20: The Curse of Naar
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| (er) | Title Page: | evil alter-ego—‘Wolf's Bane’—reluctantly you are forced to return -> evil alter-ego, Wolf's Bane, you are forced to reluctantly return |
| (er) | Title Page: | Naar—the King of Ultimate Darkness -> Naar, the King of Ultimate Darkness |
| (er) | Title Page: | your life and the future of your entire world is at stake -> your life and the future of your entire world are at stake |
| (er) | The Story So Far: | Shadow Gate—an astral corridor -> Shadow Gate—an astral corridor |
| (er) | The Story So Far: | Plane of Darkness—the fell domain -> Plane of Darkness, the fell domain |
| (er) | The Story So Far: | Moonstone of the Shianti—a wondrous artefact -> Moonstone of the Shianti, a wondrous artefact |
| (er) | The Story So Far: | Shianti, whose presence -> Shianti whose presence |
| (er) | The Story So Far: | elite -> élite |
| (er) | The Story So Far: | monastery of the Kai -> Monastery of the Kai |
| (er) | The Story So Far: | free-state armies of Magnamund -> Freeland armies of Magnamund [ik: as in 16tlov] |
| (er) | The Story So Far: | Kai lord -> Kai Lord |
| (er) | The Story So Far: | new-found -> newfound [so: x2] |
| (er) | The Story So Far: | Grand Master Disciplines, and grasp -> Grand Master Disciplines and grasp |
| (er) | The Story So Far: | artifact -> artefact |
| (er) | The Story So Far: | You realized that if you were -> You realized that if you are [LM] [jb] |
| (er) | The Story So Far: | most-trusted -> most trusted [jb: agreed] |
| (er) | The Story So Far, 6, 57 [x2], 160: | Alyss's -> Alyss [cf. Corrections made in Book 23] |
| (er) | The Game Rules: | that you will find in the front of this book. For ease of use, and for further adventuring, it is recommended that you photocopy these pages. [so: remove] |
| (er) | The Game Rules: | ENDURANCE points fall to zero -> ENDURANCE points fall to zero or below |
| (er) | Grand Master Disciplines [x2], 325: | battle wounds -> battle-wounds |
| (er) | Grand Master Disciplines: | venoms & toxins -> venoms and toxins |
| (er) | Grand Master Disciplines: | venoms and toxins -> venoms, and toxins right [LeRoy McSwain, Jan 2007] |
| (er) | Grand Master Disciplines: | toxic gases, corrosive liquids. -> toxic gases, and corrosive liquids. In the descriptions under Grand Master Disciplines/Kai & Magnakai Disciplines, sometimes the items are separated by a semicolon, other times by a full stop. seems inconsistent. e.g.: 'missile weapons. Master of unarmed combat; no ' [LM] |
| (er) | Grand Master Disciplines: | smell & night vision-> smell, and night vision |
| (er) | Grand Master Disciplines: | footprints & tracks -> footprints and tracks |
| (er) | Grand Master Disciplines: | 500 yds -> 500 yards |
| (er) | Grand Master Disciplines: | Defence against: hypnosis -> Defence against hypnosis |
| (er) | Grand Master Disciplines: | hostile telepathy, & evil spirits -> hostile telepathy, and evil spirits |
| (er) | Grand Master Disciplines: | weapons listed opposite and overleaf -> weapons listed below |
| (er) | Grand Master Disciplines: | COMBAT SKILL -> ENDURANCE [so: as per Lone Wolf Club Newsletter 24] |
| (er) | Grand Master Disciplines: | Magi-Magic -> Magi-magic |
| (er) | Grand Master Disciplines: | battle magic -> battle-magic |
| (er) | Grand Master Disciplines: | artifacts -> artefacts |
| (er) | Grand Master Disciplines: | [so: the list/illustration of Weapons for Weaponmastery is missing from the book.] |
| (er) | Grand Master Disciplines: | [Kai-screen] The strength and capacity of these fortresses increases -> increase [LeRoy McSwain Feb 2007] [jb: Fix it] |
| (er) | Grand Master Disciplines: | [Telegnosis] Duration, and the protection of his inanimate body, increases -> Duration and the protection of his inanimate body increase [LeRoy McSwain Feb 2007] [jb: Fix it] |
| (er) | Grand Master Disciplines: | magi-magic spell -> Magi-magic spells [LM] [SO: magi-magic spell -> Old Kingdom Spells] |
| (er) | Grand Master Disciplines: | Grand Huntmastery -> footnote re: meals [DED: It is only in the Equipment section that is says "If you have chosen the Discipline of Grand Huntmastery as one of your skills, you will not need to tick off a Meal when instructed to eat." I was playing last night and I didn't read this line until after I'd already chosen Grand Huntmastery, and then chosen 2 Meals for my equipment. We could add a footnote here to explain the relevance of Huntmastery to meals] [jb: Add to main body as (er)] |
| (er) | Equipment: | effect that may have -> effect they may have |
| (er) | Equipment: | map of Magnamund -> map of the Planes of Existence [so: (ne) and make link to map] |
| (er) | Equipment: | (see the inside front cover of this book) [so: remove] |
| (er) | Equipment: | safe-keeping -> safekeeping |
| (er) | Equipment: | arrow(s) -> Arrow(s) [so: all] |
| (er) | Equipment: | bow -> Bow [so: all] |
| (er) | Equipment: | eg -> e.g. |
| (er) | Equipment: | combat, therefore -> combat; therefore |
| (er) | Equipment: | Gold Crowns These are always carried in the Belt Pouch. It will hold a maximum of fifty crowns. [so: add this] |
| (er) | Equipment: | a sword or an axe -> a Sword or an Axe [LM / jb] |
| (er) | Equipment: | Replaced the incorrect image of the Short Sword with the correct image of the Sword. |
| (er) | Rules For Combat: | on the inside back cover of this book [so: remove] |
| (er) | Rules For Combat: | This process of combat continues until ENDURANCE points of either the enemy or Lone Wolf are reduced to zero, at which point the one with the zero score is declared dead. If Lone Wolf is dead, the adventure is over. If the enemy is dead, Lone Wolf proceeds but with his ENDURANCE points reduced. -> This process of combat continues until the ENDURANCE points of either the enemy or Lone Wolf are reduced to zero or below, at which point that combatant is declared dead. If Lone Wolf is dead, the adventure is over. If the enemy is dead, Lone Wolf proceeds but with his ENDURANCE points possibly reduced. |
| (er) | Rules For Combat: | on the page after the Random Number Table -> in the back of this book |
| (er) | Improved Disciplines: | levels of Kai Grand Mastery you will -> levels of Kai Grand Mastery, you will [so: in harmony with the imprvdsc pages from books 14-18) |
| (er) | Improved Disciplines: | who has reached the rank of Sun Prince, -> who has reached the rank of Sun Prince (11 Disciplines), [ik: as for the other ranks] |
| (er) | Improved Disciplines: | ie, -> i.e. |
| (er) | Improved Disciplines: | Kai-Ray -> Kai-ray [x2] |
| (er) | Improved Disciplines: | eg, -> e.g. |
| (er) | Improved Disciplines: | spell, a Kai Grand Thane is able -> spell, Kai Grand Thanes are able [LM/JB] |
| (er) | Improved Disciplines: | of their detection -> of detection [LM] [JB] |
| (er) | Improved Disciplines: | eyes and internal organs -> eyes, and internal organs [LM] |
| (er) | Improved Disciplines (Sun Prince/Kai-surge): | or less and it cannot be -> or less, nor can it be [not serial comma, but to emphasize the clause] [jb: Correct as-is though it could use a comma between independent clauses: "10 or less, and it cannot".] |
| (er) | Grand Master's Wisdom: | master of all Evil -> Master of all Evil [so: This is Naar we're talking about] |
| (er) | Grand Master's Wisdom: | Pick your four Grand Master Disciplines -> Pick your Grand Master Disciplines [so: Also, Books 14, 15, 16, 17, 18, and 19] |
| (er) | Grand Master's Wisdom: | Naar—the -> Naar, the |
| (er) | 1: | throne hall—the innermost -> throne hall, the innermost |
| (er) | 1, 68, 81, 237: | champion—Kekataag -> champion, Kekataag |
| (er) | 1: | Inspired by her courage, and by the realization that if the Dark God is to be stopped from sending more of his foul creations to Magnamund you must deny him the fabled Moonstone of the Shianti, you vow that you will return to the Plane of Darkness and recapture that precious stone of power. [so: Maybe alter to "courage--and...Shianti--you"?] [jb: Agreed] |
| (er) | 2 [x2], 73 [x2], 217 [x2], 251 [x2], 298 [x2]: | leap on -> leap onto |
| (er) | 3, 75, 253, 286: | Darkness—an exit -> Darkness, an exit |
| (er) | 4, 32, 46, 64, 74, 97, 111, 127, 170, 179, 188, 200, 211, 218, 243, 272, 280, 290, 301, 318: | Add a period to the end of the illustration's caption. |
| (er) | 5, 71: | Hulka (itals) -> [quote] |
| (er) | 5, 71, 90, 105: | Khula (itals) -> [quote] |
| (er) | 5, 56, 71: | Lukha (itals) -> [quote] |
| (er) | 5, 8 [x2], 33, 56, 71, 84 [x2], 124 [x2], 159, 171, 232 [x2], 330 [x2]: | backpack -> Backpack [jb / bk] |
| (er) | 6: | cries, 'use -> cries. 'Use |
| (er) | 8, 22, 26, 38, 40, 49, 61, 78, 106, 123, 125, 127, 134, 146, 157, 202, 215, 216, 227, 259, 279, 329, 330, 336: | Kai mastery -> Kai Mastery |
| (er) | 11, 73, 135, 184, 208, 245, 251, 281, 283, 298, 326: | Brotherhood spell -> Brotherhood Spell |
| (er) | 11, 326: | - Net - -> Net [spell] |
| (er) | 12, 40 [x2], 52, 108: | force field -> force-field |
| (er) | 13: | cacophany -> cacophony |
| (er) | 13, 126, 314: | the undergrowth and when -> (comma either before or after 'and'. for consistency with other similar passages) [LM] [jb: I propose: the undergrowth, and when] |
| (er) | 13, 126: | titanic subterranean sea creature -> titanic sea creature |
| (er) | 14 [x2], 25 [x2], 31 [x2], 66, 95, 102 [x2], 114 [x2], 179, 196, 220, 241 [x2], 250, 270: | reptillians -> reptilians |
| (er) | 15, 39, 44, 83, 96, 153, 319, 328: | Rhunotar (itals) -> [quote] |
| (er) | 15, 39, 44, 83, 153, 232, 311, 319, 328: | Rhunadan (itals) -> [quote] |
| (er) | 15, 39, 44, 83, 153, 289, 319, 328: | Rhunaguin (itals) -> [quote] |
| (er) | 15, 39, 44, 83, 153, 319, 328: | form, and the sudden cessation of mind contact, throws -> form and the sudden cessation of mind contact throw [LM] [jb: Either this solution, or converting the commas to dashes without changing the verb tense] |
| (er) | 15, 44, 83, 153, 319, 328: | Darkness—you -> Darkness: you |
| (er) | 17, 86 [x2], 106, 125, 131, 157, 215, 278, 288, 331: | firestorm -> fire-storm |
| (er) | 17, 25 [x2], 42, 45, 62, 70 [x3], 72 [x2], 93, 106 [x2], 119 [x2], 136 [x2], 140, 148, 149, 157 [x2], 161 [x2], 172, 174, 179, 205, 213, 235, 241 [x2], 250 [x2], 259 [x2], 264 [x2], 270 [x3], 278, 284, 305, 308, 317 [x2], 340 [x2], 344 [x2]: | lavas -> Lavas [ik: Lavas is capitalized throughout 17tdoi] |
| (er) | 18, 28, 320, 343: | ribcage -> rib cage |
| (er) | 18: | Cadak—Arch Druid of the Cenerese—sworn -> Cadak, Arch Druid of the Cenerese, sworn |
| (er) | 19, 78, 111, 120, 216, 222, 246, 291, 316: | Telegnosis and -> Telegnosis, and |
| (er) | 22: | Avavae -> Avarvae |
| (er) | 22, 65, 90, 112, 172, 190, 191, 215, 227, 228, 236, 250, 285, 315, 324, 348: | sixth sense -> Sixth Sense |
| (er) | 22, 106, 125, 157, 202, 215, 216, 227, 330: | Kai rank of -> rank of Kai |
| (er) | 22, 106, 125, 157, 215, 216, 227: | Guardian, turn -> Guardian or higher, turn |
| (er) | 23: | identical—the victory -> identical: the victory |
| (er) | 24: | From beneath -> Beneath |
| (er) | 24, 101, 156, 167, 304, 323: | all—they -> all: they |
| (er) | 26, 122, 125, 141, 170, 215, 255, 259, 266, 279, 283, 336: | Crown, turn -> Crown or higher, turn |
| (er) | 26, 336: | [jc: The third possibility (turn to 98) seems not optional, so it should be moved to the first place.] [bk: Huh? Using the Kai power-word seems just as optional as using the Magi-magic power-word.] [jb: Agreed.] |
| (er) | 27, 60, 64, 77, 185, 209, 220, 223, 250, 307, 350: | Artifact(s) -> Artefact(s) |
| (er) | 28, 189: | slayed -> slain |
| (er) | 28, 70, 142, 179, 264 [x2], 317 [x2], 343, 344: | reptillian -> reptilian |
| (er) | 28, 249, 343: | semi-circular -> semicircular |
| (er) | 28, 249: | Cadak and -> Cadak, and |
| (er) | 29, 35, 58, 98, 135, 224, 294: | Sommerswerd, or Skarn-Ska -> Sommerswerd or Skarn-Ska [LM] [jb: agreed] |
| (er) | 33, 60, 84, 86, 90, 124, 232: | pathsmanship -> Pathsmanship |
| (er) | 33: | Kai monastery -> Kai Monastery |
| (er) | 33: | steel and flame -> steel, and flame [LM] |
| (er) | 33: | be reborn.’ -> be reborn'. [LM: cf. 86] [jb] |
| (er) | 33: | worthy victor.’ -> worthy victor'. [lm: cf. 86] [jb] |
| (er) | 33 [x2], 60, 84 [x2], 86, 90 [x2], 124, 150 [x3], 232: | tome -> Tome [LM: It is a Backpack item in your inventory.] [jb] |
| (er) | 33: | conquest of Northern Magnamund [so: The Drakkarim did not conquer Northern Magnamund, did they? I thought they only conquered the western part of it.] [jb: I thought so too, but can we verify? If so, then I suggest "whose conquests in Northern Magnamund".] |
| (er) | 33: | tunnels and so -> tunnels, and so [jb: agreed] |
| (er) | 33: | successfully it seems -> successfully, it seems [jb: agreed] |
| (er) | 33: | Zantaz—the Lord of the Pit—whose -> Zantaz, the Lord of the Pit, whose |
| (er) | 33: | tutor—Storm Hawk—was -> tutor, Storm Hawk, was |
| (er) | 35: | the Skarn-Ska -> Skarn-Ska |
| (er) | 37: | psi-screen -> Psi-screen |
| (er) | 38: | Mastery and -> Mastery, and |
| (er) | 40: | Knight, turn -> Knight or higher, turn |
| (er) | 41, 265: | one square and one -> one square, and one [LM] |
| (er) | 41, 265: | be fulfilled; base metal -> be fulfilled, base metal [LM] [jb] |
| (er) | 43, 182, 349: | Old Kingdom spell -> Old Kingdom Spell |
| (er) | 43: | - Shield - -> Shield [spell] |
| (er) | 43, 184: | Grand Discipline -> Grand Master Discipline |
| (er) | 46: | its companion's -> their companion's |
| (er) | 48, 281, 303: | Amulet (remember your ENDURANCE score cannot exceed the total with which you began this adventure). -> Amulet. (Remember: your ENDURANCE score cannot exceed the total with which you began this adventure.) [jb: agreed] |
| (er) | 48, 281, 303: | hot cindery -> hot, cindery [jb: agreed] |
| (er) | 49: | grand mastery -> Grand Mastery |
| (er) | 50: | sword—‘Skarn-Ska’—on -> sword, Skarn-Ska, on |
| (er) | 51, 175, 190, 203 [x2], 222, 244 [x2], 260 [+s], 271 [x3], 291, 291 [+s], 317 [x2], 336 [x3]: | arrow(s) -> Arrow(s) |
| (er) | 51, 203 [x2], 271, 336: | bow -> Bow |
| (er) | 52, 108: | abyss, 'Follow -> abyss. 'Follow |
| (er) | 53, 89, 180, 296: | which you keep in your backpack [remove] |
| (er) | 53, 89, 180, 296: | pictures or -> pictures, or |
| (er) | 53, 60, 106, 131, 157, 172, 180, 209, 220, 248, 288: | platinum amulet -> Platinum Amulet [LM] [jb] |
| (er) | 54, 152: | terrible sound; it -> terrible sound: it [LM] [jb] |
| (er) | 54, 152, 267: | source of the cacophony—the chamber -> source of the cacophony: the chamber [jb: Agreed.] |
| (er) | 55, 231: | are a long line -> is a long line [LM] [jb] |
| (er) | 56, 171: | jet black -> jet-black |
| (er) | 56, 96, 289: | life and your quest for the Moonstone ends -> life and your quest for the Moonstone end [LM] |
| (er) | 57: | lifeforce -> life-force |
| (er) | 57: | Kai rank you have attained above the rank of Grand Guardian -> Kai Mastery you have attained above the rank of Kai Grand Guardian |
| (er) | 57: | hands (erase -> hands. (Erase [jb: agreed] |
| (er) | 57: | Chart). -> Chart.) [jb: agreed] |
| (er) | 57: | weak it -> weak, it [jb: agreed] |
| (er) | 57: | repugnant forms, and -> repugnant forms and [jb: agreed] |
| (er) | 60: | this void—which is her domain—is -> this void, which is her domain, is |
| (er) | 61, 125, 215: | Lord, turn -> Lord or higher, turn |
| (er) | 63: | rainswept -> rain-swept |
| (er) | 64 [caption]: | explode from -> shoot from |
| (er) | 67, 202: | water—it -> water: it |
| (er) | 70, 344: | ‘Zhula!’ -> 'Zheva!' (cf. ref.86) [LM] |
| (er) | 72, 276, 337: | Grand Mastery skills -> Grand Master skills |
| (er) | 73, 245, 246, 298: | - Teleport - -> Teleport [spell] |
| (er) | 74: | sommersaulting -> somersaulting |
| (er) | 76: | Sun Lord, you -> Sun Lord or higher, you |
| (er) | 76: | corporeal body). -> corporeal body.) [LM] |
| (er) | 78: | Lord, or if -> Lord or higher, or if |
| (er) | 79, 207: | acolytes of Vashna -> Acolytes of Vashna |
| (er) | 79, 207: | The spirit of -> The spirits of |
| (er) | 79: | cener druids -> Cener Druids |
| (er) | 79, 207: | Vashna, Nadziranim -> Vashna, and Nadziranim |
| (er) | 79: | Zahda—the evil renegade sorcerer—who -> Zahda, the evil renegade sorcerer, who |
| (er) | 81, 168, 192: | shock-wave -> shock wave |
| (er) | 82, 118, 187, 219: | mind-force -> Mindforce |
| (er) | 82: | formidable Kai-screen [LM: Possible to arrive here from ref.97 through ref.59 where you do not have Kai-screen.] [SO: Maybe, "formidable psychic defences"?] [jb] |
| (er) | 84, 86, 90, 232: | throne of power -> Throne of Power [consistency] |
| (er) | 84: | black page -> page [jb: The page was described in the following: "Bold black text stands out from a page that glimmers like mirrored steel."] |
| (er) | 84: | realm, and the revelation of her secret name—‘Gnekasha’, until -> realm and the revelation of her secret name ‘Gnekasha’ until |
| (er) | 84: | Shamath—the Mistress -> Shamath, the Mistress |
| (er) | 85: | treeline -> tree-line [ik: as in all other books] |
| (er) | 85: | dark, jungle -> dark jungle |
| (er) | 85: | If you have Grand Pathsmanship, turn to 334. -> If you possess Grand Pathsmanship, and have attained the Kai rank of Grand Crown or higher, turn to 115.//If you have Grand Pathsmanship, but have yet to attain this rank, turn to 334. |
| (er) | 86: | acts of Evil -> acts of evil |
| (er) | 86: | Dragonlord, and of -> Dragonlord and of |
| (er) | 86: | name—‘Zheva’—which -> name ‘Zheva’ which |
| (er) | 86: | bind him, and tells -> bind him and tells |
| (er) | 86: | Zarthryn -> Zarthyn [jc: You encountered Zarthyn in book 16 sections 152 and 254. Or maybe correct Zarthyn->Zarthryn in book 16.] |
| (er) | 86: | item—the Scarab of the Wingless Dragon—which -> item, the Scarab of the Wingless Dragon, which |
| (er) | 87, 169: | counterspell -> Counterspell [spell] |
| (er) | 87, 164, 244: | you suddenly hear another sound—a grating squeal -> you suddenly hear another sound, a grating squeal [jb: Agreed.] |
| (er) | 89: | permissible). -> permissible.) [LM] |
| (er) | 89, 296: | every one appears to be empty—devoid of -> every one appears to be empty, devoid of |
| (er) | 90: | destination—the Plane of Darkness -> destination, the Plane of Darkness |
| (er) | 90: | Nza'pok—Lord of the Mire—and -> Nza'pok, Lord of the Mire, and |
| (er) | 90: | Nza'pok—the ruler of this domain—and -> Nza'pok, the ruler of this domain, and |
| (er) | 90: | natural balance and agility prevents -> natural balance and agility prevent [LM] |
| (er) | 90: | To the south you -> To the south, you [LM: To parallel 'and, to the east,you'] [jb: agreed and also "stones and, to the east," -> "stones, and to the east,"] |
| (er) | 90: | name—‘Khula’—which -> name ‘Khula’ which |
| (er) | 91, 138, 163: | returning and -> returning, and [jb: agreed] |
| (er) | 97: | Kai screen -> Kai-screen |
| (er) | 97: | They are Dentaag—giant -> They are Dentaag, giant |
| (er) | 98: | - Kai! - -> Kai! [spell] |
| (er) | 99, 225, 313: | take Avarvae -> takes Avarvae |
| (er) | 99, 225, 313: | too late; you have -> too late: you have [LM] [jb: agreed] |
| (er) | 99, 225, 313: | Damned—the -> Damned—the |
| (er) | 100: | nostrils, a -> nostrils--a [or, nostrils: a] [jb: I prefer the colon] |
| (er) | 105: | the pit and as [lm: comma either before or after 'and' for consistency with other similar passages] [jb: "the pit, and as"] |
| (er) | 107: | Maaken—the -> Maaken, the |
| (er) | 107: | Vashna—the -> Vashna, the |
| (er) | 109: | belt pouch -> Belt Pouch [jb: agreed] |
| (er) | 111, 120, 246: | out-distance -> outdistance |
| (er) | 111, 291: | levitation -> <spell>Levitation</spell> |
| (er) | 111, 120: | land and you -> land, and you |
| (er) | 112, 191, 236, 285: | the interior and the inside -> the interior, and the inside [lm: to emphasise that it is a second clause] [jb: agreed] |
| (er) | 115: | Add "You decide to explore the perimeter of the undergrowth and have walked almost a mile along its edge before you come across the remnants of a path which leads into the jungle's dark interior. Cautiously you advance along this overgrown trail, but you have not gone far before you are forced to a halt by a thick curtain of hanging vines and creepers." copied from Section 255. |
| (er) | 116, 201: | ante-chamber -> antechamber |
| (er) | 117: | knees and elbows -> knees, and elbows [LM] |
| (er) | 118: | agonising -> agonizing |
| (er) | 121, 211, 282: | --‘For Sommerlund and the Kai!’ and -> --‘For Sommerlund and the Kai!’--and [LM] [jb: agreed] |
| (er) | 121, 211: | champion—Kekataag—the -> champion Kekataag the |
| (er) | 122, 141, 266: | Kai-alchemy but -> Kai-alchemy, but |
| (er) | 123: | Kai agilities -> Kai abilities [ik: Kai abilities is used throughout all of the books] |
| (er) | 124: | name--'Gnekashs'--and -> name 'Gnekasha' and |
| (er) | 124: | Shamath—the Mistress of the Gates of Darkness—who -> Shamath, the mistress of the Gates of Darkness, who |
| (er) | 125: | domain, against Vaxagore—the leader -> domain against Vaxagore, the leader |
| (er) | 125: | place—but fate, it seems, has -> place, but fate—it seems—has |
| (er) | 127: | Seb Jarel -> Sebb Jarel [LM: cf.10tdot] |
| (er) | 127: | Seb -> Sebb [SO: cf. Book 10 Section 1 et al.] |
| (er) | 127, 259: | Thane, turn -> Thane or higher, turn |
| (er) | 127: | words; they -> words: they [LM] [jb: agreed] |
| (er) | 127: | captured by evil -> captured by Evil |
| (er) | 127: | Paido—the -> Paido, the |
| (er) | 127: | Adamas—the Lord Constable of Garthen—who -> Adamas, the Lord Constable of Garthen, who |
| (er) | 127: | Jarel—the -> Jarel, the |
| (er) | 127: | partizan -> partisan |
| (er) | 128, 228: | Künae—the Lords of Decay -> Künae, the Lords of Decay |
| (er) | 135: | - Lightning Hand -> Lightning Hand [spell] |
| (er) | 135: | power and impact of the spell proves -> power and impact of the spell prove [LM] |
| (er) | 138: | tranquility -> tranquillity [ik: as in 163 and all other books] |
| (er) | 141, 266: | stubbly legs -> stubby legs |
| (er) | 145, 160: | magicians' guild -> Magicians' Guild |
| (er) | 146: | you—but -> you, but |
| (er) | 150: | Tzor—The -> Tzor, The |
| (er) | 150: | Ahead you -> Ahead, you [jb: agreed] |
| (er) | 150: | bridge (erase this Special Item from your Action Chart). -> bridge. (Erase this Special Item from your Action Chart.) [jb: agreed] |
| (er) | 150: | Dazganon, and -> Dazganon and |
| (er) | 155 [x2]: | scarab -> Scarab [LM] [jb: agreed] |
| (er) | 160: | Kai--so long as I live, -> Kai, so long as I live, [LM] [jb: agreed] |
| (er) | 160: | despatches -> dispatches |
| (er) | 160: | dimly-lit -> dimly lit |
| (er) | 160: | discern when precisely -> discern precisely when [LM] |
| (er) | 160: | Tyso—the -> Tyso, the |
| (er) | 160: | Banedon—the leader -> Banedon, the leader |
| (er) | 160: | advisors—Lord Rimoah -> advisors, Lord Rimoah |
| (er) | 163: | Kai exorcism -> Kai Exorcism |
| (er) | 164 [x2]: | dagger -> Dagger [LM] [jb: agreed] |
| (er) | 167: | Kai Blast attack -> Kai-blast |
| (er) | 169, 199: | you suddenly hear another sound—a grating squeal—and anxiously -> you suddenly hear another sound, a grating squeal, and anxiously [jb: Agreed.] |
| (er) | 170: | Kai-screen but -> Kai-screen, but |
| (er) | 176: | Reavers—wholly -> Reavers, wholly |
| (er) | 179 [cap]: | reptillians -> reptilians |
| (er) | 182, 349: | - Invisible Fist - -> Invisible Fist [spell] |
| (er) | 184: | - Invisible Shield - -> Invisible Shield [spell] |
| (er) | 183: | Shamath—the -> Shamath, the |
| (er) | 188, 273, 306, 347: | 'Slay him, Jantoor!' [Remove quotes from thought-speech.] |
| (er) | 188 [Cap]: | Remove quotes from thought-speech. |
| (er) | 189: | blinded and hurled -> blinded, and hurled [LM] |
| (er) | 190: | weapons -> Weapons [LM] [jb: agreed] |
| (er) | 193, 211: | add x to your COMBAT SKILL [add: (in addition to all other combat bonuses for this Special Item) [cf.Section 64]] [jb: agreed] |
| (er) | 194: | Cauldron—a well -> Cauldron, a well |
| (er) | 200, 321: | Bow and -> Bow, and |
| (er) | 200: | mindforce -> Mindforce |
| (er) | 200 [Cap]: | brutal and -> brutal, and |
| (er) | 200: | psychic disciplines -> psychic Disciplines [so/jb: psychic abilities] |
| (er) | 200: | He has the psyche of an automaton—cold -> He has the psyche of an automation: cold |
| (er) | 202, 330: | morass yet -> morass, yet [jb: agreed] |
| (er) | 207: | Cener druids -> Cener Druids |
| (er) | 207: | Gnaag—the Archlord of Helgedad—who -> Gnaag, the Archlord of Helgedad, who |
| (er) | 208: | - Counterspell - -> Counterspell [spell] |
| (er) | 209: | life and your quest comes -> life and your quest come [LM] |
| (er) | 209, 220: | the Scarab of the Wingless Dragon—the -> the Scarab of the Wingless Dragon, the [jb: Agreed.] |
| (er) | 212, 318: | psychic attack; double all -> psychic attack: double all [LM] [jb: agreed] |
| (er) | 216: | Huntmastery and -> Huntmastery, and |
| (er) | 216: | Lord, and -> Lord or higher, and |
| (er) | 216: | soft sludgy mire -> soft, sludgy mire |
| (er) | 217: | ceiling, then -> ceiling. Then |
| (er) | 218: | pin-points -> pinpoints |
| (er) | 218: | closer so they -> closer, so they [or, as steadily they draw closer so they solidify -> as they steadily draw closer, they solidify]] [[jb: unclear enough to me that I prefer "as they steadily draw closer, they solidify"] |
| (er) | 218: | If you have ever visited Yanis—the Shining City—in -> If you have ever visited Yanis, the Shining City, in |
| (er) | 220: | sixth senses warn -> Sixth Sense warns |
| (er) | 222: | pin-point -> pinpoint |
| (er) | 223: | newly acquired -> newly-acquired |
| (er) | 223: | Inspired by your accounts of your experiences -> Inspired by accounts of your experiences [so: or similar] [jb: "Inspired by your accounts of the planes of existence"] |
| (er) | 223: | knowledge of Shadow Gates coupled to -> knowledge of Shadow Gates, coupled with [jb: agreed] |
| (er) | 228: | torsoes -> torsos |
| (er) | 229: | (1,3,5,7,9) -> (i.e. 1, 3, 5, 7, or 9) [jb: agreed] |
| (er) | 229: | (0,2,4,6,8) -> (i.e. 2, 4, 6, 8, or 0) [jb: agreed] |
| (er) | 229, 337: | legion—they -> legion; they |
| (er) | 232: | Künae—the Lords of Decay—and -> Künae, the Lords of Decay, and |
| (er) | 232: | Ghandezh—the -> Ghandezh, the |
| (er) | 243: | Shamath, 'it -> Shamath. 'It |
| (er) | 243: | revenge upon Avarvae—I trust -> revenge upon Avarvae! I trust [jb: Agreed.] |
| (er) | 244: | Quiver, but -> Quiver), but [LM] |
| (er) | 247: | Kai blast -> Kai-blast |
| (er) | 247: | have attained, above that -> have attained above that [LM] |
| (er) | 248: | Khor, in -> Khor in |
| (er) | 249: | counter-attack -> counterattack |
| (er) | 249, 311: | rib-cage -> rib cage |
| (er) | 249: | attack and, moments -> attack, and moments |
| (er) | 250: | gold, orange and crimson -> gold, orange, and crimson [LM] |
| (er) | 250: | armour and weapons -> armour, and weapons [LM] |
| (er) | 250: | an apex -> the apex [jb: agreed] |
| (er) | 250: | Dragonlord—the ruler of this realm of fire—and -> Dragonlord, the ruler of this realm of fire, and |
| (er) | 251, 283: | - Levitation - -> Levitation [spell] |
| (er) | 251: | rockface, then -> rock-face. Then |
| (er) | 254, 310: | Sommerswerd = +8 -> Sommerswerd = +12 [jc: The Plane of Darkness bonus +4. Also in section 310. Or maybe just footnote it here.] [so: We wanted to avoid putting the +4 footnote in every section with combat. On the other hand, this does confuse matters. I vote for deleting the text "(Sommerswerd = +8; Skarn-Ska = +5)" as it's unnecessary.] [jb: Agreed with your suggestion, Simon.] |
| (er) | 255, 261 [x2]: | eg -> e.g. |
| (er) | 255: | If you possess Grand Huntmastery, and have attained the Kai rank of Grand Crown -> If you possess Grand Pathsmanship, and have attained the Kai rank of Grand Crown [LM] [SO: This is tricky. It definitely should read "Grand Pathsmanship" instead of "Grand Huntmastery", but in Section 85, which leads here, the player has already stated that they do not possess Grand Pathsmanship. This option should be changed and also moved to Section 85 instead. Note that if we move this option to Section 85, the relevant Errata should also be moved!]] |
| (er) | 255: | Remove "If you possess Grand Huntmastery, and have attained the Kai rank of Grand Crown or higher, turn to 115." |
| (er) | 255 [x2], 261: | edged weapon -> edged Weapon [LM] [jb: agreed] |
| (er) | 255, 261: | (e.g. sword or axe) -> (e.g. [a] Sword or an Axe [LM] [jb: agreed] |
| (er) | 256: | potion -> Potion [jb: agreed] |
| (er) | 256: | Add: "Remember to delete Shamth's Potion from your Action Chart." or similar wording. [jb: agreed] |
| (er) | 258: | reply, 'but the -> reply, 'the [ik: I think the "but" is okay as reply to what Rimoah says in section 27 (the only one leading to 258).] [jb: 'But with respect, Lord Rimoah,' you reply, 'the scabbard...'] |
| (er) | 260: | axes and shields -> axes, and shields [LM] |
| (er) | 260: | archway and -> archway, and [jb: agreed] |
| (er) | 261: | non-edged weapon (e.g. a quarterstaff or mace), -> non-edged Weapon (e.g. a Quarterstaff or Mace) [LM] [jb: agreed] |
| (er) | 262, 346: | slayed -> slew |
| (er) | 265: | one circular, one square and one -> one circular, one square, and one [LM] |
| (er) | 268: | this Special Item -> this Backpack Item (cf. refs.112,191,236,285) [LM] |
| (er) | 270: | flames—a -> flames: a |
| (er) | 272: | Tormentress—the -> Tormentress, the |
| (er) | 272: | the Shamath Potion -> Shamath's Potion |
| (er) | 272 [Cap]: | A colossal chariot speeds forth driven by nine stunning astral beings -> A colossal chariot speeds forth, driven by a stunning astral being. |
| (er) | 275: | Vorndarol, in -> Vorndarol in |
| (er) | 280: | skeletal frames and from -> skeletal frames, and from [lm: to emphasise that it is a second clause] [jb: agreed] |
| (er) | 281: | - Vigour - -> Strength [spell] [JC: as per the Improved Disciplines) |
| (er) | 290: | realise -> realize [Illustration caption] |
| (er) | 290: | Then suddenly the -> Then, suddenly, the [jb: Hmm. I'd say "Suddenly, the" because those commas are awkward and the "Then" is implied.] |
| (er) | 290 (Caption): | himself--powerful -> himself--the powerful [jb: agreed; the dash could also be a comma] |
| (er) | 290: | a misshapen humanoid face—like -> a misshapen humanoid face, like |
| (er) | 290, 290 [Caption]: | himself—the -> himself, the |
| (er) | 294: | - Gloar! - -> Gloar! [spell] |
| (er) | 297 [x2], 338 [x2]: | special items -> Special Items |
| (er) | 297, 338: | mask successfully -> successfully mask [jb: agreed] |
| (er) | 301: | crowd are -> crowd is [LM] [jb: agreed] |
| (er) | 302: | echos -> echoes |
| (er) | 303: | Random Number Table. -> Random Number Table [LM] |
| (er) | 304, 334: | mass of hanging vines rise up and flail -> mass of hanging vines rises up and flails [LM] [jb: agreed] |
| (er) | 311, 331: | Suddenly a -> Suddenly, a [jb: agreed] |
| (er) | 311: | Dregants—a decomposing -> Dregants, a decomposing |
| (er) | 320: | Cadak—Arch Druid of the Cenerese—a -> Cadak, Arch Druid of the Cenerese, a |
| (er) | 321: | if your choose -> if you choose [reported by James Chown, Dec 2005] |
| (er) | 325: | life and your quest ends -> life and your quest end [LM] |
| (er) | 331: | sixth senses detect -> Sixth Sense detects |
| (er) | 335: | Kai-shield -> Kai-screen |
| (er) | 337: | Grand Mastery skills save you -> Grand Mastery saves you [LM] |
| (er) | 341: | hands, 'it -> hands. 'It |
| (er) | 343: | Helgor, in -> Helgor in |
| (er) | 343: | divination -> Divination [LM] |
| (er) | 343: | familiar yet -> familiar, yet [jb: agreed] |
| (er) | 343: | shimmering—it -> shimmering: it |
| (er) | 343: | Künae—the rulers of this hellish domain—but -> Künae, the rulers of this hellish domain, but |
| (er) | 346: | blinded and hurled -> blinded, and hurled [LM] |
| (er) | 346: | host of monstrous creatures burst -> host of monstrous creatures bursts [LM] [jb: agreed] |
| (er) | 346: | descend -> descends [LM] [jb: agreed] |
| (er) | 347: | korlinium scabbard -> Korlinium Scabbard |
| (er) | 350: | [Remove quotes from thought-speech.] |
| (er) | 350: | spiraling -> spiralling [ik: as in all other books] |
| (er) | 350: | safe keeping -> safekeeping |
| (er) | 350: | Farewell Lone Wolf -> Farewell, Lone Wolf |
| (er) | 350: | to rank of -> to the rank of |
| (er) | Combat Rules Summary: | cross reference -> cross-reference |
| (er) | Combat Rules Summary: | top of chart -> top of the chart |
| (er) | Combat Rules Summary: | Kai -> Grand Master |
| (er) | Combat Rules Summary: | fall to 0 -> falls to 0 or below |
| (er) | Combat Rules Summary: | Pick number from Random-> Pick a number from the Random |
| (er) | Combat Rules Summary: | Turn to Combat -> Turn to the Combat |
| (er) | Combat Rules Summary: | to random number -> to the random number |
| (er) | Combat Rules Summary: | when ENDURANCE -> when the ENDURANCE |
| (er) | Combat Rules Summary: | ignored, -> ignored; |
| Illustration Placements | ||
| Ensure the Illustration data contains the correct dimensions for the illustration. | ||
| small 1 | Axe | [so: 6, 68] |
| small 2 | Künae Rings | [so: 311] |
| small 3 | Dragon Amulet | [so: 155] |
| small 4 | Tome | [so: 84; also, 33, 86, 90, 124, 150, 232] |
| small 5 | Nza'Pok Amulet | [so: 139] |
| small 6 | Sword | [so: 50] |
| small 7 | Huan'Zhor's Temple | [so: 270] |
| small 8 | Canoe | [so: 314] |
| small 9 | Giant Centipede | [so: 2, 73, 217, 251, 298 |
| small 10 | Portal Mouth | [so: 23, 98] |
| small 11 | Phial | [so: 104, 198] |
| small 12 | Astral Plane | [so: 60] |
| Fixed (Not Errata) | ||
| (ne) | Title Page: | your elvil alter-ego -> your evil alter-ego [LM] |
| (ne) | The Story So Far: | task of teaching a New Order of Kai warriors the skills and proud traditions of your ancestors has been re-established [LM] [so: re-establish occurs on a line-break] |
| (ne) | The Story So Far: | may appear; although there -> may appear, although there [LM] |
| (ft) | The Game Rules: | [The Discipline bonuses mentioned do not affect your permanent scores. If you have completed previous adventures, the Disciplines that you have mastered may still be beneficial. See the Grand Master Rules section of the Readers' Handbook for details.] [and link to: http://www.projectaon.org/en/ReadersHandbook/] |
| (ft) | The Game Rules: | [Does Dawn of the Dragons Section 98 have any bearing on the Sommerswerd CS bonus in this adventure?] [jb: Section 98 of Dawn of the Dragons suggests that you may be able to add 4 to your COMBAT SKILL when using the Sommerswerd in the Plane of Darkness.] |
| (ft) | Grand Master Disciplines: | [The rules of the books in the Magnakai series (6-12) and the fact that the 'rank of Kai Grand Defender . . . means you are skilled in two . . . weapons' imply that for each book that you complete of the Grand Master series (13-20), you will gain mastery of an additional Weapon. For example, if you complete The Plague Lords of Ruel and have the Grand Master Discipline of Grand Weaponmastery at the beginning of the next book, you can choose an additional Weapon from the list to have mastery of.] |
| (ne) | Grand Master Disciplines: | Supreme Master; by acquiring -> Supreme Master, by acquiring [LM] |
| (ft) | Grand Master Disciplines: | Grand Weaponmastery [LM: Do we need the footnote here about adding a weapon for each rank earned?] |
| (ne) | Equipment: | [jb: the dimensions of the quarterstaff image need to be fixed] |
| (ne) | Equipment: | We should move the illustrations in the equipment list so that they don't violate the right margin of the text. This CSS should fix "ul .illustration { margin-left: -2.5em; }" |
| (ne) | Equipment: | meal illustration is showing up instead of potion of laumspur |
| (ne) | Rules For Combat: | then the result of the first round of combat: -> then the result of the first round of combat is: [LM] |
| (ne) | Improved Disciplines: | The range and numbers of insects so affected increases -> The range and number of insects so affected increase [LM] |
| (er) | Improved Disciplines: | Time duration and degree of surface difficulty increases -> Time duration and degree of surface difficulty increase [LM] |
| (ne) | Improved Disciplines: | The range and duration of effect of this spell increases -> The range and duration of effect of this spell increase [LM] |
| (ne) | Improved Disciplines: | The power and range of this skill increases -> The power and range of this skill increase [LM] |
| (ne) | Improved Disciplines: | [A Kai Sun Lord using Kai-blast determines the damage inflicted on an enemy by picking two numbers from the Random Number Table. These numbers should be added together (a '0' = 1) and the resultant total equals the damage inflicted.] |
| (ne) | Improved Disciplines: | Kai-surge, Psi-surge or Mindblast -> Kai-surge, Psi-surge, or Mindblast [LM] |
| (ne) | Improved Disciplines: | water, mud, lava and quicksand -> water, mud, lava, and quicksand [LM] |
| (ne) | Improved Disciplines: | duration and degree of surface difficulty increases -> duration and degree of surface difficulty increase [LM] |
| (ft) | Improved Disciplines: | [The Strength spell is, in practice, also used in armed combat contrary to what is indicated here.] |
| (ft) | 10: | This is the answer to the puzzle in Section 239. |
| (ft) | 10, 57, 239, 297, 338: | Footnote numbers wrong [LM] [SO: The Disciplines footnote was not placed properly. These should all be fixed.] |
| (ne) | 11, 36, 80, 137, 159, 182, 203, 326, 349: | clunk! [onomatopoeia] |
| (ne) | 15, 28, 39, 41, 44, 57, 83, 96, 100, 128, 153, 188, 228, 232, 249, 265, 273, 289, 306, 311, 319, 328, 343, 347: | Künae [encode properly] |
| (ne) | 27: | ‘tis true -> ‘'tis true [LM] |
| (ne) | 45: | Turn to l6l. -> Turn to 161. [LM] |
| (ne) | 47, 48, 63, 86, 112, 155, 191, 210, 218, 236, 243, 248, 269, 275, 281, 285, 303, 343, 348: | Lone Wolf [cite] |
| (ft) | 48: | [jc: What if you have used +20 life boost already in this book?] [so: Maybe the different flow of time when travelling through Shadow Gates makes a difference here?] [jb: Would a footnote work? "It may not be appropriate to use Deliverance here if you have already in this adventure used its power to restore 20 ENDURANCE points."] |
| (ne) | 54: | the cacophony the chamber -> the cacophony-the chamber (cf. ref.267) [LM] |
| (ft) | 57: | This is the answer to the puzzle in Sections 297 and 338. |
| (ne) | 63: | your kai powers -> your Kai powers [LM] |
| (ne) | 79: | any other; and when -> any other, and when [LM] |
| (ne) | 79: | Kraagenskûl [encode correctly] |
| (ne) | 80: | later; the -> later, the [LM] |
| (ne) | 90: | waistdeep -> waist-deep [ik: as in all other books] |
| (ne) | 90: | If you wish to explore the causeway, turn to 67. If you decide to investigate the ridge, turn to 202. -> If you wish to explore the causeway, turn to 67. If you decide to investigate the ridge, turn to 202. [LM] [SO: Also: Fix broken links.] |
| (ft) | 90: | "Section 98 of Dawn of the Dragons suggests that you may be able to add 4 to your COMBAT SKILL when using the Sommerswerd in the Plane of Darkness (in addition to all other combat bonuses for this Special Item)." [so: Section 90 does not contain a combat, but it is the first section where Lone Wolf is on the Plane of Darkness. This way, anyone who missed the footnote in The Game Rules is given a head's up here.] [jb: I think the footnote would be better worded as "If you possess the Sommerswerd, Section 98 of Dawn of the Dragons suggests that you may be able to add 4 to your COMBAT SKILL when using it in the Plane of Darkness (in addition to all other combat bonuses for this Special Item)."] |
| (ne) | 92: | COMBAT SKIll -> COMBAT SKILL [LM] |
| (ne) | 97: | [jc: I think this illustration should be at section 216: "You glance behind and are horrified to see three large spider-like monstrosities rising up out of the murky water at the rear of the canoe."] [so: Actually, it should be in Section 94: cf. "the others leap out of the muddy water and attack you from behind." vs. the Illustration caption: "The creatures leap out of the muddy water and attack you from behind."] |
| (ne) | 98: | <spell>Kai</spell>! -> <spell>Kai!</spell> [LM] |
| (er) | 105: | eerie green light -> eerie, green light [jb: |
| (ft) | 107: | [jb: Footnote: It is possible to have visited the Temple of Maaken without encountering a Daemonak.] |
| (ne) | 116: | chance I to move -> chance to move [LM] |
| (ne) | 116: | the floor; and your -> the floor, and your [LM] |
| (ne) | 120: | 177 -> 177. |
| (ft) | 127: | who guided you through the Hellswamp and, in so doing, forfeited his life. [LM: It's possible to visit Torgar without having met Sebb Jarel.] [so: It is possible for Lone Wolf to have visited Torgar without having met Sebb Jarel.] [jb: Amend the footnote to "It is possible for Lone Wolf to have visited Torgar without having met Sebb Jarel or accompanied Paido in the Danarg."] |
| (ne) | 157: | Grand Guardian, turn to 72. -> Grand Guardian, turn to 72. [LM] |
| (ne) | 160: | you will have the opportunity [will: itals] |
| (ne) | 164: | Weapons List [link] [+ other occurrences] |
| (ne) | 187: | however; you -> however, you [LM] |
| (ne) | 192: | blood-stained -> bloodstained [ik: as in the PAMoS] |
| (ne) | 208: | or higher, add 1 -> or higher, add 1 [LM] |
| (er) | 208: | If your total is now 6 or less, turn to 169. -> If your total is now 6 or less, turn to 169. [LM] [SO: Broken link fixed.] |
| (ne) | 220: | Huan'zhor, the master -> Huan'zhor, the master [LM] |
| (ne) | 222, 271, 291: | orphaned section 271; 222 and 297 are only reachable via 271. [LM] [SO: If we add an option to use a Bow in Section 216, we can point to 271 and prevent these sections being orphaned. We would also need to slightly reword the final option in 216.] |
| (ne) | 234: | side-step -> sidestep [linebreak] |
| (ne) | 239: | correct order; you will -> correct order, you will [LM] |
| (ft) | 239, 297, 338: | Standard puzzle footnote. |
| (ne) | 253: | Gates of Darkness an exit -> Gates of Darkness--an exit [LM] |
| (ne) | 254: | COMBAT SKill 52 -> COMBAT SKILL 52 [LM] |
| (ne) | 256: | Action Chart [jc: encode as a href] |
| (ft) | 260: | [It is possible to carry multiple Quivers cf. Book 8 Section 168] [It is possible that you may be carrying more than one Quiver (cf. Section 168 of The Jungle of Horrors. Remember that each Quiver can hold a maximum of six Arrows.] |
| (ne) | 263: | rough shelter; using your -> rough shelter, using your [LM] |
| (ne) | 286: | far wail of the chamber -> far wall of the chamber [LM] |
| (ne) | 291: | the. mire -> the mire [LM] |
| (ne) | 294: | Dragon-gate -> dragon-gate [ik: as everywhere else in this book] |
| (ne) | 294: | Gloar! -> Gloar! [LM] |
| (ne) | 303: | 0-10 -> 0=10 [LM] |
| (ne) | 310: | Sommerswerd = +8; Skarn-Ska +5 -> Sommerswerd = +8; Skarn-Ska = +5 (OR) Sommerswerd = +8, Skarn-Ska +5 [LM] [SO The former is as originally printed.] |
| (ne) | 311: | mid-air; lending -> mid-air, lending [LM] |
| (ne) | 312: | 1ose -> lose [IK] |
| (ne) | 316: | 177 -> 177. |
| (ne) | 324: | lower; deduct -> lower, deduct [LM] |
| (ft) | 330: | [James Chown: When deleting items in the last three spaces of the backpack, what happens if nothing is there? According to the wording, if nothing is there - nothing gets erased. But was the meaning obscured with the last three backpack items removed?] [jb: It is unclear what to do in this situation if some or all of the last three spaces of your Backpack are empty. One possibility is to interpret this instruction as indicating that the last three items on your list must be erased. Another interpretation is that if some of the last three spaces are empty you are lucky and lose fewer than three items.] |
| (ne) | 333: | Lower -> lower [LM] |
| (ne) | 336: | his armour; you are -> his armour, you are [LM] |
| (ne) | 345: | COMBAT SKIII -> COMBAT SKILL [LM] |
| (ne) | 346: | Despair; where -> Despair, where [LM] |
| Rejected | ||
| (er) | The Story So Far: | enigmatic elemental called Alyss -> enigmatic Elemental called Alyss [ik/jb: Leave as-is] |
| (er) | The Story So Far: | god-like -> godlike [so: maybe?] [ik: no, it is always foo-like for all values of foo] |
| (er) | The Story So Far: | Only by doing so -> Only by your doing so [LM] [jb: The "your" is implied. I vote for reject.] |
| (er) | The Story So Far: | armies of darkness -> armies of Darkness [LM] [jb: To be consistent with the "armies of night" decision, reject.] |
| (ft) | The Game Rules: | [Note that this list now includes the Silver Bracers and Korlinium Scabbard. These items are restored to the list of permissible items from the Kai and Magnakai series again in this book after being omitted beginning in The Captives of Kaag. Presumably, therefore, it should be permissible to leave the Silver Bracers and Korlinium Scabbard in safekeeping at the monastery during the previous books and retrieve them at the outset of this adventure.] [ik: I think this footnote only applies to book 17 where the Silver Bracers and Korlinium Scabbard re-appeared. Therefore I have not added this footnote for now.] |
| (er) | Equipment: | your monastery -> your Monastery |
| (er) | Equipment: | 3 points -> 5 points [ik: where?] |
| (er) | Grand Master's Wisdom: | a wise choice will enable any player -> a wise choice will enable all players (to agree with 'their' in number) [LeRoy McSwain, Jan 2007] |
| (er) | Improved Disciplines: | The range of their detection increases as a Kai Grand Master rises in rank. -> The range of their detection increases as the Kai Grand Master rises in rank. [LM] [jb: The "as a Kai Grand Master rises in rank" usage is pretty standard here, so reject] |
| (er) | Improved Disciplines: | twenty feet of themselves -> twenty feet of himself [LM] [[jb: Use of third person plural as gender-neutral singular OK, so reject.] |
| (er) | Improved Disciplines: | cause the regeneration of -> regenerate [jb: It's correct as-is even if it would be more direct if stated as suggested. Leave as-is.] |
| (er) | Grand Master's Wisdom: | creatures who -> creatures that [jb: Correct as-is.] |
| (er) | Grand Master's Wisdom: | any player to complete the quest, no matter how weak their -> all players to complete the quest, no matter how weak their [LM] |
| (er) | 1: | After what seems like an eternity, gradually the -> Gradually, after what seems like an eternity, the [jb: I agree that this would read better, but it's OK as-is.] |
| (er) | 5: | front rank hurl their spears they retreat to let those behind them come forward to take their -> front rank hurls its spears it retreats to let those behind it come forward to take its [LM] [jb: I think this is a strong case where the collective noun should use a plural verb tense. I vote to reject.] |
| (er) | 8, 38, 49, 123: | Thane or higher -> Thane, or higher |
| (er) | 11, 36, 80, 137, 159, 182, 203, 326, 349: | audible clunk! Moments -> audible clunk!. Moments [LM] |
| (er) | 13: | horde the moment you slay their -> horde the moment you slay its [LM] [jb: Hmmm. I don't think this is actually wrong.] |
| (er) | 13: | their leader will spur them -> its leader will spur it [LM] [jb: Hmmm. I don't think this is actually wrong.] |
| (er) | 14, 31, 90, 102, 114, 217: | on to -> onto |
| (er) | 21, 59: | Crown or higher -> Crown, or higher |
| (er) | 27: | ‘It is a fine blade, Grand Master,’ says Rimoah, ‘but be sure to use it with utmost discretion. -> ‘It is a fine blade, Grand Master,’ says Lord Ardan, ‘but be sure to use it with utmost discretion. [jc: If Lord Rimoah gave LW korlinium scabbard in book 12, he surely would know this in book 20 section 258] [so: You may have received the Korlinium Scabbard from Banedon in The Deathlord of Ixia Section 194.] |
| (er) | 30, 94, 197: | Avagnids -> Arachnids [IK] [SO: This seems to be Joe Dever's name for these creatures. Suggest Rejected.] [jb: I agree that we should reject] |
| (er) | 33, 263: | tracking -> Tracking |
| (er) | 37, 42, 57, 133, 140, 179, 205, 259, 263: | camouflage -> Camouflage |
| (er) | 57: | adamanite -> adamantine [ik: or, adamanite -> adamantite (cf. article on Wikipedia about adamantite)] [jb: I don't think the description of "grey adamanite" fits the mythical adamantine, the real mineral, or the generic adjective. |
| (er) | 66: | firefall -> fireball [ik: why? maybe Joe really meant 'firefall' as in 'waterfall'] [jb: I agree with Ingo here. Reject.] |
| (er) | 72: | warn off -> ward off [jb: It does make sense to me as-is.] |
| (er) | 77: | flames—he -> flames, he |
| (er) | 79, 207: | incarcerated -> interred or entombed [LM] [jb: Reject as in 19wb] |
| (er) | 79, 207: | Liganim minions -> Ligan minions [LM] [JB: Liganim is always plural in the books.] |
| (er) | 90, 311, 322: | feet-first [Is this OK?] [ik: yes, all adverbs] |
| (er) | 90: | the Shadow Gate through which you have entered -> the Shadow Gate through which you entered [jb: This is again a cleaner phrasing, but it's correct as-is.] |
| (er) | 98: | power word -> power-word [jb: Hmm. This is consistently "power word" in this book - I haven't checked others. I think we can leave it as-is.] |
| (er) | 98, 135, 224, 294: | spar -> spur [jb: It seems that this usage could fit with the noun definition of spar.] |
| (er) | 105: | The chaos-horde are -> The chaos-horde is [LM] [jb: I think this is OK as-is.] |
| (er) | 106: | If you do not possess these skills, or if you have yet to attain the required level of Kai Mastery, -> If you do not possess these skills, [LM] [SO: The first option (which was broken) requires the rank of Kai Grand Guardian.] |
| (er) | 108, 110, 168, 192: | head-first [Is this OK?] [ik: yes, all adverbs] |
| (er) | 121, 211, 282: | battle-cry--‘For Sommerlund and the Kai!’--and -> battle-cry ‘For Sommerlund and the Kai!’ and [so: cf. 21votm Section 21 proposed erratum; and 26tfobm Section 179 proposed erratum] |
| (er) | 122: | If you possess Kai-alchemy, and have attained the Kai rank of Grand Crown, turn to 73. [LM: Ought the player to have an option not to spend the endurance point on teleport?] [jb: This happens a lot. We haven't been changing these even if it seems unfair.] |
| (er) | 127: | Hellswamp and, in so doing, forfeited -> Hellswamp, and in so doing, forfeited |
| (er) | 134, 202, 330: | Guardian or higher -> Guardian, or higher |
| (er) | 140: | hunting -> Hunting |
| (er) | 143, 257: | healing -> Healing |
| (er) | 176: | darkness -> Darkness [LM] [jb: The books aren't consistent in capitalizing "Evil" vs. "evil" either. I don't know that we want to get into trying to decide this.] [so: Rule of thumb: King of the Darkness; creatures of darkness] |
| (er) | 182, 349: | shock wave -> shockwave [+ other occurrences] |
| (er) | 190: | If you possess a Dagger, -> If you possess a Dagger and wish to use it, [LM: By avoiding using it, you save 2EP and the Dagger] [jb: This happens a lot. We haven't been changing these even if it seems unfair.] |
| (er) | 212: | face-first [Is this OK?] [ik: yes, is adverb] |
| (er) | 213 [x2], 327 [x4]: | scarab -> Scarab [jc: 2x, in sect 155 is 'Scarab'] [so: These both lead to Section 155 where you're told what to call it on your Action Chart (i.e. Scarab of the Wingless Dragon, not just Scarab)] |
| (er) | 234: | backhanded -> back-handed [ik: we settled for "backhanded"] |
| (ne) | 239: | [Can we improve this puzzle for partially sighted fans?] [so: Not needed] |
| (er) | 250: | in the roof -> in a roof [LM] [SO: This is a bit confusing, but "the roof" is the cavern roof, not the roof of a building.] |
| (er) | 251, 343: | eerie yellow -> eerie, yellow [LM] [jb: |
| (er) | 254: | Sommerswerd = +8; Skarn-Ska = +5 -> Sommerswerd-+8; Skarn-Ska-+5 [LM] [SO: This seems OK to me] |
| (er) | 258: | But with respect, Lord Rimoah,’ you reply, ‘the scabbard in which I carry the Sommerswerd is woven from strands of pure korlinium.’ You lift the sword, in its scabbard, and invite Rimoah to inspect it more closely. He steps forward and his eyes run up and down the length of the sword's seemingly plain sheath. Sagely he nods his approval. -> But with respect, Lord Ardan,’ you reply, ‘the scabbard in which I carry the Sommerswerd is woven from strands of pure korlinium.’ You lift the sword, in its scabbard, and invite Ardan to inspect it more closely. He steps forward and his eyes run up and down the length of the sword's seemingly plain sheath. Sagely he nods his approval. [jc: If Lord Rimoah gave LW korlinium scabbard in book 12, he surely would know that in this section. Therefore I suggest to change him for Lord Ardan] [so: You may have received the Korlinium Scabbard from Banedon in The Deathlord of Ixia Section 194.] |
| (er) | 260: | quiver -> Quiver(s) [It is possible to carry multiple Quivers cf. Book 8 Section 168] |
| (er) | 290: | net but -> net, but [jb: correct as-is] |
| (er) | 294: | power word -> word of power |
| (er) | 300: | 4 or less -> 4 or lower [ik: objection; "or less" and "or lower" both occur throughout all books with the former occurring about 4 times as often as the latter] |
| (er) | 308: | 4 or less -> 4 or lower [ik: objection; see above] |
| (er) | 308: | 5 or more -> 5 or higher [ik: objection; "or more" and "or higher" both occur throughout all books with the former occurring about twice as often as the latter] |
| (er) | 327: | nest—he -> nest, he |
| (er) | 331: | the fire-storm is fast approaching—you now have -> the fire-storm is fast approaching; you now have |
| (er) | 335: | 2 or less -> 2 or lower [ik: objection; see above] |
| (er) | 335: | 8 or more -> 8 or higher [ik: objection; see above] |