27: Vampirium
| Pending |
| Pending (Not Errata) |
| Fixed (Errata) | ||
| (er) | Many: | on to -> onto (REJECTED: 22, 290, 340 [opens on to]; 287 [urge...on to the end]; 121 [opens out on to]) (FIXED: 275 [jump onto]; 119, 251, 277 [leap onto]; 85 [yourself onto]; 35,316 [it onto]; 13 [shake...onto]; 13, 310 [follow...onto]; 57 [jump...onto]; 219 [out onto]; 240 [steer onto]; 241, 280 [onto the bridge]) |
| (er) | The Story So Far: | It is Spring in the year MS 5084 -> It is spring in the year MS 5085 [jc: Book 26 took place "in early winter 5084, thirty-four years after the Massacre of the Kai". Also in the next paragraph is "Thirty-five years ago".] |
| (er) | Title Page, Grand Master's Wisdom: | Claw of Naar [remove itals] [jb: This looks like it's already been done but without an entry in the errata. Was it italicized originally? We should also do this in the blurb.] |
| (er) | The Story So Far [x2]: | elite -> élite |
| (er) | The Story So Far: | Kai monastery -> Kai Monastery |
| (er) | The Story So Far: | Free Alliance -> Freeland Alliance |
| (er) | The Story So Far: | monastery of the Kai -> Monastery of the Kai |
| (er) | The Story So Far: | the Monastery -> the monastery |
| (er) | The Story So Far: | autocracy of Bhanar -> Autocracy of Bhanar |
| (er) | The Story So Far: | Southern Dammerdon mountains -> Southern Dammerdon Mountains |
| (er) | The Story So Far: | Darklord armies -> Darkland armies [jb: Agreed.] |
| (er) | The Story So Far: | First Order of the Kai were -> First Order of the Kai was |
| (er) | The Story So Far: | Spring -> spring |
| (er) | The Game Rules: | that you will find at the front of this book. For ease of use and further adventuring, it is recommended that you photocopy these pages [remove] |
| (er) | The Game Rules: | on the last page of the book [remove] |
| (er) | The Game Rules [x2]: | ie -> i.e. |
| (er) | The Game Rules: | your number of -> your total of |
| (er) | The Game Rules: | normal weapons and -> normal weapons, and |
| (er) | The Game Rules: | ENDURANCE points fall to zero -> ENDURANCE points fall to zero or below |
| (er) | Kai Name: | elite -> élite |
| (er) | Kai Name: | You can record your personal Kai name on the bookplate which appear on the inside cover of this book. [remove] |
| (er) | Kai Weapon: | new-found -> newfound |
| (er) | Kai Weapon: | elite -> élite |
| (er) | Kai Weapon: | at the front of the book [remove] |
| (er) | Disciplines: | venoms and -> venoms, and |
| (er) | Disciplines: | symbols and -> symbols, and |
| (er) | Disciplines: | their COMBAT SKILL is reduced -> their ENDURANCE is reduced |
| (er) | Disciplines: | battle wounds -> battle-wounds |
| (er) | Disciplines: | Magi-Magic -> Magi-magic [heading] |
| (er) | Disciplines: | Old Kingdom battle magic -> Old Kingdom battle-magic |
| (er) | Disciplines: | magi-magic spells -> Old Kingdom Spells |
| (er) | Disciplines: | individual (or combinations of) elements that are available, -> individual elements that are available, or combinations thereof, |
| (er) | Disciplines: | remove or accelerate -> remove, or accelerate |
| (er) | Disciplines: | eg -> e.g. |
| (er) | Disciplines: | dialect and -> dialect, and |
| (er) | Disciplines: | Kai Weapon and any -> Kai Weapon, and any |
| (er) | Disciplines: | 1 to 3 -> one to three |
| (er) | Disciplines: | guild of magicians -> Guild of Magicians |
| (er) | Grand Master Disciplines: | strength and capacity of these fortresses increases -> strength and capacity of these fortresses increase [LM] [jb: Agreed] |
| (er) | Grand Master Disciplines: | Duration of the spirit-walk, and the protection afforded to his in animate body, increases -> Duration of the spirit-walk and the protection afforded to his inanimate body increase [LM] [jb: Agreed] |
| (er) | Grand Master Disciplines: | number and accuracy of these predictions increases -> number and accuracy of these predictions increase [LM] [jb: Agreed] |
| (er) | Equipment [x8]: | arrow(s) -> Arrow(s) |
| (er) | Equipment: | carry is two [two: itals] |
| (er) | Equipment [x8]: | bow -> Bow |
| (er) | Equipment: | quiver -> Quiver |
| (er) | Equipment: | eg -> e.g. |
| (er) | Rules for Combat: | on the inside back cover of this book [remove] |
| (er) | Equipment: | a sword or an axe -> a Sword or an Axe [LM / jb] |
| (er) | Equipment: | magical axe, sword, or broadsword -> magical Axe, Sword, or Broadsword |
| (er) | Equipment: | (Bows and Arrows) weapon -> Weapon |
| (er) | Rules for Combat: | Grand Master) -> Grand Master.) |
| (er) | Rules for Combat: | A summary of Combat Rules appears on the page after the Random Number Table. [remove] |
| (er) | Rules for Combat: | Only you may [you: bold; under Evasion of combat] [original is in italics] |
| (er) | Rules for Combat: | This process of combat continues until the ENDURANCE points of either the enemy or Lone Wolf are reduced to zero, at which point the one with the zero score is declared dead. If Lone Wolf is dead, the adventure is over. If the enemy is dead, Lone Wolf proceeds but with his ENDURANCE points reduced. -> This process of combat continues until the ENDURANCE points of either the enemy or Lone Wolf are reduced to zero or below, at which point that combatant is declared dead. If Lone Wolf is dead, the adventure is over. If the enemy is dead, Lone Wolf proceeds but with his ENDURANCE points possibly reduced. |
| (er) | Levels: | (You begin the New Order adventures at this level of Grand Mastery) -> - You begin the New Order adventures at this level of Grand Mastery [also: itals (ne)] |
| (er) | Improved Disciplines [x3]: | eg -> e.g. |
| (er) | Improved Disciplines: | rushes etc, -> rushes, etc., |
| (er) | Improved Disciplines: | ie -> i.e. |
| (er) | Improved Disciplines [x2]: | Kai Blast -> Kai-blast |
| (er) | Improved Disciplines: | Psi-surge or -> Psi-surge, or |
| (er) | Improved Disciplines: | lava and -> lava, and |
| (er) | Improved Disciplines: | Brotherhood spell -> Brotherhood Spell |
| (er) | Improved Disciplines: | flasks etc, -> flasks, etc., |
| (er) | Improved Disciplines: | A Kai Sun Lord using Kai-blast determines the damage inflicted on an enemy by picking two numbers from the Random Number Table. These numbers should be added together (a '0' = 1) and the resultant total equals the damage inflicted. [Add this; taken from LWC Newsletter #24] |
| (er) | Improved Disciplines: | 'Improved Grand Master Disciplines' [remove quote marks] |
| (er) | Improved Disciplines [x2]: | etc [so: Remove; etc. is unnecessary if the list is preceded by i.e. or e.g.; (ne) for Book 28] |
| (ne) | Improved Disciplines: | psychics -> psychically [PH] [so: Also (ne) in Book 28] |
| (er) | Improved Disciplines: | POINTS -> points [PH] [so: Also (ne) in Book 28] |
| (er) | Improved Disciplines: | conjuction -> conjunction [PH] [so: Also (ne) in Book 28] |
| (er) | Improved Disciplines: | arrow, or arrow-like -> Arrow, or Arrow-like [PH] [so: Also (ne) in Book 28] |
| (er) | Improved Disciplines: | Time duration and degree of surface difficulty increases -> Time duration and degree of surface difficulty increase [so: "Time duration--and degree of surface difficulty--increases"] |
| (er) | Improved Disciplines [x3]: | (sun lord -- grandweaponmastery) weapon -> Weapon [so: Reject at least the first instance; "non-magical weapon" is consistently uncapitalised across the whole series. Also (ne) in Book 28] [jb: Agreed with Simon. Reject the first instance and change the second and third.] |
| (er) | Improved Disciplines: | (sun lord -- grandweaponmastery) quarterstaff -> Quarterstaff [jb: Agreed.] |
| (er) | Grand Master's Wisdom: | gods -> Gods |
| (er) | 1: | south-easterly -> southeasterly |
| (er) | 3: | the shine has -> the shrine has |
| (er) | 5, 175: | potion -> Poglahm |
| (er) | 5, 27, 60: | [Add a period at the end of each option.] |
| (er) | 5, 9, 48, 52, 94, 166, 175: | backpack -> Backpack |
| (er) | 6, 53, 92, 173, 214, 233, 263, 266, 284, 330: | Old Kingdom spell -> Old Kingdom Spell |
| (er) | 6 ['s], 23, 29, 54, 115, 131 [+s], 172 [x2], 173, 253 [+s], 284, 312 [x2], 317, 326: | arrow(s) -> Arrow(s) |
| (er) | 6, 23, 115, 221, 253, 304 [x2], 312 [x2], 317, 326: | bow -> Bow |
| (er) | 6, 221: | Whoomph!, -> Whoomph! [also: onomatopoeia (ne)] |
| (er) | 11 [x2], 298 [x2]: | compass -> Siyenese Compass |
| (er) | 11 (Ill I Caption): | Peering round -> Peering around |
| (er) | 11, 298: | soldier's mess hall -> soldiers' mess hall |
| (er) | 12, 104, 166: | drawbolt -> bolt |
| (er) | 13: | Gildas, 'I -> Gildas. 'I |
| (er) | 13: | [The text of the note is in italics in the original book. Should we do this also?] [jb: I think this would be an appropriate place for <thought> tags.] |
| (er) | 14, 212, 240: | pathsmanship -> Pathsmanship |
| (er) | 14, 39, 40, 62, 76, 91, 119, 137, 167, 174, 195, 220, 240, 245, 250, 251, 256, 295, 304, 318, 335, 340 [x2]: | sixth sense -> Sixth Sense |
| (er) | 17, 27, 70, 257, 333: | Kai mastery -> Kai Mastery |
| (er) | 22, 119, 130, 187, 203, 243, 251, 253, 261, 290: | metres -> yards |
| (er) | 22, 290: | Grand Guardian, -> Grand Guardian or higher, |
| (er) | 23, 131: | quiver -> Quiver |
| (er) | 25, 161, 337: | agonising -> agonizing |
| (er) | 30, 119, 251: | mound...that now block -> mound...that now blocks [tp: Rejected, per my "<collective> of <plural> = plural" rule.] [bk: Accept. Contrary to our normal rule, I'd say that since rocks are inanimate objects, they're definitely acting as one.] |
| (er) | 31, 322: | out-running -> outrunning |
| (er) | 31, 322: | in a wooded -> on a wooded |
| (er) | 32, 223: | skills, or if you choose not to use them, or a Bow -> skills, nor a Bow, or if you choose not to use them |
| (er) | 33, 282, 326: | battle cry -> battle-cry |
| (er) | 46, 122, 248, 323: | Special Items list -> list of Special Items |
| (er) | 47: | fleeting -> fleeing |
| (er) | 49: | sight yet -> sight, yet |
| (er) | 54: | add 3 -> remember to add 3 |
| (er) | 57: | loud peeling -> loud pealing |
| (er) | 62, 89, 118, 174, 201, 204, 256, 295, 340: | Siyenese compass -> Siyenese Compass |
| (er) | 62, 174, 256, 295, 340: | military quarter -> Military Quarter |
| (er) | 62, 174, 256, 295, 340: | compass, and your Kai sixth sense, -> Compass and your Kai Sixth Sense |
| (er) | 63: | out-run -> outrun |
| (er) | 64 [x2], 293 [x2]: | ie, -> i.e. |
| (er) | 64, 293: | 0, 2, 4, 6, or 8 -> 2, 4, 6, 8, or 0 |
| (er) | 65, 69, 75, 120, 135, 151, 158, 182, 199, 215, 221, 247, 319: | Brotherhood spell -> Brotherhood Spell |
| (er) | 69, 92: | If your total score is now is 4 or lower [lm: one 'is' is redundant.] |
| (er) | 72: | Backpack Items list -> list of Backpack Items |
| (er) | 72: | You must now erase from your list of Backpack Items the Claw of Naar -> You must now erase from your Action Chart the Claw of Naar [claw of naar is a special item.] [jb: Agreed.] |
| (er) | 76: | Poghram -> Poghlam |
| (er) | 80: | weapons -> Weapons |
| (er) | 80, 112, 136, 206, 318: | tiger's head emblem -> tiger's-head emblem [tp] [so: cf. 02smr "globe-of-the-world emblem" (16, 241), but also "ace of spades emblem" (30, 82, 210); 06tkot "toa tree emblem" (137); 23mh "tiger's head emblem" (84), "eagle's head emblem" (159), but also "eagle's-head emblem" (167, 256); 24rw "circle-and-star" emblem (102); 25totw "blazing sun emblem" (109, 122); 28thos "tiger's-head emblem" (84), but also "tiger's head emblem" (117, 256).] [JDu: Hmm - I personally prefer the non-hyphenated version (I don't think I would have thought to hyphenate something like this if I were writing.) I guess it comes down to clarity - but I think I would probably use quotes rather than a hyphen if there was an issue with clarity (ducks for cover!).] [bk: Agree. "Tiger's-head" modifies "emblem". I guess hyphenate all of them, then.] |
| (er) | 81, 242: | Xanons -> Xanon [cf. Section 245 et al] |
| (er) | 81, 134, 242: | queuing -> queueing |
| (er) | 82, 102, 220, 310: | Magnakai healing skills -> Kai healing skills [jc: Standardize Kai/Magnakai in this book, in sect. 10, 82, 102, 165, 213, 264, 310 and 321.] |
| (er) | 83: | loathe -> loath |
| (er) | 86: | come a squad -> comes a squad |
| (er) | 86: | Special Item -> Backpack Item [pk: (see Sect. 76, The Red Key is a Backpack Item, not a Special Item) [Patrick Kalinauskas]] [jb: Agreed.] |
| (er) | 87: | the talisman -> the Gold Talisman |
| (er) | 88: | shield -> <i>Shield</i> [lm: as in ref.185] |
| (er) | 90: | consumate -> consummate |
| (er) | 91, 250: | plains' grass -> plains grass |
| (er) | 95: | hoods, then -> hoods; then |
| (er) | 99: | Kai powers -> Magnakai powers |
| (er) | 103, 228: | which you carry in your pack [remove] |
| (er) | 104: | tower, then -> tower, and then |
| (er) | 107: | 93 or higher -> 9 or higher |
| (er) | 108: | curing -> Curing |
| (er) | 110, 227, 235, 331: | storeroom -> store room |
| (er) | 112, 318: | elite -> élite |
| (er) | 115: | rank of Kai -> rank of |
| (er) | 116: | take hold the blanket roll -> take hold of the blanket roll [lm: cf.158] |
| (er) | 117: | menacingly quiet -> quiet, menacing |
| (er) | 128: | reproachfully. 'No [Paragraph break at this point] |
| (er) | 128, 327: | claim back -> reclaim |
| (er) | 130: | woodsmoke -> wood smoke |
| (er) | 131: | You must now erase half of all the Arrows you carry, rounding the figure up to the nearest whole number where appropriate. [lm: are you to round up the half that you subtract or the total number of arrows that you carry?] [jb: Good question. I could only find a couple of other places where the author talks about rounding numbers up or down (is my regex-fu failing me?). Both cases (03btng:192 and 04wotw:125) were in the Grey Star books. All cases that I found suffer from a similar problem. I tend to think you should round the number of arrows lost, but that's just me. What would we say in a footnoote?] [jb: Great point. Thanks for finding a non-arbitrary reason to side one way or the other. So, I agree with Simon's suggestion of changing "figure" to "the number of Arrows lost".] |
| (er) | 134, 301: | storerooms -> store rooms |
| (er) | 134: | hidden, then -> hidden, and then |
| (er) | 136: | well-appointed -> well appointed |
| (er) | 137, 277, 310: | captain -> Captain |
| (er) | 137, 139: | Gildas's -> Gildas' [cf. Corrections made in Book 23] |
| (er) | 137: | Northern Gulf -> northern gulf [jb: Agreed.] |
| (er) | 139: | sword-belt -> sword belt |
| (er) | 142, 198: | side-steps -> sidesteps |
| (er) | 142, 198: | rib-cage -> rib cage |
| (er) | 143: | birds who -> birds that |
| (er) | 146: | Main Square -> main square [jb: Agreed.] |
| (er) | 149: | greets your -> greet your |
| (er) | 153: | bardsmanship -> Bardsmanship |
| (er) | 154: | 266 -> 266. |
| (er) | 154: | 135 -> 135. |
| (er) | 154: | 51 -> 51. |
| (er) | 154: | 230 -> 230. |
| (er) | 159: | per rider, that's 20 -> per rider; that's 20 |
| (er) | 165: | foot, then -> foot; then |
| (er) | 166: | inside, then -> inside, and then |
| (er) | 166: | key -> Red Key |
| (er) | 171, 188: | Kai curing -> Magnakai Curing |
| (er) | 172: | head over tail -> head-over-tail |
| (er) | 172, 330: | on-rushing -> onrushing |
| (er) | 172, 199, 330: | continue, to 18. -> continue, turn to 18. |
| (er) | 176: | Remove quote marks from thought-speech. [also: thought-speech in Itals (ne)] |
| (er) | 176: | Your patience and your effort is soon rewarded -> are soon rewarded |
| (er) | 177: | through, then -> through, and then |
| (er) | 178: | armour, then -> armour, and then |
| (er) | 181: | much-favoured |
| (er) | 185: | shield spell -> <spell>Shield</spell> spell |
| (er) | 186: | have found who -> have found whom [tp: Definitely agreed.] [bk: Accept (though it sounds a bit awkward).] |
| (er) | 190: | stikes -> strikes |
| (er) | 199: | the creature's head -> the leading creature's head [lm: the specific target has not yet been stated] [jb: Agreed, though how about "closest" instead?] |
| (er) | 200: | much-practiced |
| (er) | 206 [x2]: | Khea Khan -> Khea-khan [as per Book 28] |
| (er) | 217: | ante-chamber -> antechamber |
| (er) | 218, 286: | gold crowns -> Gold Crowns |
| (er) | 219: | they enter -> they will enter |
| (er) | 219: | [jc: Change the third and fourth choose. It should be 0: 123 (death), 1-3: 300 (-3 EP), 4-7: 192 (-2 EP), 8 or more: 254 (-1 EP).] |
| (er) | 219: | forward -> forwards |
| (er) | 221: | bow, then -> Bow, and then |
| (er) | 222: | armour, then -> armour, and then |
| (er) | 225: | ravine, 'that -> ravine. 'That |
| (er) | 225: | ask a favour?’ Rimoah nods -> ask a favour?’ // Rimoah nods [lm] [so: Or, merge the paragraph ending "Rimoah nods his reply." with the subsequent paragraph.] [JDu: I think I agree that the paragraphing suggested below by Simon seems to make sense (very non-committal, sorry!).] |
| (er) | 227: | creaks opens -> creaks open |
| (er) | 230: | If you possess the Kai Weapon ‘Magnara’ [lm: you can't get here with magnara] [so: Well spotted! Deleted this sentence.] |
| (er) | 235, 281: | mindblast -> Mindblast [jb: These don't seem to refer to a Kai Discipline but to a generic blast of mind energy (e.g. "You launch a mindblast at the angry sergeant..."). I can't find any other similar examples in the books. Instead, how about "mind blast" in order to prevent confusion?] [ik: There is a precedence concerning the generic use of "mindshield" (as opposed to the Kai Discipline of Mindshield). In 08tjoh:230 and in 12tmod:141, "mindshield" is used as description for a generic shield against mind energy. We have neither changed this to "mind shield" nor to "mind-shield". Consequently, I suggest to also leave "mindblast" as-is.] [jb: This a good point and I was about to agree with you, but it made me look for other cases of "(a|your) [Mm]indblast" and there are only few cases, but they are all "Mindblast" except for these two. It makes me hesitate. Obviously Joe was OK with capitalizing in cases like this, so maybe we should capitalize them all just to be consistent. If we do, we may want to reconsider the two cases of uncapitalized "mindshield".] |
| (er) | 237: | lookout, then -> lookout, and then |
| (er) | 240: | a corridor...line -> a corridor...lines |
| (er) | 243: | Table.//If -> Table. If |
| (er) | 246: | pack, then -> pack, and then |
| (er) | 251: | silence, then -> silence; then |
| (er) | 253: | All four of your Arrows find their mark -> All four of your Arrows find their marks [tp: Grammatically defensible, but seems (to me) to violate the usual pattern of the idiom ("finds its mark"). I'm happy with the sentence as-is; if we're dead set on being strictly correct, I would prefer, "Each of the four Arrows finds its mark".] [bk: Accept. You were shooting at multiple creatures, so the arrows are finding multiple marks.] |
| (er) | 256: | dimly-lit -> dimly lit |
| (er) | 261: | Kai rank of -> rank of Kai |
| (er) | 261: | Defender, turn -> Defender or higher |
| (er) | 261: | Master Superior, turn -> Master Superior or higher, turn |
| (er) | 264: | Healing -> Curing |
| (er) | 268: | click [onomatopoeia] |
| (er) | 268 (Ill XVII Caption): | Innkeeper -> innkeeper |
| (er) | 268: | breath, then -> breath, and then |
| (er) | 269: | bowfire [so: Is this OK? Cf. Book 12] [so: "bow-fire" (cf. "bow-skill" errata in Section 336 of 18dotd.] |
| (er) | 272: | Sentinel, -> Sentinel or higher, |
| (er) | 273: | Well I -> Well, I |
| (er) | 273: | two, then -> two, and then |
| (er) | 273: | a gust of ale-soaked air and the jingle of bells interrupts the -> interrupt the |
| (er) | 273: | gust of ale-soaked air and the jingle of bells interrupts -> gust of ale-soaked air and the jingle of bells interrupt [tp: Agreed; this appears to already have been changed in the test version. By the way, am I the only one to whom "a gust... and the jingle" sounds awkward?] |
| (er) | 283: | become irate -> becomes irate |
| (er) | 287: | and then turn him -> and then turn them |
| (er) | 294: | your life and your mission ends here -> end here |
| (er) | 302: | silence, then -> silence; then |
| (er) | 304: | with the other -> with the others |
| (er) | 304: | weapon -> Weapon [jb: Agreed, though this is a marginal case.] |
| (er) | 306: | the patrol are -> the patrol is [tp: <collective> of <collective> = singular (e.g. "the first wave of the horde comes") ] [bk: Just to confirm, since you said at the top that this was a list of rejections, this particular case is actually an Accept.] |
| (er) | 311: | ietms -> items |
| (er) | 316: | gold crown -> Gold Crown |
| (er) | 316: | crown -> Crown |
| (er) | 318: | If you have yet to attain this level of Kai rank, -> If you do not possess this Discipline, or have yet to attain this level of Kai rank, [jc: In section 334, you could use also Grand Pathmanship discipline.] |
| (er) | 318: | If you have attained the Kai rank of Sun Lord, turn to 49. [lm: this assumes that you have grand huntmastery, but it is possible to arrive here using grand pathsmanship instead] |
| (er) | 325: | axe -> Axe |
| (er) | 318: | If you have attained the Kai rank of Sun Lord, -> If you possess Grand Huntmastery, and have attained the Kai rank of Sun Lord, [jc: In section 334, you could use also Grand Pathmanship discipline.] |
| (er) | 320: | ring -> Tiger Ring |
| (er) | 330: | thud [onomatopoeia] |
| (er) | 330: | the onrushing creature -> the leader of the onrushing creatures [jb: Agreed, but again how about "the closest of the onrushing creatures" instead?] |
| (er) | 334: | enemy squad are -> enemy squad is [tp: Agreed -- "squad is".] [bk: Accept (no plural action involved).] |
| (er) | 336: | report, then -> report, and then |
| (er) | 338: | speed of his movements increase -> speed of his movements increases [tp: Ooh, unusual. I'd agree. ("Speed" is not really a collective. This tentatively suggests a new rule: "<single quality> of <plural> = singular".) ] [bk: Accept. This doesn't fall under <collective> of <plural> because "speed" isn't a collection of movements.] |
| (er) | 339: | belt, then -> belt, and then |
| (er) | 339: | steeply sloping -> steeply-sloping |
| (er) | 340: | Kai sense -> Kai sixth sense |
| (er) | 342: | in the middle track -> in the middle of the track |
| (er) | 343: | watch you, now begin -> watch you now begin |
| (er) | 344: | and rolls away -> and he rolls away [lm: the burning bit of wood is still on the claw for you to jab it at the autarch again] |
| (er) | 345: | you whisper, ‘I will -> you whisper. ‘I will |
| (er) | Combat Rules Summary: | This is when ENDURANCE points of either character fall to 0. -> This is when ENDURANCE points of either character falls to 0 or below. |
| (er) | Combat Rules Summary: | Kai Disciplines -> Grand Master Disciplines |
| (er) | Combat Rules Summary: | Pick number from Random-> Pick a number from the Random |
| (er) | Combat Rules Summary: | Turn to Combat -> Turn to the Combat |
| (er) | Combat Rules Summary: | to random number -> to the random number |
| (er) | Combat Rules Summary: | when ENDURANCE -> when the ENDURANCE |
| (er) | Combat Rules Summary: | ignored, -> ignored; |
| Fixed (Not Errata) | ||
| (ne) | Title Page: | herlds -> heralds [ik] |
| (ne) | Title Page: | anatch -> snatch [ik] |
| (ne) | The Story So Far: | King's army of Sommerlund¹. / ¹Lone Wolf 18: Dawn of the Dragons [This footnote appears in the published text.] [itals] |
| (ne) | The Story So Far: | the Kingdom of Bor². / ²Lone Wolf 26: The Fall of Blood Mountain [This footnote appears in the published text.] |
| (ne) | The Story So Far [x2]: | Cloud-dancer [itals] |
| (ne) | The Story So Far: | chosen his time wall -> chosen his time well |
| (ne) | The Story So Far: | For the greater glow of Sommerlund and the Kai -> For the greater glory of Sommerlund and the Kai |
| (ne) | The Game Rules: | If you have successfully completed either of the previous adventures in the Lone Wolf New Order series (Books 21-22) -> If you have successfully completed previous adventures in the Lone Wolf New Order series (Books 21-26) |
| (ne) | Disciplines: | mastered four of [four: itals] |
| (ne) | Disciplines: | one of the weapons [one: itals] |
| (ne) | Disciplines: | Shield / Power Word / Invisible Fist / Lightning Hand / Levitation / Mind Charm [spell] |
| (ne) | Disciplines: | The Hunger of Sejanoz [itals] |
| (ne) | Equipment: | map [link] |
| (ne) | Equipment: | Weapons List [link] |
| (ne) | Improved Disciplines: | Penetrate / Energy Grasp / Lightning Hand [spell] |
| (ne) | 1, 3, 13, 18, 219, 220, 225, 296, 302, 310, 345. 350: | Cloud-Dancer [itals] |
| (ne) | 3: | of discovery the darkness -> of discovery; the darkness |
| (ne) | 6: | Flameshaft [spell] |
| (ft) | 12: | This is the answer to the puzzle in Section 226. [If we swap Sections 243 and 246 to correct that problem, we will have to swap Sections 9 and 12 to fix this as well.] [SO: The part in brackets is unnecessary] |
| (ne) | 12: | Click! [onomatopoeia] |
| (ne) | 19, 294: | mêlée [encode] |
| (ne) | 21: | ridged -> ridge, |
| (ft) | 45, 83: | he will accept 1 Weapon, 3 Gold Crowns, and 1 Backpack Item [lm: what if, for example, you aren't carrying a weapon?] [jb: Good point. We could only suggest to the reader to make suggestions according to what they think is fair, something like, "If you lack one or more of these items, substitute other items of equal value."] [ ik: I'd leave out any concrete example for "of equal value". Instead I suggest something like "If you lack one or more of these items, substitute other items which you consider being of equal value.", i.e. leave the decision about what equal value means up to the reader.] [jb: Yeah, that's what I was going for. We can't offer an official value equivalence between Weapons, Backpack Items, etc., but we can give the reader the go ahead to use their own judgment here. I like your wording better, Ingo. It works best as a footnote though because it would be jarring for the author to just say "use your judgment here" because that's not really Joe's style.] |
| (ne) | 53: | If you possess neither of these skills, or if you them, turn instead to choose not to use 164. [lm: this sounds cool as is ;) but the link is broken] |
| (ne) | 53, 92, 263, 330: | Invisible Fist [spell] |
| (ne) | 54: | is obscured be -> is obscured by |
| (er) | 63: | it is a terrifying -> it is the terrifying |
| (ne) | 65: | leaps your fingertip -> leaps from your fingertip |
| (ne) | 65, 69, 75, 199, 221, 319: | Lightning Hand [spell] |
| (ne) | 70: | fangled head -> fanged head [lm: cf.refs.161&210] |
| (ne) | 70: | Breaching a sigh -> Breathing a sigh |
| (ne) | 76: | You courageous act -> Your courageous act |
| (ne) | 76, 171, 188, 206, 225: | [Ellipsis] |
| (ne) | 80: | talisman that engraved -> talisman that is engraved |
| (ne) | 92: | Clang! [onomatopoeia] |
| (ne) | 96: | net of thousand wrinkles -> net of a thousand wrinkles |
| (ne) | 103: | you should be part -> you should be parted |
| (ne) | 109: | muscular backs, they possess four -> muscular backs. They possess four |
| (ne) | 109: | grass-land -> grassland [ik: as everywhere else] [so: line-break] |
| (ne) | 111: | Paralysed be -> Paralysed by |
| (ne) | 120, 182, 215: | Mind Charm [spell] |
| (ne) | 135: | Invisible Shield [spell] |
| (ne) | 135: | Thwack! [onomatopoeia] |
| (ft) | 137, 226: | [Standard puzzle footnote.] |
| (ft) | 137: | [Can we improve this puzzle for partially-sighted readers?] |
| (ne) | 151: | Counterspell [spell] |
| (ne) | 158 [x2], 247: | Silence [spell] |
| (ne) | 160: | pain of downing -> pain of drowning |
| (ne) | 166: | [Speech: itals] |
| (ne) | 173, 284: | Penetrate [spell] |
| (ne) | 206: | recover of -> recovery of |
| (ne) | 211: | ante-chamber -> antechamber [linebreak] |
| (ne) | 211: | startled be -> startled by |
| (ne) | 214, 233: | Power Word [spell] |
| (ne) | 214, 233: | Gloar! [spell] |
| (ne) | 216: | deflected be -> deflected by |
| (ne) | 227: | a box of provision -> a box of provisions |
| (ne) | 239, 271: | you possess a Bow, and wishes -> you possess a Bow, and wish |
| (ne) | 245: | spawned be -> spawned by |
| (ft) | 246: | This is the answer to the puzzle in Section 137. [It is not correct. The answer to the puzzle should be "243". Should we swap Sections 243 and 246 to correct this? Or should we amend 137 from 'equal to the number' to 'equal to twice the number'?] [SO: twice the number] |
| (ne) | 246: | in it favour -> in its favour |
| (ne) | 256: | closed shop dollars -> closed shop doorways |
| (ne) | 266: | Shield [spell] |
| (ne) | 266: | Crack! [onomatopoeia] |
| (ne) | 273: | blocked be -> blocked by |
| (ne) | 281: | the sorcerers woman -> the sorcerous woman |
| (ne) | 332: | map [link] |
| (ne) | 338: | (Psychically possessed) [itals] |
| (ne) | Errata [243]: | Removed paragraph break between ‘Random Number Table.’ with ‘If you possess’. -> Removed paragraph break between ‘Random Number Table.’ and ‘If you possess’. |
| (ne) | Errata: | axe"Alema -> axe "Alema |
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| I | 11 | Peering round the door, you see a dozen Bhanarian soldiers feasting at a long table. |
| II | 22 | Three Bhanarian guards come rushing towards you, their spears held at the ready. |
| III | 40 | A strange, hulking form emerges from the mouth of the cave. |
| IV | 64 | You are repulsed and yet fascinated by the evil Claw of Naar. |
| V | 86 | An advancing soldier fires at you with his terrifying steam-gun. |
| VI | 97 | The creature erupts through the surface and launches itself towards you. |
| VII | 109 | Through the tall grass, a group of creatures speed towards you at a terrific pace. |
| VIII | 130 | The deadly Grey Conda is only inches away from his face. |
| IX | 149 | You are approached by Fanshalla, the fortune-teller. |
| X | 170 | A beautiful young woman beckons you closer with her soft, hypnotic voice. |
| XI | 187 | The attacking Xanon are surprised by your volley of arrows. |
| XII | 200 | Gildas' men are powerless in the grip of the mighty Autarch Sejanoz. |
| XIII | 211 | You discover the squad leader bathing in a tub of soapy water. |
| XIV | 225 | Four gaunt, grime-encrusted figures leave the cover of the rocks and move towards you. |
| XV | 239 | They load the steam-cannon with rusty nails and lead shot. |
| XVI | 261 | Bhanarian soldiers at the river's edge. |
| XVII | 268 | The Innkeeper holds two cocked crossbows, one in either hand. |
| XVIII | 297 | The guards at the bridge are quick to anger. |
| XIX | 302 | The skyship is swathed in a blanket of attacking beasts. |
| XX | 335 | Imperial Guards gathered around their campfire. |
| Rejected | ||
| (er) | The Story So Far: | Autarch's squad were returning -> Autarch's squad was returning [tp: Any collective that does some plural action ("the horde raise their weapons") = plural.] [bk: Agreed.] |
| (er) | Grand Master Disciplines: | sixth sense -> Sixth Sense |
| (ne) | Grand Master Disciplines: | EQUIPMENT [link] |
| (ne) | Grand Master Disciplines: | [Use Magnakai heading illustrations from later books?] [jb: I checked, and I don't seem to have the headings (or even the background) for the Magnakai Disciplines.] |
| (ft) | Rules for Combat: | It is not necessarily the case that the Grand Master will lose any EP during the combat. |
| (ne) | Improved Disciplines: | windows, etc., to shatter -> windows, etc. to shatter [See Book 25 Errata] |
| (ne) | Improved Disciplines: | (sun knight -- grandweaponmastery) weapons -> Weapons [See Book 26 Errata] [so: No; not a specific weapon being referred to, rather a "class" of weapons. The uncapitalised phrase "two-handed weapon" appears in Books 15, 16, 17, 18, 19, 20, 26, 27, and 28. The capitalised phrase "two-handed Weapon" does not occur in the series.] |
| (er) | 1: | crew attend -> crew attends [tp: One that I prefer (if only slightly) to be plural is "crew".] [bk: Agreed.] |
| (er) | 1: | panoply of rolling hills and grasslands pass -> panoply of rolling hills and grasslands passes [tp: Reject <collective> of <plural> = plural (e.g. "a volley of arrows come") ] [bk: Agreed.] |
| (er) | 1: | and as his young Toranese crew -> and as skyship's young Toranese crew [jc: I would use 'his crew' only with Banedon.] [jb: OK as-is. Rimoah is acting as captain of the ship, so it seems reasonable to call the crew "his".] |
| (er) | 3: | a troop of Bhanarians come -> a troop of Bhanarians comes [tp: Reject <collective> of <plural> = plural (e.g. "a volley of arrows come") ] [bk: Agreed.] |
| (er) | 3, 13, 14, 212, 64, 179, 203, 293: | tracking -> Tracking |
| (er) | 10, 165, 213, 321: | healing -> Healing |
| (er) | 12, 166: | to follow: 'This way!' -> to follow. [jb: OK as-is.] |
| (er) | 14, 146, 168, 177, 212, 287: | South Gate -> south gate |
| (er) | 15: | Gildas' -> Gildas's [cf. Corrections made in Book 23] |
| (er) | 18: | Imperial Guards has -> Imperial Guards have |
| (er) | 20: | after arriving here -> after you arrive here [jb: OK as-is.] |
| (er) | 22, 187: | 20 metres -> twenty metres [Or, 20 yards] |
| (er) | 23, 318: | Kai rank of -> rank of |
| (er) | 27: | Doomlands' -> Doomlands [so: It is the 'dust of the Doomlands', or 'Doomlands' dust'.] |
| (er) | 37: | or less -> or fewer |
| (er) | 37: | or more -> or longer |
| (ft) | 46, 122, 248, 323: | [Can you swap/repair this Kai Weapon at the end of the adventure?] [jb: I don't see any indication that this is the case.] |
| (er) | 47: | [jc: This is a bit weird. Maybe sort out the chooses ascending: 0-3, 4-8, 9] [jb: Hmm, that is weird, but I can't say that's it's wrong either. Thoughts?] [so: Joe is here saying that for this particular RNT pick you want to pick low, for some reason. I suppose there's nothing wrong with the list backwards, so we could opt to leave as-is.] [jb: Agreed.] |
| (er) | 52, 131, 152, 249, 287: | tavern-keeper -> tavernkeeper |
| (er) | 56, 69, 92: | attained above -> attained, above [so: We made changes in other books to remove the comma in such instances.] |
| (er) | 59, 303: | 30 miles -> thirty miles |
| (er) | 76, 79, 309, 346: | Vanchou -> Vanchou Forest [jb: OK as-is (e.g. "the Sahara" and "the Sahara Desert" are equivalent).] |
| (er) | 82, 102, 220, 310: | Magnakai healing -> Magnakai Curing |
| (er) | 94: | including -> as well as [jb: OK as-is.] |
| (er) | 106: | 'Magnara' -> "Magnara" |
| (er) | 109 (Illustration 7 [Caption]): | a group of creatures speed -> a group of creatures speeds [tp: Reject <collective> of <plural> = plural (e.g. "a volley of arrows come") ] [bk: Agreed.] |
| (er) | 112: | group are -> group is [tp: <collective> of <collective> = singular (e.g. "the first wave of the horde comes") ] [bk: Except here the verb is used as an identifier. Saying "the approaching group is Bhanarians" sounds about as wrong to me as when a certain US President said "the question we have to ask is, is our children learning?"] |
| (er) | 112: | this élite unit of bodyguards have -> this élite unit of bodyguards has [tp: Reject <collective> of <plural> = plural (e.g. "a volley of arrows come") ] [bk: Agreed.] |
| (er) | 117: | some Poghlam -> a Potion of Poghlam |
| (er) | 119, 345: | camouflage -> Camouflage |
| (er) | 130: | 100 metres -> a hundred metres |
| (er) | 130: | Bhanarian plains snake -> Bhanarian plains snake [so: Possibly, "Bhanarian [P|p]lain snake"] |
| (er) | 151, 281: | or less -> or lower |
| (er) | 155, 341: | that litter -> that littered [jb: OK as-is (they still litter the forest even though you're not in the forest anymore).] |
| (er) | 155, 341: | and you are forced to head south in search of firmer terrain -> and you are forced to head north in search of firmer terrain [lm: south would be towards the sea] [jb: OK as-is. Sections 59 and 303 state that you are leaving the Honah Hills in order to cross the River Heng into Chai. Taking a look at the map, the most direct route from the Honah Hills to the River Heng is roughly eastward. Taking this route, reaching the marshes around the river, and heading south along the western bank of the river will bring you to the bridge over the river between the towns of Behnaz and Zuda which is described in section 155. So heading south makes sense given this context.] |
| (ne) | 166: | [jc: alter the vertical spacing of the first three rows] [so: You mean, put the quoted speech into its own paragraph? Not necessary to make a new paragraph for a quotation, nor is there one in the original edition of the book.] |
| (er) | 167: | a host...are -> a host...is [tp: Reject <collective> of <plural> = plural (e.g. "a volley of arrows come") ] [bk: Agreed.] |
| (er) | 170, 170 (Ill 10 Caption): | [SO: Can you "beckon" someone with your "voice"?] [so: Yes, according to Dictionary.com: "2. invite, attract, draw, coax, tempt, tantalize, allure, beguile."] |
| (er) | 183: | squad are -> squad is [bk: Reject (the squad are referred to as "them" and "they" in the same sentence).] |
| (er) | 191, 195: | head-first [Is this OK?] [JB: Yes] |
| (er) | 196: | clanging [onomatopoeia] |
| (er) | 200 (Ill 12 Caption): | Gildas' -> Gildas's [cf. Corrections made in Book 23] |
| (er) | 203, 243, 253, 261, 290: | 6 metres -> six metres [Or, six yards] |
| (er) | 206: | 24 hours -> twenty-four hours |
| (er) | 206: | 60 miles -> sixty miles |
| (er) | 207: | heel -> palm [jb: OK as-is. The heel of the hand is the part of the palm nearest the wrist. Imagine crawling on hands and knees or doing a handstand: the heel of your hand is doing basically the same job as the heel of your foot does while walking upright.] |
| (er) | 219: | [bk: To add another potential erratum, the random number results in section 219 don't make sense. It's certainly understandable that Assimilance would protect you from insta-death, but why should it lead on average to greater Endurance loss? Should we make the order of the sections 123, 300, 192, 254?] [jb: That is a bit odd, but if I've done the math right, with Assimilance you're going to lose 2.2 EP on average whereas without it your going to lose 2.1 EP on average with a 10% chance of insta-death. I think the character with Assimilance should like those odds. I'd rather not change the gameplay here, especially since it can be argued that Assimilance still confers a benefit (and using a Discipline isn't guaranteed to always help you come out ahead).] |
| (er) | 240: | squad have recovered -> squad has recovered [tp: <collective> of <collective> = singular (e.g. "the first wave of the horde comes") ] [bk: Except the next word is 'their', so if we changed have -> had, we'd have to change the whole phrase as follows: the Autarch's squad have recovered their stallions and are now in hot pursuit -> the Autarch's squad has recovered its stallions and is now in hot pursuit". I personally prefer leaving it as-is, but I'm not opposed to the revision I suggested if people want it in the singular.] |
| (er) | 246: | clicks [onomatopoeia] |
| (er) | 248: | [jc: Should Kai Grandmaster use here 'Sunderer' or 'Andarin Warhammer' to avoid Kai Weapon CS loss? (sections 46, 122 and 323) ] [jb: I'm not sure what the suggestion is because Joe clearly intended you to use and damage your Kai Weapon.] [JTFS: It seems pretty clear to me that one of the main reason you get access to Sunderer and the Andarin Warhammer is because Joe knew that at some point you were going to damage your Kai Weapon in these passages.] |
| (er) | 251: | 2 metres -> two metres [Or, two yards] |
| (er) | 252: | Grand Mastery -> Kai Mastery [or, Magnakai Discipline] |
| (ne) | 272: | BEHNAZ [small CAPS] |
| (er) | 273: | bells interrupts -> bells interrupt |
| (er) | 286: | slip them on over your tunics -> slip them on over (their) tunics [jc: or is it grammatically correct?] |
| (er) | 294: | troop of crossbowmen arrive and form -> troop of crossbowmen arrives and forms [tp: Reject <collective> of <plural> = plural (e.g. "a volley of arrows come") ] [bk: Agreed.] |
| (er) | 294: | weapons -> Weapons [jb: Tough call. Given that this doesn't really involve a change to your Action Chart (you're in the process of dying) I think we can leave it as-is.] |
| (er) | 302: | horde of winged creatures circle and dive -> horde of winged creatures circles and dives Reject <collective> of <plural> = plural (e.g. "a volley of arrows come") ] [bk: Agreed.] |
| (er) | 302: | the squad of Imperial Guards catch sight -> the squad of Imperial Guards catches sight [tp: Reject <collective> of <plural> = plural (e.g. "a volley of arrows come") ] [bk: Agreed.] |
| (er) | 306: | iron-shod hooves -> iron-shod boots [jb: OK as-is. Section 347 that leads to 306 mentions that this is a mounted patrol.] |
| (er) | 326: | a handful of the Bhanarians leave the fight at the archway and come -> a handful of the Bhanarians leaves the fight at the archway and comes Reject <collective> of <plural> = plural (e.g. "a volley of arrows come") ] [bk: Agreed.] |
| (er) | 332: | 75 miles -> seventy-five miles |
| (er) | 345: | horde are -> horde is [tp: My own rule says yes, but this is a case where I find "horde are" sounds quite okay...] [bk: I agree with Tim's assessment-- by the rules we've agreed on, it would be Accept, but I think it sounds better as-is. ] |
| (er) | 349: | awhile -> a while [lm] [so: No, this usage is correct.] |