 29, 130, 218, 278, 335: | rainswept -> rain-swept |
| (er) | 29: | diffuse -> defuse |
| (er) | 29: | for sight of -> for a sight of [or, for a view/glimpse of?] |
| (er) | 30: | what the dangers -> what dangers [jb: correct as-is] [jb: After some discussion, change it to: "no matter what dangers you may yet face"] |
| (er) | 31: | one set belong -> one set belongs |
| (er) | 34, 183: | battle armour -> battle-armour |
| (er) | 36: | cavemouth -> cave mouth |
| (er) | 37: | ie -> i.e. |
| (er) | 37: | dagger, etc) -> dagger) [so: strictly speaking, you shouldn't append 'etc.' to a statement beginning with i.e. or e.g.] |
| (er) | 37: | or Special -> or this Special |
| (er) | 37: | floor, walls and ceiling. -> floor, walls, and ceiling. [LM] |
| (er) | 37: | skills, rank, weapons or this Special Item -> skills, rank, weapons, or this Special Item [LM] |
| (er) | 38, 40, 46, 51, 52, 62, 68, 73, 84, 90, 108, 145, 153, 176, 192, 200, 205, 208, 212, 218, 220, 225, 229, 243, 244, 257 [x2], 262, 272, 280, 317, 338: | Kai mastery -> Kai Mastery |
| (er) | 40: | impatiently, 'Naar -> impatiently. 'Naar |
| (er) | 40: | reply, 'but -> reply. 'But |
| (er) | 42, 124: | silver and iron -> silver, and iron [LM] |
| (er) | 44, 87, 106 [x2], 136 [+s] [x2], 138 [x2], 196 [x2], 209 [x4], 299, 322: | arrow(s) -> Arrow(s) |
| (er) | 46: | cage door, and continuing -> cage door and continuing [LM] |
| (er) | 46: | co-operate -> cooperate |
| (er) | 49: | concentrations of evil -> concentrations of Evil [cf. Good in 104, 216, 350; Evil in 215, 285, 297] |
| (er) | 53: | entrance, 'follow -> entrance. 'Follow |
| (er) | 53: | noise and light abates -> noise and light abate [LM] |
| (er) | 55, 165, 175, 326: | If you possess Magi-magic, -> If you possess Magi-magic, and have attained the rank of Grand Thane or higher, [LM] |
| (er) | 55, 165, 175, 326: | If you do not possess this Grand Master Discipline, -> If you do not possess this Grand Master Discipline, or have yet to attain this level of Kai Mastery, [LM] |
| (er) | 58: | the fire-bolt splutters -> the fire-bolt sputters [ik/bk] |
| (er) | 61: | most-feared -> most feared |
| (er) | 61: | Kai alchemy -> Kai-alchemy |
| (er) | 62, 220, 257, 338: | semi-circular -> semicircular |
| (er) | 62: | Magi-Magic -> Magi-magic |
| (er) | 62: | spell of levitation -> spell of <spell>Levitation</spell> (or, <spell>Levitation</spell> spell) |
| (er) | 67, 273: | tables and other furniture -> tables, and other furniture [LM] |
| (er) | 68: | If you do not have a Bow, the Discipline of Grand Nexus, or if you have yet to attain this higher level of Kai Mastery, turn to 114. -> If you do not have a Bow, the Discipline of Grand Nexus, if you have yet to attain this higher level of Kai Mastery, or if you do not wish to use any of them, turn to 114. [LM] |
| (er) | 69: | thick, sticky and tough -> thick, sticky, and tough [LM] |
| (er) | 70, 309: | neither of these Disciplines, or a Bow -> neither of these Disciplines, nor a Bow [LM] |
| (er) | 71: | he may have doubled-back -> he may have doubled back |
| (er) | 75, 116, 340: | past, therefore -> past; therefore [LM] [jb: correct as-is] [SO: cf. past, so vs. past; therefore] [JB: Fix] |
| (er) | 77: | fast flowing -> fast-flowing [PAMoS] |
| (er) | 80: | Kai lord -> Kai Lord |
| (er) | 80: | apt name don't you -> apt name, don't you |
| (er) | 81, 209, 234: | Old Kingdom spell -> Old Kingdom Spell |
| (er) | 82, 149: | Naptha -> Naphtha |
| (er) | 82, 242: | agonising -> agonizing |
| (er) | 83: | The instant you see him he releases -> The instant you see him, he releases [LM] [jb: fix] |
| (er) | 87, 106, 136 [x2], 138, 209 [x2]: | bow -> Bow |
| (er) | 88, 260 [x3]: | Cloud Dancer -> Cloud-dancer [also: itals (ne)] |
| (er) | 90: | Dagger (if -> Dagger. (If *and* Chart). -> Chart.) |
| (er) | 93: | your life and your duel with Wolf's Bane ends -> your life and your duel with Wolf's Bane end [LM] |
| (er) | 94: | Grand Mastery -> Grand Master |
| (er) | 98: | a Wolf's Bane Amulet -> Wolf's Bane's Amulet |
| (er) | 98, 280: | fire, 'Naar -> fire. 'Naar |
| (er) | 98: | Aylss -> Alyss |
| (er) | 98: | champion!.’ -> champion!’ [LM] |
| (er) | 98, 280: | half-completed -> half completed [LM] [jb: hyphen unnecessary] |
| (er) | 98, 280: | Having done as she requests, she -> When you have done as she requests, she [LM] [jb: correct as-is] [SO/BK: Disagree] [JB: OK, fix] |
| (er) | 99, 154, 345: | gemstones (if -> gemstones. (If [LM] |
| (er) | 99, 154, 345: | Item). -> Item.) [LM] |
| (er) | 99, 218, 278 [x2], 335 [x2]: | shockwave -> shock wave |
| (er) | 99, 154, 223: | reproachfully -> ruefully [tp: To me, at least, "reproachfully" implies reproach for those to whom you're speaking, not for yourself as is clearly meant here. Same goes for the parallel sections 154 and 223... any others?] |
| (er) | 100: | tall open -> tall, open |
| (er) | 103, 144, 220, 257, 338: | Kai-alchemy and -> Kai-alchemy, and |
| (er) | 103, 144: | Magi-magic and -> Magi-magic, and |
| (er) | 112 [x2], 195, 302, 331 [x2]: | artifact -> artefact |
| (er) | 112: | focussed -> focused |
| (er) | 112: | "Your return to Sommerlund will not be alone, Wolf's Bane". Anders Österberg: This strikes me as an odd thing to say. Shouldn't it read: "You will not return to Sommerlund alone, Wolf's Bane"?] |
| (er) | 113: | Old Kingdom Battle spell -> Old Kingdom Battle-spell |
| (er) | 120: | attained, above -> attained above |
| (er) | 122: | (The maximum you are permitted to add is 7.) -> [LM: Why 7? I'm guessing this ought to be '5'.] |
| (er) | 122: | Kai mastership -> Kai Mastery [jb: fix] |
| (er) | 128, 225: | pathsmanship -> Pathsmanship |
| (er) | 129: | size and shape of the disc suddenly triggers -> size and shape of the disc suddenly trigger [LM] |
| (er) | 129: | slot (if -> slot. (If [LM] |
| (er) | 129: | Item). -> Item.) [LM] |
| (er) | 130: | key-in -> key in [ik: same change was made in 01hh] |
| (er) | 134, 261: | clack [onomatopoeia] |
| (er) | 137: | kakarmi -> Kakarmi [ik: as in 01fftd; the Kakarmi are an intelligent race of forest animals] |
| (er) | 137, 226: | animal control -> Animal Control |
| (er) | 138, 209, 219: | Old Kingdom battle spell -> Old Kingdom Battle-spell |
| (er) | 140: | icy-cold -> icy cold [ik: or "ice cold"] |
| (er) | 144: | If you possess Kai-alchemy, and wish to use it, turn to 57. -> If you possess Kai-alchemy, and wish to use it, turn to 279. [LM] |
| (er) | 144: | If you possess Magi-magic, and wish to use it, turn to 279. -> If you possess Magi-magic, and wish to use it, turn to 57. [LM] |
| (er) | 145: | Sun Thane, or higher -> Sun Thane or higher |
| (er) | 147: | battle cry -> battle-cry |
| (er) | 148: | All that remains -> All that remain [LM] |
| (er) | 148: | thump [onomatopoeia] |
| (er) | 149, 209: | quiver -> Quiver |
| (er) | 150: | psi-screen -> Psi-screen |
| (er) | 153: | If you possess Grand Huntmastery, and have attained the rank of Sun Lord -> If you possess Grand Huntmastery, and have attained the rank of Sun Thane [LM] |
| (er) | 156: | hard pressed -> hard-pressed [ik: as in the PAMoS] |
| (er) | 159: | iron disc -> Iron Disc |
| (er) | 160: | imposter -> impostor |
| (er) | 168: | shout, 'Don't -> shout. 'Don't |
| (er) | 170, 300: | ultimate evil -> ultimate Evil (cf. 215, 285, 297) |
| (er) | 170: | centrifugal pull -> centripetal pull [jb] |
| (er) | 171: | , or have not reached this level of Kai Mastery, [Add to second option] |
| (er) | 173, 256: | 1-4 -> 0-4 |
| (er) | 174: | icy-cold -> icy cold [ik: or "ice cold"] |
| (er) | 177: | keying-in -> keying in [ik: as key-in -> key in] |
| (er) | 178: | flys -> flies |
| (er) | 178: | [tp: You used Animal Mastery, not Animal Control, to get here.] |
| (er) | 179: | If you possess Kai-alchemy -> If you wish to use your Discipline of Kai-alchemy again [LM: You must have it to reach this section, because you are in the middle of the teleport spell] |
| (er) | 179: | If you do not possess this Grand Master Discipline -> If you do not [LM] |
| (er) | 182, 206: | potions of Laumspur -> Potions of Laumspur |
| (er) | 182, 206, 318, 337: | sixth sense -> Sixth Sense |
| (er) | 190: | ice-cold -> ice cold [so: In this context ("...runs ice cold through your veins..."), "ice-cold" appears in 12:150 and 19:120; "ice cold" appears in 14:54; 18:7, 19:190, and 20:276. I think the unhyphenated form is correct here (see "Compound Modifiers" in <http://www.projectaon.org/en/Sanctum/ManualOfStyle>).] [JDu: Agreed it should be "ice cold" (no hyphen).] [bk: Yeah, there's nothing else "ice" could modify, so I don't see what the hyphen would accomplish.] |
| (er) | 196: | your enemy is part-hidden -> your enemy is partly hidden [ik: maybe] |
| (er) | 199: | whir -> whirr (cf. 04cc: 28, 09tcof:326; 12tmod:110) |
| (er) | 201: | The seething horde of needle-fanged horrors attempt -> The seething horde of needle-fanged horrors attempts [LM] |
| (er) | 204: | spluttering flame -> sputtering flame [ik] [dd] [bk] |
| (er) | 210: | Kirlundin islands ->: Kirlundin Islands |
| (er) | 211: | entrance, 'Follow -> entrance. 'Follow |
| (er) | 215, 285, 297: | line of deserted mud huts look -> line of deserted mud huts looks [LM] [jb: fix] |
| (er) | 220, 257, 338: | or if you have yet to attain the required levels of Kai Mastery, [LM: Add something to the effect of '(or if you do not wish to use them)'] [SO: Added: or if you choose not to use either of them,] |
| (er) | 225: | oiled twine and bronze -> oiled twine, and bronze [LM] |
| (er) | 227: | silence and lower air pressure within this entry chamber makes -> silence and lower air pressure within this entry chamber make [LM] |
| (er) | 227: | black glassy mineral -> black, glassy mineral |
| (er) | 229, 281: | cold dark universe -> cold, dark universe |
| (er) | 229, 281: | towards it until the speck -> towards the speck until it [LM] [jb: I think it's better - fix] |
| (er) | 234: | Hold Enemy and -> Hold Enemy, and (for consistency; this is how the commas are generally used in lw) [LM] [jb: we usually surround with commas, right? - also, I don't think Spell should be capitalised] [jb: After discussion, Old Kingdom Spell is OK capitalised; add comma after, not before <spell> element] |
| (er) | 238: | Blazer and Steel Hand. -> Blazer, and Steel Hand. [LM] |
| (er) | 238: | Baron, 'so -> Baron. 'So |
| (er) | 239: | Your sixth senses scream -> Your Sixth Sense screams |
| (er) | 240: | Wolf Bane's -> Wolf's Bane's [LM] |
| (er) | 246: | 246: clay tile roof vs. 215, 285, 297: The clay-tiled hovel [jb: clay-tile] |
| (er) | 249: | its still-warm carcass -> its still warm carcass [ik: maybe] [so: I think this is OK] [jb: adverb-adjective modifier doesn't take the hyphen] |
| (er) | 249: | Clasp (if -> Clasp. (If *and* tunic). -> tunic.) |
| (er) | 251: | reveals that by tapping upon each square a correct number of times you will -> reveals that tapping upon each square a correct number of times will |
| (er) | 251: | Your sixth senses reveal -> Your Sixth Sense reveals [LM] |
| (er) | 255: | cries, 'flee -> cries. 'Flee |
| (er) | 257, 338: | or if you have yet to attain the required levels of Kai Mastery, turn to 121. [lm: add something to the effect of '(or if you do not wish to use them)'] |
| (er) | 260: | south'. -> south.' |
| (er) | 262, 272: | Grand Guardian, or higher -> Grand Guardian or higher |
| (er) | 267: | hall; one ascends to the floor above, the other -> hall: one ascends to the floor above; the other [LM] [jb: fix it] |
| (er) | 275: | the inky-black chamber -> the inky black chamber [ik: as in other books] |
| (er) | 276: | must reduce your COMBAT SKILL by four -> must reduce your COMBAT SKILL by 4 [rules mechanic] |
| (er) | 280: | platinum amulet -> Platinum Amulet [LM] |
| (er) | 283: | score to zero -> score to zero or below |
| (er) | 294: | ornaments and other curios -> ornaments, and other curios [LM] |
| (er) | 294: | dusty and -> dusty, and |
| (er) | 294: | smoky-coloured fluid -> smoke-coloured fluid [ik: maybe] |
| (er) | 298: | circulate -> circular |
| (er) | 300: | scream, 'I -> scream. 'I |
| (er) | 300: | Naar, 'you -> Naar. 'You |
| (er) | 304: | eg -> e.g. |
| (er) | 304: | combat ratio -> Combat Ratio |
| (er) | 305: | repair (erase -> repair. (Erase [LM] [jb: fix] |
| (er) | 305: | Items). -> Items.) [LM] [jb: fix] |
| (er) | 308: | a defence that augments -> a defence that complements [LM] [jb: fix] |
| (er) | 317: | Kai-alchemy but -> Kai-alchemy, but |
| (er) | 323: | Grand Mastery skills -> Grand Master skills |
| (er) | 323: | you reign in your steed -> you rein in your steed [LM] |
| (er) | 323, 337: | northern quarter -> North Quarter [as per 238] |
| (er) | 324: | briney -> briny |
| (er) | 328: | useless (delete -> useless. (Delete [LM] [jb: fix] |
| (er) | 328: | List). -> List.) [LM] [jb: fix] |
| (er) | 333: | death cry -> death-cry |
| (er) | 334: | it) and -> it), and |
| (er) | 337: | lop-sidedly -> lopsidedly |
| (er) | 338: | sword -> Sword [it can be taken] |
| (er) | 347: | divination -> Divination |
| (er) | Combat Rules Summary: | cross reference -> cross-reference |
| (er) | Combat Rules Summary: | This is when ENDURANCE points of either character fall to 0. -> This is when ENDURANCE points of either character falls to 0 or below. |
| (er) | Combat Rules Summary: | Pick number from Random-> Pick a number from the Random |
| (er) | Combat Rules Summary: | Turn to Combat -> Turn to the Combat |
| (er) | Combat Rules Summary: | to random number -> to the random number |
| (er) | Combat Rules Summary: | when ENDURANCE -> when the ENDURANCE |
| (er) | Combat Rules Summary: | ignored, -> ignored; |
| Illustration Placements | ||
| Ensure the illustration data contains the correct dimensions for the illustration. | ||
| small 1 | Glyph | [so: 28, 173, 256] |
| small 2 | Giant Flowers | [so: 230] |
| small 3 | Time Bomb | [so: 177] |
| small 4 | Combination Lock | [so: 252] |
| small 5 | Dragonflies | [so: 334] |
| small 6 | Ziggurat and Tower | [so: 239] |
| small 7 | Huts | [so: 215, 285, 297] |
| small 8 | Skull-rock | [so: 120, 344] |
| small 9 | Ruined city | [so: 31, 140] |
| small 10 | "Laser" and Pack | [so: 21, 312] |
| small 11 | Monkey in cage | [so: 46] |
| small 12 | Cloud castle | [so: 109?] [jb: 50] |
| small 13 | Rapiers | [so: 304] |
| small 14 | Moonstone | [so: 112] |
| Fixed (Non Errata) | ||
| (ne) | Title Page: | Publication Date: 31 July 2007 [LM: ???] [SO: We only remember to update this when we actually release the book!] |
| (ne) | Title Page: | origins [LM: it isn't clear what origins is] [SO: Is there a website we can link to?] [jb: reworded jdbioXX.inc files to explain what Origins is] |
| (ne) | Acknowledgements: | [jb: Have we made sure that the acknowledgments are up-to-date? :) ] |
| (ne) | The Story So Far: | Readily the Kai Masters rose readily -> [LM: strike one 'readily'] [SO: The first "Readily" is anomolous, and not present in the original text. Removed.] |
| (ne) | The Story So Far: | them-selves -> themselves |
| (ne) | The Story So Far: | dispatched -> despatched [ik: revert this change; PAMoS says "dispatch (not despatch)"] |
| (ft) | The Game Rules: | [The Discipline bonuses mentioned do not affect your permanent scores. If you have completed previous adventures, the Disciplines that you have mastered may still be beneficial. See the Grand Master Rules section of the Readers' Handbook for details.] [and link to: http://www.projectaon.org/en/ReadersHandbook/] |
| (ne) | The Story So Far: | Remove superfluous space after <ch.emdash/> |
| (ne) | The Story So Far: | Your discovery, [so: Remove superfluous comma] |
| (ne) | The Story So Far: | Grand Master disciplines -> Grand Master Disciplines |
| (ne) | The Story So Far: | Old Kingdom Magic -> Old Kingdom magic |
| (ne) | The Story So Far: | and,by -> and, by |
| (ne) | The Game Rules [footnote]: | weapons’ imply that for -> weapons’ imply that, for [LM] [SO: This affects the other GM books as well] |
| (ft) | Grand Master Disciplines: | [The rules of the books in the Magnakai series (6-12) and the fact that the 'rank of Kai Grand Defender . . . means you are skilled in two . . . weapons' imply that for each book that you complete of the Grand Master series (13-20), you will gain mastery of an additional Weapon. For example, if you complete The Plague Lords of Ruel and have the Grand Master Discipline of Grand Weaponmastery at the beginning of the next book, you can choose an additional Weapon from the list to have mastery of.] |
| (ne) | Grand Master Disciplines: | Use PNG not GIF image. |
| (ne) | Grand Master Disciplines: | weapons.png missing |
| (ne) | Equipment: | quiver, dagger, food, rope, potion images missing. |
| (ne) | Equipment: | map of Northern Magnamund [so: make link to map] |
| (ne) | Equipment: | The illustrations of the Broadsword, Bow, Sword, and Axe are missing from the williams/ illustrations folder. They all appear in the original book. |
| (ne) | Rules For Combat: | (35-30 = +10). -> [LM: no it isn't] |
| (ne) | Improved Disciplines: | [A Kai Sun Lord using Kai-blast determines the damage inflicted on an enemy by picking two numbers from the Random Number Table. These numbers should be added together (a '0' = 1) and the resultant total equals the damage inflicted.] |
| (ne) | Improved Disciplines: | ultra-vision -> ultravision [ik: consistent with infravision as per PAMoS] |
| (ne) | Improved Disciplines: | ultra-violet -> ultraviolet [ik: as in 16tlov, 17tdoi] |
| (ne) | Improved Disciplines: | Kai-surge, Psi-surge or Mindblast -> Kai-surge, Psi-surge, or Mindblast [LM] |
| (ne) | Improved Disciplines: | water, mud, lava and quicksand -> water, mud, lava, and quicksand [LM] |
| (ft) | Improved Disciplines: | [The Strength spell is, in practice, also used in armed combat contrary to what is indicated here.] |
| (ne) | Improved Disciplines: | range and numbers of insects so affected increases -> range and number of insects so affected increase [LM] |
| (ne) | Improved Disciplines: | Time duration and degree of surface difficulty increases -> Time duration and degree of surface difficulty increase [LM] |
| (ne) | Improved Disciplines: | help a Grand Thane chose -> help a Grand Thane choose [LM] |
| (ne) | Improved Disciplines: | urns, jugs etc -> urns, jugs, etc [LM] |
| (ne) | Improved Disciplines: | gold, platinum and silver -> gold, platinum, and silver [LM] |
| (ne) | Improved Disciplines: | targetted -> targeted [LM] |
| (ne) | Improved Disciplines: | The range and duration of effect of this spell increases -> The range and duration of effect of this spell increase [LM] [jb: already fixed?] [SO: Is (ne) as the text actually occurs in a previous book.] |
| (ne) | Improved Disciplines: | The range of their detection increases as a Kai Grand Master -> The range of detection increases as a Kai Grand Master [LM] |
| (ne) | Improved Disciplines: | Kai Grand Thane is able to immobilize a single hostile creature anywhere within twenty feet of themselves. -> Kai Grand Thanes are able to immobilize a single hostile creature anywhere within twenty feet. [LM] |
| (ne) | Kai Wisdom: | Lone Wolf [itals] |
| (ne) | 1: | is. deeply -> is deeply |
| (ne) | 1: | [so: choice 1 should link to Section 195 (link broken)] |
| (ne) | 1: | use repel it -> use your psychic Kai defences to repel it |
| (ne) | 2: | it come -> it comes [LM] |
| (ft) | 3, 201: | Section 98 of Dawn of the Dragons suggests that you may be able to add 4 to your COMBAT SKILL when using the Sommerswerd in the Plane of Darkness. |
| (ne) | 6: | by length of steel cable -> by a length of steel cable [LM] |
| (ne) | 6: | Magi magic -> Magi-magic [ik: as in the PAMoS] |
| (ne) | 9: | rubble- heaped -> rubble-heaped |
| (ft) | 10: | [so: requires a footnote: 'This is the correct answer to the gemstone lock puzzle in Section 210.'] |
| (ne) | 11: | light- headed -> light-headed |
| (ne) | 14, 39, 198, 277, 279, 292, 319: | Lightning Hand [spell] |
| (ne) | 18, 210, 251, 320: | map [link] |
| (ft) | 18, 177, 210, 251, 252, 320: | [LM: Footnote saying that the correct section will have footnote confirming] |
| (ne) | 18, 210, 251, 320: | [so: Can we improve this puzzle for partially-sighted readers?] [so/jb] |
| (ne) | 21: | you pose open a helmet -> you prise open a helmet [LM] |
| (ft) | 23: | [so: requires a footnote: 'This is the correct answer to the portal lock puzzle in Section 18 and Section 320.'][LM] |
| (ne) | 26, 54 [x2], 126, 198 [x2], 245, 293, 329: | Teleport [spell] |
| (ne) | 29: | hail -> hall [LM] |
| (ne) | 34: | that, glimmers -> that glimmers |
| (ne) | 35, 78, 151, 160, 298: | Lone Wolf [itals] |
| (ne) | 36: | his feet he is -> his feet; he is [LM] [SO: 'his feet:'] |
| (ne) | 43: | Kai! [spell] |
| (ne) | 57: | Gloar! [spell] |
| (ne) | 58, 233: | Counterspell [spell] |
| (ft) | 60: | [so: requires a footnote: 'This is the correct answer to the combination lock puzzle in Section 252.'] |
| (ft) | 64: | [so: requires a footnote: 'This is the correct answer to the portal lock puzzle in Section 251.'] |
| (ne) | 62, 98, 100, 112: | hail -> hall [LM] |
| (ne) | 66: | companions wailing below -> companions waiting below [LM] |
| (ne) | 72: | booby trap, you have -> booby trap; you have [LM] [SO: Should read: 'booby trap, and you have] |
| (ne) | 74, 263: | Pop! [onomatopoeia] |
| (ne) | 80: | hurling -> hurtling |
| (ne) | 81: | Hold Enemy [spell] |
| (ne) | 96: | effective although -> effective, although |
| (ne) | 97: | your tight forearm -> your right forearm [LM] |
| (ne) | 99: | knocked fiat -> knocked flat [LM] |
| (ne) | 100: | carries you .up a -> carries you up a [LM] |
| (ne) | 112: | booms.//'Now -> booms. 'Now |
| (ne) | 113, 219: | Shield [spell] |
| (ne) | 114: | 105 -> 108 |
| (ne) | 119: | crack! [onomatopoeia] |
| (ne) | 128 (Caption): | "he eyes of the gigantic serpent radiate waves of evil, chilling you to your soul". There should be a "T" there, as in "The eyes". [Anders Österberg] |
| (ne) | 129: | click! [onomatopoeia] |
| (ne) | 130: | back, It -> back. It |
| (ft) | 130: | [so: requires a footnote: 'This is the correct answer to the time bomb puzzle in Section 177.'] |
| (ne) | 136: | (Remember to reduce your total number of arrows by 2.) [itals] |
| (ne) | 138, 209: | Flameshaft [spell] |
| (ne) | 138, 198, 292: | wumph! [onomatopoeia] |
| (ne) | 146, 164: | Levitation [spell] |
| (ne) | 152: | Halt Missile [spell] |
| (ne) | 157: | ante-chamber -> antechamber |
| (ne) | 174: | The illustration seems out of place. It fits in 31, later in the story, where it is also currently placed. [jb] |
| (ne) | 177, 252: | [LM: The missing image of number sequence makes this section unplayable currently] |
| (ne) | 177, 252: | [so: Can we improve this puzzle for partially-sighted readers by means of ALT image text?] [so] |
| (ft) | 182: | I don't believe that it's necessarily true that Lone Wolf encountered Crypt Spawn in the Graveyard of the Ancients. This isn't terribly important to our work, but I wonder if this is also true for the new Flight from the Dark. [jb] [so: It is possible for Lone Wolf to have visited the Graveyard of the Ancients without encountering any Crypt Spawn.] |
| (ne) | 194: | Breathe Water [spell] |
| (ne) | 209: | Energy Grasp [spell] |
| (ne) | 210: | named [itals] |
| (ne) | 234: | Hold Enemy [spell] |
| (ne) | 256: | 53 -> 53. |
| (ne) | 260: | Skyrider [itals] |
| (ne) | 260: | south-westerly -> southwesterly [line-break] |
| (ne) | 270: | Invisible Shield [spell] |
| (ne) | 272: | Strength [spell] |
| (ne) | 290: | See Illusion [spell] |
| (ne) | 301: | dispatches -> despatches [ik: revert this change; PAMoS says "dispatch (not despatch)"] |
| (ne) | 304: | -4 [encode as 'minus' 4] |
| (ne) | 328: | Weapons List [link] |
| (ne) | 333: | yourself a from -> yourself from [LM] |
| (ne) | Errata: | (18) Deleted ‘ at the front of this book’. [LM: Section 18 still has this phrase.] |
| (ne) | Random Number Table: | Need new RNT generated for this book. [so: Would it be possible to generate all the remaining RNTs at once? That might be a bit more efficient.] |
| (ne) | Action Chart: | Need new acdscplz.png with 10th Discipline |
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| (ne) | Title: | being an old friend of Joe's -> being an old friend of Joe [LM] | |
| (er) | The Story So Far: | Helgedad. In [so: start new paragraph with 'In' as per this section all other GM books.] | |
| (er) | The Story So Far: | Akagazad and Kaag -> Akagazad, and Kaag | |
| (ft) | The Game Rules: | [Note that this list now includes the Silver Bracers and Korlinium Scabbard. These items are restored to the list of permissible items from the Kai and Magnakai series again in this book after being omitted beginning in The Captives of Kaag. Presumably, therefore, it should be permissible to leave the Silver Bracers and Korlinium Scabbard in safekeeping at the monastery during the previous books and retrieve them at the outset of this adventure.] | |
| (er) | The Game Rules: | Note that this list now includes the Silver Bracers and Korlinium Scabbard. etc... [LM: Did anyone ever ask Mr. Dever whether this was an intentional omission in the first place? It's always seemed silly that the items would vanish.] [SO: Footnote only needed in Book 17. Removed] | |
| (er) | Equipment: | your monastery -> your Monastery | |
| (er) | Equipment: | 3 points -> 5 points | |
| (er) | Kai Wisdom: | a wise choice will enable any player -> a wise choice will enable all players (to agree with 'their' in number) [LeRoy McSwain, Jan 2007] | |
| (er) | Kai Wisdom: | will enable any player -> will enable all players | |
| (er) | 6, 24, 26, 114, 184, 225, 245, 312, 314: | camouflage -> Camouflage | |
| (er) | 6, 37, 145, 312: | Kai rank of -> rank of | |
| (er) | 8, 11, 15, 56, 82, 97, 102, 197, 215, 248, 346: | healing -> Healing | |
| (er) | 10, 261: | head-first [so: Is this correct?] [ik: yes] | |
| (er) | 19: | vain, eh!’ -> vain, eh?’ [LM] [jb: can't decide - leave it] | |
| (er) | 22: | corolla, from where -> corolla, where [LM] [jb: it's correct as-is] | |
| (er) | 27, 37, 71, 77, 230, 287, 336: | tracking -> Tracking | |
| (er) | 31: | You follow them -> You follow it [LM] | |
| (ft) | 35: | If you have ever visited the Graveyard of the Ancients -> [tp: You may have entered the Graveyard without encountering the Crypt Spawn mentioned in the next section (s.182). Okay, so that's a very detailed piece of trivia to expect players to remember -- worse even than knowing if they met Prarg at Cetza, I think -- but it may still be worth footnoting, here or in section 182; it does no harm for the player to be mistaken either way.] [jb: We've already footnoted 182 with this possibility. If I recall, we wanted to avoid spoilers for those who hadn't visited the Graveyard.] [cn: Whats worse? additional spoilers (technically its a spoiler that theres a Graveyard of Ancients in a previous book) to someone who hasnt visited the Graveyard, or spoilers and/or confusing/altering what happened to someone who HAS read that book but didnt find the crypt spawn? Having been to the Graveyard, its far more likely you DIDNT come across them (12.5% chance of being explicitly told you are facing Crypt Spawn if you are being totally random in non-deterministic choices). Personally, Id lean towards saying: "if you have ever visited the Graveyard of the Ancients and encountered Crypt Spawn in a previous Lone Wolf adventure" and drop the footnote.] | |
| (er) | 38, 84, 163, 192, 244: | rock from where -> rock where (OR) rock from which [LM] [jb: correct as-is - "hollow in the porous rock" is the referent of "from where"] | |
| (er) | 38: | Anders Österberg: sweep/swoop. I don't know if this is an error, but it looks a bit odd. The winds sweep Lone Wolf close to a rock, and then, just a few lines below, Lone Wolf suddenly swoop past some more rocks. English is not my first language, so I had to look this up in a dictionary. But I'm still not sure I understand the distinction between the words. In this case the sweeping seems to indicate that it's an involuntary movement (due to the strong winds), but if I'm not mistaken swooping means an intentional movement, like a bird of prey swoops down on its target. So Lone Wolf swoops past a rock he deliberately intended to miss? I don't know if this counts as an error, but to me it sounds a bit weird, as Lone Wolf first sweeps, and then swoops past some rocks. Wouldn't it be better to use sweep in both cases?] [so: The text is not in error because the winds sweep you and your mount (i.e. against your will), but then your mount swoops (i.e. a deliberate manoeuvre).] | |
| (er) | 56, 102, 248: | Anders Österberg: Darkened staircase/stairway/stairwell. Again, English is not my first language, but shouldn't it just read "dark"? Otherwise it would indicate that it's darker than it normally is. [so: No, the stairwell is darker than the ambient light in the room you're standing in, hence "darkened".] | |
| (er) | 57: | Gloar! -> 'Gloar!' [LM] | |
| (er) | 57: | power word -> word of power [jb: correct as-is] | |
| (er) | 61: | If you possess Kai-alchemy, -> If you possess Kai-alchemy, and have attained the rank of Grand Crown, [LM] [tp: It is unnecessary to check your rank; you must be a Grand Crown to have reached this section.] | |
| (er) | 61: | If you do not possess this skill, -> If you do not possess this skill, or have yet to attain this level of Kai Mastery, [LM] [tp: It is unnecessary to check your rank; you must be a Grand Crown to have reached this section.] | |
| (er) | 62, 220, 257, 338: | or a Bow -> nor a Bow | |
| (er) | 67, 273: | hang on to -> hang onto | |
| (er) | 67: | vortex (lose -> vortex (Lose [LM] | |
| (er) | 71: | You are moving between cover [LM: This is probably right, but it sounds funny to me] [jb: agreed, it sounds funny, but it's correct] | |
| (er) | 74: | Pop! -> pop! [LM] [SO: No, sometimes Joe capitalises onomatopoeic words in mid-sentence] | |
| (er) | 77, 246: | Anders Österberg: "toa trees". I don't know what a Toa tree is, but shouldn't it be capitalized since it's a name?] [so: No (cf. oak tree, beech tree, etc.).] | |
| (er) | 80: | between just you and I -> between just you and me [LM: Although as part of a quote it may be acceptable to leave it and claim that WB doesn't use good grammar, possibly as part of his insidious plan to desolate Magnamund] | |
| (er) | 92: | wall, ‘we -> wall, ‘We [LM] | |
| (er) | 98: | enthuses, ‘these -> enthuses, ‘These [LM] | |
| (er) | 98: | ‘Must hurry,’ she mumbles, ‘must, must hurry.’ -> ‘Must hurry,’ she mumbles, ‘Must, must hurry.’ (OR) ‘Must hurry...’ she mumbles, ‘must, must hurry.’ [LM] | |
| (er) | 112: | "Your return to Sommerlund will not be alone, Wolf's Bane". Anders Österberg: This strikes me as an odd thing to say. Shouldn't it read: "You will not return to Sommerlund alone, Wolf's Bane"?] [jb: This omission is OK. No need to change.] | |
| (er) | 120: | Lone Wolf. A final farewell -> Lone Wolf, a final farewell [LM] | |
| (er) | 131: | incarcerated -> interred [LM] [jb: I'm trying to decide if this is just metaphoric speech] [IK: agree with Jon] | |
| (er) | 148, 174: | hunting -> Hunting | |
| (er) | 166: | blow (lose -> blow (Lose [LM] | |
| (er) | 178, 305: | corolla, to where -> corolla, where (cf ref 22) [LM] [jb: correct as-is] | |
| (er) | 182, 206: | immediately [LM: Why immediately? Does it really matter when you use the leaves?] [jb: flavor text?] | |
| (er) | 185: | force (lose -> force (Lose [LM] | |
| (er) | 189: | more, ‘we -> more, ‘We [LM] | |
| (er) | 199: | strikes terror in -> strikes terror into [jb: This seems fine to my ears.] | |
| (er) | 212: | If your total is now 3 or less, turn to 291. -> If your total is now 3 or lower, turn to 291. [LM] | |
| (er) | 212: | If it is 4 or higher, turn to 166. -> If it is 4 or higher, turn to 166. [LM] | |
| (er) | 222: | face-first [is this correct?] [ik: yes] | |
| (er) | 230: | careering -> careening [so: maybe? cf. PAMoS] [jb: There's not enough information to tell if this is incorrect. Leave as-is.] | |
| (er) | 238 [x3]: | South Gate -> south gate | |
| (er) | 244: | backhanded -> back-handed | |
| (er) | 249: | nose-first [is this correct?] [ik: yes] | |
| (er) | 251: | games rules -> The Game Rules [also: link] [jb: I don't think it's strictly necessary in this case; it seems to be used in a generic sense] | |
| (er) | 260: | the sibilant hiss of their fearful whispers -> the sibilant hiss of its fearful whispers [LM] | |
| (er) | 268: | endured, 'we -> endured, 'We [LM] | |
| (er) | 323, 337: | northern quarter -> Northern Quarter | |
| (er) | 331: | blue-stained fangs. But it -> blue-stained fangs, but it [LM] [jb: while technically correct, I think it makes the previous sentence unwieldy - leave as-is] | |
| (er) | 331: | "Nothing could have prepared you for the sight that now meets your gaze - it is the foulest you have ever seen." There should be a "thing" there, as in "it is the foulest thing you have ever seen". The text below the illustration is correct. [Anders Österberg] | |
| (er) | 336: | maze of empty passageways which leads -> maze of empty passageways which lead (i.e. the passageways lead rather than the maze leads) [LM] [jb: I see where this is coming from, but it's debatable - I vote for leaving as-is] | |
| (er) | 342: | stamina (lose -> stamina (Lose [LM] | |
| (er) | 350: | "If you are to prevent the Dark God from launching his armies of night into Magnamund..." I'm fairly certain Armies of Night should be capitalized. [Anders Österberg] | |