4: War of the Wizards
| Pending |
| Fixed (Errata) | ||
| (er) | Many: | on to -> onto (REJECTED: 25, 360 [opens on to]; 121 [hangs on to]; 229 [hold on to]) (FIXED: 30, 107 [step onto]; 128 [vault onto]; 248 [fall onto]; 134 [Moonstone onto]; 137 [fire onto]; 139, 153 [power...onto]; 193 [blows onto]; 248 [back onto]; 279 [out onto]; 353 [and onto]; 268 [onto the plain]) |
| (er) | The Coming Of Grey Star: | creators of the Earth -> creators of Magnamund [LM] |
| (er) | The Coming Of Grey Star: | enchantments, magical mists and mage winds -> enchantments, magical mists, and mage winds [LM] |
| (er) | story: | but you did not -> but you did not stay [LM] |
| (er) | The Story So Far: | Shadakine Wytch and her warriors, but you did not, -> Shadakine Wytch and her warriors, but you did not stay, [as reported by Kayvohn via the Contact portal.] |
| (er) | The Story So Far: | the Gate -> the Shadow Gate |
| (er) | The Story So Far: | Elemental plane -> Elemental Plane |
| (er) | The Game Rules: | If at any time your ENDURANCE score falls to zero, you -> If at any time your ENDURANCE score falls to zero or below, you |
| (er) | Powers: | Air, Fire, Earth and Water -> Air, Fire, Earth, and Water [LM] |
| (er) | Powers: | mind control, telepathy and autosuggestion -> mind control, telepathy, and autosuggestion [LM] |
| (er) | Powers: | command winds, open cracks in the earth, cause earthquakes, raise storms and create other weather effects. -> command winds, open cracks in the earth, cause earthquakes, raise storms, and create other weather effects. [LM] |
| (er) | Rules for Combat: | This process of combat continues until ENDURANCE points of either the enemy or Lone Wolf are reduced to zero, ... If the enemy is dead, Lone Wolf proceeds but with his ENDURANCE and WILLPOWER points reduced. -> This process of combat continues until the ENDURANCE points of either the enemy or Lone Wolf are reduced to zero or below, ... If the enemy is dead, Lone Wolf proceeds but with his ENDURANCE and WILLPOWER points possibly reduced. |
| (er) | Rules for Combat: | at which point the one with the zero score is declared dead. -> at which point that combatant is declared dead. |
| (er) | Rules for Combat: | You now have the number of ENDURANCE points lost by Grey Star. To calculate the number lost by the enemy, multiply this by the number of WILLPOWER points that Grey Star elected to use. Now you have the final number of ENDURANCE points lost by both Grey Star and his enemy in this round of combat. (E represents points lost by the enemy; GS represents points lost by Grey Star.) -> GS represents the number of ENDURANCE points lost by Grey Star. To calculate the number lost by the enemy, multiply the number marked 'E' by the number of WILLPOWER points that Grey Star elected to use. Now you have the final number of ENDURANCE points lost by both Grey Star and his enemy in this round of combat. [LM: I thought former wording is possibly unclear--it sounds like the enemy always loses 3x as much as Grey Star] [JB: "...multiply this by..." -> "...multiply the number listed for the enemy by..."] |
| (er) | Sage Advice: | lesser magicks -> Leser Magicks |
| (er) | 1: | Wenat, Zhanis, Sena and the city of Forlu -> Wenat, Zhanis, Sena, and the city of Forlu [LM] |
| (er) | 2, 192: | failed, your -> failed; your [LM] |
| (er) | 3: | a handle and begin to turn them -> a handle and begin to turn it [LM] |
| (er) | 5, 180: | and hurl it against -> and hurl that power against [lm: otherwise it sounds like you're giving the moonstone to Agarash] [jb: How about this? "If you possess 3 WILLPOWER points, and wish to fill the Moonstone with your power and hurl its power against the wall, turn to 316."] |
| (er) | 12: | Temeris potion -> Temeris Potion |
| (er) | 19, 47, 142 [x2], 178, 182, 214, 224, 237, 246, 258, 298: | hills of Tilos -> Hills of Tilos [cf. Section 142] |
| (er) | 23, 99, 213, 321: | north east -> northeast [LM] |
| (er) | 23: | launch long-range attack -> launch a long-range attack [LM] |
| (er) | 23: | lake Dolani -> Lake Dolani |
| (er) | 38: | Ho there Dioka! -> Ho there, Dioka! |
| (er) | 41: | the speed of your reactions and the fierceness of your gaze paralyses -> the speed of your reactions and the fierceness of your gaze paralyse |
| (er) | 43: | Shadakine empire -> Shadakine Empire [LM] |
| (er) | 70: | south east -> southeast [LM] |
| (er) | 70, 76: | north west -> northwest [LM] |
| (er) | 91: | a vile hunched -> a vile, hunched [LM] |
| (er) | 91: | strenghtening -> strengthening |
| (er) | 92: | 'Who is it that is really afraid to fight, Shasarak, tell me that?' -> 'Who is it that is really afraid to fight? Shasarak, tell me that.' [LM] [so: Prefer "'Who is it that is really afraid to fight, Shasarak? Tell me that!'"] |
| (er) | 95: | tree, rock or bush -> tree, rock, or bush [LM] |
| (er) | 95: | By the Gods! |
| (er) | 97: | toad beasts, others are -> toad beasts; others are [LM] |
| (er) | 104: | The demon pack forms a large circle around you and stand -> The demon pack forms a large circle around you and they stand |
| (er) | 121: | gurgle obscenely, others -> gurgle obscenely; others [LM] |
| (er) | 123: | If you wish to evade combat after the first round, turn to 155. If you do not evade in the first round of combat, you must fight to the death. If you win, turn to 168. [LM] [so: in the first -> in the second] |
| (er) | 124: | large, clay bowl -> large clay bowl |
| (er) | 124: | Elemental plane -> Elemental Plane |
| (er) | 129: | Come . . . we -> Come . . . We [LM] |
| (er) | 132: | above the head -> above the heads [LM] |
| (er) | 139: | pair of monstrous eyes appears -> pair of monstrous eyes appear [bk] |
| (er) | 153: | pair of eyes appears -> pair of eyes appear [bk] |
| (er) | 153: | in their hundreds and attacks -> in its hundreds and attacks [lm: because both verbs are singular] [bk: I think changing sweeps -> sweep and attacks -> attack sounds less stilted than changing their -> its.] |
| (er) | 172: | moving at speed -> moving at great speed [LM] [so: UK English idiom to mean "moving quickly".] |
| (er) | 177: | lope, hop and shamble -> lope, hop, and shamble [LM] |
| (er) | 187: | kicks, blows and bites. -> kicks, blows, and bites. [LM] |
| (er) | 191: | it breathes, 'I have -> it breathes. 'I have [LM] |
| (er) | 191: | represent; the -> represent: the [LM] |
| (er) | 191: | emotionless eyes; colourless -> emotionless eyes, colourless [LM] |
| (er) | 191: | or feeling; like -> or feeling like [LM] |
| (er) | 191: | powerful, I am -> powerful; I am [LM] |
| (er) | 196: | forcefield -> force field |
| (er) | 198: | eyeblink -> eye-blink |
| (er) | 207: | dust, blood and flashing hooves -> dust, blood, and flashing hooves [LM] |
| (er) | 236: | bloodcurdling -> blood-curdling |
| (er) | 241: | a formulae -> formulae (or) a formula [LM] |
| (er) | 254: | Kazim; the -> Kazim, the [LM] |
| (er) | 260: | Daziarn plain -> Daziarn Plane [LM] |
| (er) | 268: | instilled in them by their -> instilled in it by its [lm: refers to pack] [tp: Treating the "instilling" as applying to each demon in the pack sounds much better to me. I think leaving it as-is is okay; the alternative correction would be to change "springs" to "spring", and change "pack" to "pack of demons" (or just "demons") to be consistent with our usage of collectives, singulars and plurals.] [bk: I'd prefer "the howling pack springs -> the howling pack spring"; but we do have to make one of these two changes.] |
| (er) | 271: | crawling writhing mass -> crawling, writhing mass [LM] |
| (er) | 282: | lean, haggard and dangerous blue eyes -> lean, haggard face and dangerous blue eyes [LM/tp] |
| (er) | 289, 338: | elemental plane -> Elemental Plane [LM] |
| (er) | 295: | pick again, otherwise, -> pick again; otherwise, [LM] |
| (er) | 310: | ears, skull, chest and limbs -> ears, skull, chest, and limbs [LM] |
| (er) | 310: | go, will not let go, as -> go -- will not let go -- as [LM] |
| (er) | 312: | following the broad trail east, deep into the gloom of the forest -> following the broad trail west, deep into the gloom of the forest [LM] |
| (er) | 318: | combined WILLPOWER and ENDURANCE point totals -> combined WILLPOWER and ENDURANCE point total [LM] |
| (er) | 328: | almost fail but -> almost fail, but |
| (er) | 337: | you Grey Star, -> you, Grey Star, [LM] |
| (er) | 348: | these once-great people -> this once-great people [LM] |
| (er) | 348: | north-western -> northwestern |
| (er) | 360: | comers -> corners [IK] |
| Fixed (Not Errata) | ||
| (ne) | The Game Rules [ftn] [x2]: | score falls to zero, you -> score falls to zero or below, you |
| (ne) | 328 [ftn]: | deduct 4 WILLPOWER points. (Cf. Section 12.) -> deduct 4 WILLPOWER points (cf. Section 12.). |
| (ne) | coming: | in search of a pace -> in search of a place [LM] |
| (ne) | story: | Masbate -> Masbaté [LM] |
| (ne) | powers: | , however difficult -> , however difficult, [LM] |
| (ne) | 143: | fan to the ground -> fall to the ground [LM] |
| (ne) | 158: | that you have' -> that you have.' [LM] |
| (ne) | 163: | My brothers they -> My brothers; they [LM] |
| (ne) | 163: | is along line -> is a long line [LM] |
| (ne) | 310: | will <em> |
| Rejected | ||
| (er) | Powers: | another's mind or cause them -> another's mind or cause him (or) others' minds or cause them [LM] [JB: The use of the third person plural pronoun as a gender-neutral singular pronoun is controversial but increasingly accepted.] |
| (er) | 6: | this far, you should -> this far; you should [LM] [so: Unnecessary] |
| (er) | 8: | item -> Item [LM] [so: Unnecessary] |
| (er) | 82: | She bares -> She bears [LM: this seems to be the correct sense] [so: 'bares' can be used to mean 'wields from a previously hidden position'] |
| (er) | 104: | forms a large circle around you and stand -> forms a large circle around you and stands [LM] |
| (er) | 105: | now the demons have gone -> now that the demons have gone [LM] [so: Unnecessary] |
| (er) | 145: | wizards, fight -> wizards. Fight [LM] [so: Unnecessary] |
| (er) | 145: | you provide. Who could -> you provide who could [LM] [so: Unnecessary] |
| (ft) | 154, 205: | [LM: Do we need to put the footnote about negative willpower etc. here? it follows a combat in ref236. although unlikely, it is possible to use up all the willpower in that battle] [tw: Using up all your 50+ WP in 236 is beyond unlikely, so I don't think we need to add this. There several other places in the books here you are told to use WP though you can _theoretically_ have spent all of them in a previous combat - like in the beginning of 01gstw. Shall we really footnote all of these?] |
| (er) | 184: | weeping wound -> gaping wound [LM] [so: Unnecessary--refers to the icor pouring from the open wound] |
| (ft) | 189, 219: | [LM: Do we need to put the footnote about negative willpower etc. here? it follows a combat in ref166. although unlikely, it is possible to use up all the willpower in that battle] [tw: Using up all your 50+ WP in 236 is beyond unlikely, so I don't think we need to add this. There several other places in the books here you are told to use WP though you can _theoretically_ have spent all of them in a previous combat - like in the beginning of 01gstw. Shall we really footnote all of these?] |
| (er) | 199: | within the eaves of the forest [LM: is 'eaves' a blunder for another word?] [so: The eaves of the forest means the edge of the forest, the outermost trees of a forest. Also refers to trees at the edge of a clearing in woodland.] |
| (er) | 237: | to their world? -> to their world. [LM] [so: See <http://www.englishpractice.com/grammar/correct-surely/>: "Note that sentences with surely often have question marks....When used with heavy stress, surely suggests that the speaker would like to believe something, but is beginning to lose hope." |
| (er) | 244: | scour -> scourge [LM] [so: unnecessary change; scour means to scrub off, e.g. a scouring pad is used for washing dirty pots and pans] |
| (er) | 254: | as the earth. -> as Magnamund (or) as the world [LM] [so: I think this means, "old as the soil", since earth is probably being used in that sense here] |
| (er) | 254: | peoples. Old -> peoples, old [LM] [so: Idiosyncratic speech style.] |
| (er) | 260: | and of how -> and how [LM] [so: Unnecessary] |
| (er) | 329: | delayed; not by -> delayed, not by [LM] |
| (er) | 337: | of heart. Brave but -> of heart, brave but [LM] [so: Or, "heart--brave"] |
| (er) | The Passing Of The Shianti: | The only Shadakine who did not return to the Sadi Desert was the Lady Tanith. [LM: I don't guess this is an error but is tanith really Shadakine? she appears to have pupils in her eyes] [so: Accoding to Shan in GStW Section 77: "Beware," warns Shan. "She is a Shadakine slave; she cannot be trusted."] |