22: The Buccaneers of Shadaki
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| (er) | Title Page: | The Buccaneers of Shadaki -> <cite>The Buccaneers of Shadaki</cite> |
| (er) | The Story so Far: | MS5075 -> MS5070 |
| (er) | The Story So Far: | elite -> élite |
| (er) | The Story So Far: | Kai monastery -> Kai Monastery |
| (er) | The Story So Far: | world of Sommerlund -> world of Magnamund |
| (er) | The Story So Far: | freestate -> Freeland |
| (er) | The Story So Far: | monastery of the Kai -> Monastery of the Kai |
| (er) | The Story So Far: | gods of Good -> Gods of Good |
| (er) | The Story So Far: | Spring -> spring |
| (er) | The Story So Far: | Cloud Dancer -> Cloud-dancer [also: itals, ne] |
| (er) | The Story So Far: | Dessi capital -> Dessian capital |
| (er) | The Story So Far: | Korlinium -> korlinium |
| (er) | The Story So Far: | sailing ship -> caravel [as per JD's original text] |
| (er) | The Story So Far: | Darklord armies -> Darkland armies [jb: Agreed] |
| (er) | The Story So Far: | King's army of Sommerlund -> King's Army of Sommerlund [LM] [jb: Fix it] [so: Also fixed in Books 21 and 23-26] |
| (er) | The Game Rules: | that you will find at the front of this book. For ease of use and further adventuring, it is recommended that you photocopy these pages [remove] |
| (er) | The Game Rules: | on the last page of the book [remove] |
| (er) | The Game Rules: | ie -> i.e. [x2] |
| (er) | The Game Rules: | your number of -> your total of |
| (er) | The Game Rules: | can not -> cannot |
| (er) | The Game Rules: | ENDURANCE points fall to zero -> ENDURANCE points fall to zero or below |
| (er) | Kai Name: | elite -> élite |
| (er) | Kai Name: | You can record your personal Kai name on the bookplate which appear on the inside cover of this book. [remove] |
| (er) | Disciplines: | venoms and -> venoms, and |
| (er) | Disciplines: | symbols and -> symbols, and |
| (er) | Disciplines: | gases and -> gases, and |
| (er) | Disciplines: | sixth sense -> Sixth Sense |
| (er) | Disciplines: | honour and -> honour, and |
| (er) | Disciplines: | their COMBAT SKILL is reduced -> their ENDURANCE is reduced |
| (er) | Disciplines: | battle wounds -> battle-wounds |
| (er) | Disciplines: | Grand masters -> Grand Masters |
| (er) | Disciplines: | Kai-surge, Psi-surge, and Mindblast -> Kai-surge and Mindblast |
| (er) | Disciplines: | Old Kingdom battle magic -> Old Kingdom battle-magic |
| (er) | Disciplines: | magi-magic spells -> Old Kingdom Spells |
| (er) | Disciplines: | Moon and -> Moon, and |
| (er) | Disciplines: | Fire and -> Fire, and |
| (er) | Disciplines: | individual (or combinations of) elements that are available, -> individual elements that are available, or combinations thereof, |
| (er) | Disciplines: | remove or accelerate -> remove, or accelerate |
| (er) | Disciplines: | eg -> e.g. |
| (er) | Disciplines: | multitalented -> multi-talented |
| (er) | Disciplines: | dialect and -> dialect, and |
| (er) | Disciplines: | Kai Weapon and any -> Kai Weapon, and any |
| (er) | Disciplines: | bare- handed -> bare-handed |
| (er) | Disciplines: | Mindblast [under Kai-surge; bold] |
| (er) | New Order Disciplines: | strength and capacity of these fortresses increases -> strength and capacity of these fortresses increase [LM] [jb: Agreed] |
| (er) | New Order Disciplines: | Duration of the spirit-walk, and the protection afforded to his in animate body, increases -> Duration of the spirit-walk and the protection afforded to his inanimate body increase [LM] [jb: Agreed] |
| (er) | New Order Disciplines: | number and accuracy of these predictions increases -> number and accuracy of these predictions increase [LM] [jb: Agreed] |
| (er) | New Order Disciplines: | have undertaken then your -> have undertaken, then your [LM] [jb: agreed] [so: Also fixed in Books 23-28] |
| (er) | Equipment: | four Disciplines then you -> four Disciplines, then you [LM] [jb: agreed] [so: Also fixed in Book 21, and Books 23-28] |
| (er) | Equipment: | south-eastern -> southeastern |
| (er) | Equipment: | (see the inside front cover of this book) [remove] |
| (er) | Equipment: | [Initial Capitals for items on the list] |
| (er) | Equipment [x8]: | arrow(s) -> Arrow(s) |
| (er) | Equipment: | a sword or an axe -> a Sword or an Axe [LM / jb] |
| (er) | Equipment: | the total sum of -> the number of [jb: agreed] |
| (er) | Kai Weapon: | new-found -> newfound |
| (er) | Kai Weapon: | elite -> élite |
| (er) | Kai Weapon: | sword or broadsword -> sword, or broadsword |
| (er) | Kai Weapon: | at the front of the book [remove] |
| (er) | Kai Weapon: | cave or tunnel -> cave, or tunnel |
| (er) | Equipment [x8]: | bow -> Bow |
| (er) | Equipment: | quiver -> Quiver |
| (er) | Equipment: | eg -> e.g. |
| (er) | Equipment: | you take with you -> you acquire |
| (er) | Rules for Combat: | This process of combat continues until the ENDURANCE points of either the enemy or Lone Wolf are reduced to zero, at which point the one with the zero score is declared dead. If Lone Wolf is dead, the adventure is over. If the enemy is dead, Lone Wolf proceeds but with his ENDURANCE points reduced. -> This process of combat continues until the ENDURANCE points of either the enemy or Lone Wolf are reduced to zero or below, at which point that combatant is declared dead. If Lone Wolf is dead, the adventure is over. If the enemy is dead, Lone Wolf proceeds but with his ENDURANCE points possibly reduced. |
| (er) | Rules for Combat: | A summary of Combat Rules appears on the page after the Random Number Table. [remove] |
| (er) | Rules for Combat: | on the inside back cover of this book [remove] |
| (er) | Rules for Combat: | Only you may [you: bold; under Evasion of combat] |
| (er) | Rules for Combat: | LW represents points lost by yourself - a disciple of Lone Wolf -> GM represents points lost by yourself - Grand Master |
| (er) | Improved Disciplines: | 'Improved Grand Master Disciplines' [remove quote marks] |
| (er) | Grand Master's Wisdom: | gods -> Gods |
| (er) | 1: | Korlinium -> korlinium |
| (er) | 1: | ask. 'It [New paragraph at this point] |
| (er) | 1: | well-treated [Is this OK?] [jb: House rules would say it should be "well treated".] |
| (er) | 1: | Record the Moonstone on your Action Chart as a Special Item. [jb: If you have not done so already?] [so: I'd prefer to add the text directly into the section as (er): "(If you have not already done so, record the Moonstone..."] |
| (er) | 2, 15, 107: | [Remove quote marks from thought-speech] |
| (er) | 3, 122: | - Gloar! [remove - ] [also: spell (ne)] |
| (er) | 3, 151: | barge -> barge into [LM: According to dictionary.com, 'to barge' in this meaning is only intransitive.] [jb: "charge"] |
| (er) | 5, 95, 121, 170: | metres -> yards [Per JD's original text] |
| (er) | 6, 216, 272, 300, 331: | the Derby -> the derby |
| (er) | 6, 216, 272, 298, 331: | warns, 'he's -> warns. 'He's |
| (er) | 7, 156, 206: | [Replace parenthetical numbers at the start of each respective line sans parentheses] |
| (er) | 7, 22: | gaily decorated -> gaily-decorated |
| (er) | 7, 22, 48, 60, 62, 85, 112, 150, 189, 217, 240, 276, 284, 306, 308, 335: | sixth sense -> Sixth Sense |
| (er) | 7, 22, 137, 217, 339: | emporiums -> emporia |
| (er) | 7, 8 [x4], 18, 57 [x7], 60 [x2], 61 [x2], 66 [x2], 71 [x2], 83 [x3], 97 [x3], 98, 110, 114, 116, 138, 141, 156 [x3], 164 [x5], 200 [x3], 201, 206, 211 [x2], 223, 232, 259, 264, 275, 278 [x3], 295, 300 [x2], 341[x2]: | Nobel[s] -> Noble[s] [jb: agreed] |
| (er) | 7, 22, 217: | Unlike the warehouses -> Unlike at the warehouses [LM] [jb: agreed] |
| (er) | 8, 168: | home, then -> home, and then |
| (er) | 8, 12, 37, 128, 202, 311: | ie -> i.e. [x2] |
| (er) | 8 [x2], 84, 168, 252, 339 [x2]: | Lourdanian -> Lourdenian |
| (er) | 8: | well-fed [OK?] [jb: well fed] |
| (er) | 10: | the base of the spiral -> the base of a spiral (You have not yet seen the stairs on this path) [LM] [jb: agreed] |
| (er) | 12 [x2], 128 [x2], 202 [x2]: | chosen -> picked |
| (er) | 13: | infra-vision -> infravision |
| (er) | 15 (Ill I Caption): | Remove quote marks from thought-speech. [Thought-speech: itals (ne)] |
| (er) | 15: | score). -> score.) |
| (er) | 16: | thirty yards -> 30 yards |
| (er) | 16: | orders, 'unfurl -> orders. 'Unfurl |
| (er) | 17, 19, 26, 75, 127, 131, 151, 191, 240, 263, 279, 313, 326, 332: | Brotherhood spell -> Brotherhood Spell [131: x2] |
| (er) | 17, 336: | - Levitation - [remove - - ][also: spell (ne)] |
| (er) | 18: | the Grand Master Discipline of Pathsmanship -> Grand Pathsmanship |
| (er) | 19, 131, 151, 240, 263, 332: | - Lightning Hand - [remove - - ][also: spell (ne)] |
| (er) | 19, 74, 122, 169, 224: | Valiance -> 'Valiance' |
| (er) | 20, 21, 99, 108, 123, 223, 232, 280: | All occurrences of belt pouch -> Belt Pouch |
| (er) | 20: | rain storm -> rainstorm [cf. 04cc] |
| (er) | 21: | erase 10 Gold Crowns from your current total. -> subtact 10 Gold Crowns from your current total. [LM] [jb: agreed] |
| (er) | 21: | place into your Backpack ... as a Special Item [jb: Make it a Backpack Item?] |
| (er) | 24, 52, 106, 148, 175, 210, 228, 245, 265, 345: | jail -> gaol |
| (er) | 24, 45, 59, 81, 125, 175, 187, 207, 222, 286, 309, 314, 337: | jailer(s/'s) -> gaoler(s/'s) |
| (er) | 24, 175, 254: | Kai mastery -> Kai Mastery |
| (er) | 24, 45, 52, 59, 81, 106, 125, 148, 175, 187, 207, 210, 222, 228, 245, 265, 286, 309, 314, 337, 345: | jail[er/ers/er's/ers'] -> gaol[er/ers/er's/ers'] |
| (er) | 24, 175: | Kai rank of Grand -> rank of Kai Grand |
| (er) | 25, 147: | sheer breathtaking -> sheer, breathtaking [LM] [jb: agreed] |
| (er) | 26: | - Invisible Shield - [remove - - ][also: spell (ne)] |
| (er) | 29, 93, 323: | notice board -> notice-board |
| (er) | 31, 105, 177: | Kai weapon -> Kai Weapon |
| (er) | 31, 242: | sea water -> seawater |
| (er) | 32: | houses that borders -> houses that border |
| (er) | 33, 60, 118, 214, 221, 265, 279, 310: | your weapons -> your Weapons |
| (er) | 34, 47, 70, 193: | Old Kingdom spell -> Old Kingdom Spell |
| (er) | 34: | - Power Word - [remove - - ][also: spell (ne)] |
| (er) | 35: | sons and -> sons, and |
| (er) | 36, 203: | Fryelund forest -> Fryelund Forest |
| (er) | 36 [x2], 66, 203 [x2], 211: | timberyard -> timber yard [cf. 01hh] |
| (er) | 36, 203: | freshly sawn -> freshly-sawn |
| (er) | 39: | Oh Grand -> Oh, Grand |
| (er) | 39, 253: | head. 'No [New paragraph at this point] |
| (er) | 40, 237, 305: | icy cold -> icy-cold [jb: agreed] |
| (er) | 42: | of Dessi you -> of Dessi, you |
| (er) | 45: | If you wish to keep this key...you take the Iron Key from your pocket -> (Here it seems you have a choice of whether to keep the key; then it assumes that you do keep it.) [LM] [jb: (If you wish to keep this key, record it on your Action Chart as a Backpack Item.)" -> "(Mark this on your Action Chart as a Special Item. You need not discard another item in its favour if you are already carrying the maximum number of Special Items.)] |
| (er) | 45: | record it on your Action Chart as a Backpack Item...you take the Iron Key from your pocket [lm: a Backpack Item you keep in your pocket?] [jb: (If you wish to keep this key, record it on your Action Chart as a Backpack Item.)" -> "(Mark this on your Action Chart as a Special Item. You need not discard another item in its favour if you are already carrying the maximum number of Special Items.)] |
| (er) | 47, 70: | - Invisible Fist - [remove - - ][also: spell (ne)] |
| (er) | 47, 219: | not attack; it continues -> not attack you; it continues [LM] |
| (er) | 49: | ninety miles -> 90 miles |
| (er) | 49: | Kas-kalahmoot [foreign] |
| (er) | 51, 149, 322: | slayed -> slew |
| (er) | 52, 148, 210, 228, 345: | weapons, -> Weapons, |
| (er) | 52, 148, 290: | city guards -> City Guards [jb: Fix it] |
| (er) | 54: | one weapon -> one Weapon |
| (er) | 54, 304: | Backpack and weapons -> Backpack and Weapons [LM] [jb: agreed] |
| (er) | 56: | and Coarse laughter -> and coarse laughter |
| (er) | 57: | [SO: Lose the superfluous quotation marks around the price list. Put list into a table (lose the ellipses)] |
| (er) | 58, 281: | forty miles -> 40 miles |
| (er) | 58: | come to village -> come to a village [LM] |
| (er) | 61: | Each of these potions cost -> Each of these potions costs [LM] |
| (er) | 61: | one or more of them -> one or both of them ('more' implies that there are more than one of each potion.) [LM] [jb: Fix it] |
| (er) | 65, 115, 182, 190, 207, 294: | drawbolt -> bolt |
| (er) | 67, 166: | [jc: If the Kai Weapon you wield is 'Ulnarias', you will benefit from the bonus gained due to its unique properties.] |
| (er) | 74, 106, 165, 165 ['s], 233, 247 [x4], 274 [x2], 317, 343: | arrow(s) -> Arrow(s) |
| (er) | 75, 127: | - Levitation [remove - - ][also: spell (ne)] |
| (er) | 77, 204, 342: | tavernkeeper -> tavern-keeper |
| (er) | 78: | absence, then -> absence, and then |
| (er) | 78, 170: | Lone Wolf [itals] |
| (er) | 81, 187, 234, 302: | If you possess an Iron Key -> [LM: You cannot arrive at this section with the Iron Key. While it's probably not an error correctable by us, I'd like to see it go in the rejected errata record at least for the convenience of Joe or the lads at Mongoose for when they bring out the new edition.] [jb: Alter Options to read: "Turn to 314."] |
| (er) | 83, 97: | timber and leather -> timber, and leather |
| (er) | 85: | first volley of arrows come -> first volley of arrows comes [LM] [jb: agreed] |
| (er) | 87: | broad-leafed -> broad-leaved [IK] |
| (er) | 90: | disorientated -> disoriented |
| (er) | 92: | retort. 'But [New paragraph at this point] |
| (er) | 92: | Captain. 'I've [New paragraph at this point] |
| (er) | 92: | kilometre -> mile |
| (er) | 95: | desk, then -> desk, and then |
| (er) | 95, 109, 188, 196, 287 [x2], 295, 327: | on to -> onto (REJECTED: 30, 232 [goes on to]; 265 [opens on to]) (FIXED: 155 [climb onto]; 155 [leap onto]; 287, 336 [step onto]; 261 [yourself onto]; 95 [slams onto]; 109 [disembark onto]; 188, 287, 295 [spilled onto]; 196 [You ride onto the bridge]; 327 [lift...onto]) |
| (er) | 95, 200 [x2], 282: | Coppersmith's Hall -> Coppersmiths' Hall [LM] [jb: agreed] |
| (er) | 95: | hall -> Hall [LM] [jb: agreed] |
| (er) | 98, 116: | potion of Laumspur -> Potion of Laumspur |
| (er) | 99: | count out 10 -> count out 7 |
| (er) | 99: | to erase 7 Gold Crowns from your current total. -> to subtract 7 Gold Crowns from your current total. [LM] [jb: agreed] |
| (er) | 99: | place into your Backpack ... as a Special Item [jb: Make it a Backpack Item?] |
| (er) | 101: | Kholo -> kholo [ik: as in section 146; kholo are animals -> no capitalization] |
| (er) | 102: | proud and nobel -> proud and noble |
| (er) | 102: | potions of Laumspur -> Potions of Laumspur |
| (er) | 102: | Hulhuk mountains -> Hulhuk Mountains |
| (er) | 102 (Ill VI Caption): | Hulhuk mountains -> Hulhuk Mountains |
| (er) | 104: | potions of Liera -> Potions of Liera |
| (er) | 106, 245: | section -> Section (pamos) [LM] [so: Or, delete "section"] [jb: "Section"] |
| (er) | 108: | voice, 'Let -> voice. 'Let |
| (er) | 109: | dismal mood of its natives and the large number of street beggars leaves -> dismal mood of its natives and the large number of street beggars leave [LM] [jb: agreed] |
| (er) | 111, 195: | parallel with -> parallel to |
| (er) | 119: | Guyan trees -> guyan trees |
| (er) | 119: | gulleys -> gullies |
| (er) | 119: | fifty miles -> 50 miles |
| (er) | 124: | tallow and customers -> tallow, and customers [jb: It took me a couple of times to realize that the customers weren't contributing to the fragrance of the tavern.] |
| (er) | 132: | them open and escape -> them open, and escape [LM] |
| (er) | 137: | warehouses, taverns and -> warehouses, taverns, and |
| (er) | 137, 290: | wharfs -> wharves |
| (er) | 138: | price or -> price, or |
| (er) | 138: | a room and meal here costs -> a room and meal here cost [LM] [jb: agreed] |
| (er) | 141: | remedies and -> remedies, and |
| (er) | 144: | hush, then -> hush; then |
| (er) | 144: | neck and -> neck, and |
| (er) | 146: | predators who -> predators that |
| (er) | 148: | shortlived -> short-lived |
| (er) | 149, 188, 287, 295: | twenty miles -> 20 miles |
| (er) | 150: | mob have -> mob has |
| (er) | 152: | skilfully crafted -> skilfully-crafted |
| (er) | 152: | weapons, make the appropriate adjustment to your Action Chart. (The maximum number of normal weapons -> Weapons [LM] [jb: agreed] |
| (er) | 156: | items that he has on display are the following -> [LM: How much do they cost?] [BK: None of the above items listed for purchase have prices associated. But I have the French edition of Book 22, and I figured I'd check just on the off chance that it lists the prices. And in fact it does! So here they are: Epee (Sword): 2 Nobles Hache (Axe): 2 Nobles Arc (Bow): 3 Nobles 6 Fleches (6 Arrows): 2 Nobles Fouet (Whip): 2 Nobles Loupe (Spyglass): 3 Nobles Plume de Oie (Quill Pen): 1 Noble Flacon de Encre (Pot of Ink): 2 Nobles The order's slightly different, but barring any other discoveries, I suggest we use these prices. ] [jb: Let's use the prices from the French translation.] |
| (er) | 158: | disappear and -> disappear, and |
| (er) | 158, 303: | thrawl -> thrall |
| (er) | 162: | you, then -> you, and then |
| (er) | 163: | co-operate -> cooperate |
| (er) | 164: | backpack item -> Backpack Item |
| (er) | 164: | any weapon -> any Weapon |
| (er) | 164: | the door you assure -> the door, you assure [LM] [jb: agreed] |
| (er) | 165, 317: | bow -> Bow |
| (er) | 166: | creatures surges -> creature surges |
| (er) | 167: | people and -> people, and |
| (er) | 167: | Use only once -> One use only |
| (er) | 169: | Kaisurge -> Kai-surge |
| (er) | 171: | Niguma-sa -> Nigumu-sa |
| (er) | 173: | lives.Mindful -> lives. Mindful |
| (er) | 174: | solely aware -> sorely aware |
| (er) | 175: | mastery or -> Mastery, or |
| (er) | 177: | body, then -> body; then |
| (er) | 180: | from the southern -> from southern |
| (er) | 180: | flask and -> flask, and |
| (er) | 182: | Grand Mastery skills -> Grand Mastery |
| (er) | 184, 339: | jade green -> jade-green |
| (er) | 184: | fact it -> fact, it |
| (er) | 184: | hustle and -> hustle, and |
| (er) | 185, 346: | rainswept -> rain-swept |
| (er) | 186: | enchantments and magical mists and winds -> enchantments, magical mists, and mage winds [Per JD's original text] |
| (er) | 191, 326: | - Sense Evil - [remove - - ][also: spell (ne)] |
| (er) | 192: | - Silence - [remove - - ][also: spell (ne)] |
| (er) | 193: | - Shield - [remove - - ][also: spell (ne)] |
| (er) | 196: | Kai Disciplines -> Kai Discipline |
| (er) | 201: | if knows -> if he knows |
| (er) | 202: | your wounds -> your wounding |
| (er) | 206: | favourite Forlu-zhan came -> favourite, Forlu-zhan, came |
| (er) | 207, 222: | bonuses) -> bonuses.) [jb: agreed] |
| (er) | 209: | game and -> game, and |
| (er) | 209: | fresh water -> freshwater |
| (er) | 209: | creature who is seeking -> creature seeking |
| (er) | 209: | hungry, scared and -> hungry, scared, and |
| (er) | 213: | rendering him -> rendering it |
| (er) | 216, 298: | frowns: -> frowns. |
| (er) | 216: | blanket -> Blanket [LM] |
| (er) | 220: | trek (there are sufficient fruits for another 3 Meals). -> trek. (There are sufficient fruits for another 3 Meals.) |
| (er) | 221: | patrol confiscate -> patrol confiscates |
| (er) | 221: | patrol confiscates your weapons (including your Kai Weapon) and march [LM: Here it's both singular and plural.] [jb: "marches"] |
| (er) | 222: | Jailers -> Gaolers [LM] |
| (er) | 223: | Gallowbrush -> gallowbrush |
| (er) | 228: | Weapon and -> Weapon, and |
| (er) | 228: | backpack items -> Backpack Items |
| (er) | 230: | Bow nor -> Bow, nor |
| (er) | 235: | two days time -> two days' time |
| (er) | 236: | The canopy...swirl -> The canopy...swirls |
| (er) | 236: | swirls above your head and then grow -> swirls above your head and then grows [LM] [jb: agreed] |
| (er) | 239: | isle of Kobra -> Isle of Kobra |
| (er) | 245: | clang [onomatopoeia] |
| (er) | 245: | Oriah's body -> Oriah's person [LM] [jb: "Oriah's unconscious body"] |
| (er) | 247: | bridge, then -> bridge, and then |
| (er) | 250: | Praise the Gods! |
| (er) | 250: | Council elder -> Council Elder |
| (er) | 252: | won and -> won, and |
| (er) | 253: | Vassagonian funtal -> Vassagonian Funtal |
| (er) | 253: | asks, '. . .and -> asks. 'And [jb: Agreed] |
| (er) | 254: | of Grand -> of Kai Grand |
| (er) | 257: | mob disperse -> mob disperses |
| (er) | 259, 325: | darkly patterned -> darkly-patterned |
| (er) | 259, 325: | master Kai -> Master Kai |
| (er) | 259, 325: | Silversmith's -> Silversmiths' |
| (er) | 259, 325: | Sadi desert -> Sadi Desert |
| (er) | 259, 325: | Western Magnamund -> western Magnamund |
| (er) | 260: | the Sesketera -> The Triasus <cite> |
| (er) | 260: | breath, then -> breath; then |
| (er) | 262: | It's name -> Its name |
| (er) | 262: | semi-circle -> semicircle |
| (er) | 264: | o'moved -> o' moved [jb: agreed] |
| (er) | 264: | you mind, she's sure -> you mind; she's sure [LM] [jb: agreed] |
| (er) | 265: | on to -> onto [LM] [jb: agreed] |
| (er) | 265: | and,when -> and, when |
| (er) | 265: | cell, then -> cell, and then |
| (er) | 266: | the creatures -> the creature |
| (er) | 267: | Bow nor -> Bow, nor |
| (er) | 270: | to be indulged -> to be indulged in [jb: agreed] |
| (er) | 271: | Backpack Item. -> Backpack Item.) |
| (er) | 275: | of sly and cunning -> of sly cunning |
| (er) | 275 [x2]: | Vargas -> the Vargas |
| (er) | 275: | Grand Master -> Journeyman [jb: Does Gemulkin have any way to know that he is a Grand Master? We may want to verify that this doesn't happen elsewhere as well.] |
| (er) | 278: | [Remove all - from pricelist] |
| (er) | 279: | - Mind Charm - [remove - - ][also: spell (ne)] |
| (er) | 280: | eh lads! -> eh, lads? |
| (er) | 280: | o'ruffled -> o' ruffled [jb: agreed] |
| (er) | 280: | in Ghol-Tabras market -> in the Ghol-Tabras market [LM] [jb: agreed] |
| (er) | 280: | The Seasprite [jb: Both words should be italicized or "The" should be uncapitalized. Probably the former (cf. The Triasus in Section 16).] [so: Fixed as "the <cite>Seasprite</cite>"] |
| (er) | 283: | north quarter -> North Quarter (cf.201,279,33) [LM] [jb: agreed] |
| (er) | 283: | Dessi Consulate -> Dessian Consulate |
| (er) | 284: | to be be pleased -> to be pleased |
| (er) | 290: | of the head of every ruler -> of the heads of every ruler [LM] [jb: agreed] |
| (er) | 291: | Wytch-King -> Wytch-king |
| (er) | 291: | rolling in -> roll in |
| (er) | 291 (Ill 17 Caption): | The group are listening -> The group is listening [LM] [jb: agreed] |
| (er) | 291: | MS5054 [Is this date for Shasarak's demise correct?] [jb: Good question. I don't remember much time keeping in Grey Star, but it's worth a look.] [TW: Section 1 of 04wotw states that GS was in Daziarn for 7 years, so according to the GS books it should be MS5057.] |
| (er) | 295 [x2]: | Tikulu -> Tiklu |
| (er) | 299: | 'Bad . . . dragon . . . is good', -> 'Bad . . . dragon . . . is good,' [also: itals (ne)] |
| (er) | 299 (Ill XVIII Caption): | [Speech: itals] |
| (er) | 300: | northern quarter -> Northern Quarter [jb: agreed] |
| (er) | 301: | weapon -> Weapon [LM] [jb: agreed] |
| (er) | 308: | Fish hooks (3) -> 3 Fish Hooks [jb: agreed] |
| (er) | 308: | your weapons and -> your weapons, and |
| (er) | 308: | Bottle of rice wine -> Bottle of Rice Wine |
| (er) | 308: | Special Item [remove itals] |
| (er) | 308: | Moonstone, your weapons -> Moonstone, your Weapons [LM] |
| (er) | 309: | at the foot of the spiral stairs -> at the foot of a set of spiral stairs (You have not yet seen the stairs on this path) [LM] [jb: agreed] |
| (er) | 310: | asleep it -> asleep, it |
| (er) | 313: | - Net - [remove - - ][also: spell (ne)] |
| (er) | 319: | Begone y'scabs -> Begone, y'scabs |
| (er) | 319: | others, 'This -> others. 'This [LM] |
| (er) | 330: | sound of booted feet and the blare of a brass horn echoes -> sound of booted feet and the blare of a brass horn echo [LM] [jb: agreed] |
| (er) | 333: | from royal household -> from the royal household [LM] |
| (er) | 333: | says, 'not -> says. 'Not |
| (er) | 336: | -Levitation- -> [LM: Italicise] |
| (er) | 337: | a trio of gaolers suddenly appear -> a trio of gaolers suddenly appears [LM] [jb: agreed] |
| (er) | 340: | drunk or -> drunk, or |
| (er) | 350: | Congratulations Grand -> Congratulations, Grand |
| (er) | 350: | [jb: The corrections to last sentence seem not to have been made.] [so: Italicised "Lone Wolf"] |
| (er) | Combat Rules Summary: | Combat Results Tables -> Combat Results Table |
| (er) | Combat Rules Summary: | cross reference -> cross-reference |
| (er) | Combat Rules Summary: | LW indicates loss of ENDURANCE points to Lone Wolf -> GM indicates loss of ENDURANCE points to yourself |
| (er) | Combat Rules Summary: | This is when ENDURANCE points of either character fall to 0. -> This is when ENDURANCE points of either character falls to 0 or below. |
| (er) | Combat Rules Summary: | Kai Disciplines -> Grand Master Disciplines |
| (er) | Combat Rules Summary: | Pick number from Random -> Pick a number from the Random |
| (er) | Combat Rules Summary: | Turn to Combat -> Turn to the Combat |
| (er) | Combat Rules Summary: | to random number -> to the random number |
| (er) | Combat Rules Summary: | when ENDURANCE -> when the ENDURANCE |
| (er) | Combat Rules Summary: | ignored, -> ignored; |
| (er) | Combat Results Table: | LW -> GM [all] |
| Fixed (Not Errata) | ||
| (ne) | The Story So Far: | which day dormant -> which lay dormant [LM] |
| (ne) | Disciplines: | mastered four of [four: itals] |
| (ne) | Disciplines: | one of the weapons [one: itals] |
| (ne) | Disciplines: | EQUIPMENT [link] |
| (ne) | Disciplines: | Shield / Power Word / Invisible Fist / Lightning Hand / Levitation / Mind Charm [spell] |
| (ne) | Disciplines: | Mydnight's Hero [itals] |
| (ne) | Equipment: | map [link] |
| (ne) | Equipment: | Weapons List [link] |
| (ne) | Equipment: | carry is two [two: itals] |
| (ne) | Equipment: | The currency most readily accepted in southeastern Magnamund is the Gold Crown. -> [LM: It's the Noble isn't it? Do we need to say that Gold Crowns are accepted usually at the rate of one Gold Crown per Noble?] [so: Altered the text to read: "The currency most readily accepted in southeastern Magnamund is the Noble. These are always carried in the Belt Pouch. It will hold a maximum of fifty Nobles. Gold Crowns are readily accepted at a rate of 1 Gold Crown for 1 Noble."] |
| (ft) | Kai Weapon: | "If you have completed the previous adventure (book 21), skip this paragraph, for you already have a Kai Weapon. [jc: New Order Grandmaster could pick up a Kai Weapon in book 21, and until book 24 he/she aren't able to switch for another one. And IMHO switching Kai Weapons is not able also between books 24-25 and 27-28...Or maybe Kai Weapons were designated directly for each New Grand Master, and therefore your firstly chosen Kai Weapon cannot be replaced at all. It is 'yours' forever (like Sommerswerd for LW).] [so: I always understood it tomean that you cannot swap a Kai Weapon once you have chosen one (in Book 21).]" |
| (ne) | Levels: | You begin the New Order adventures at this level of Grand Mastery [itals] |
| (ne) | Improved Grand Master Disciplines: | As you rise through the higher levels of Kai Grand Mastery you will find that your Disciplines will steadily improve. -> (This sentence is printed twice) [LM] [so: Fixed in Books 22-28] |
| (ne) | Improved Grand Master Disciplines: | The nature of additional improvements and how they affect your existing Grand Master Disciplines will be noted in the Improved Grand Master Disciplines section of future Lone Wolf New Order books. -> (This sentence is printed twice) [LM] [so: Fixed in Books 22-28] |
| (ne) | 1, 5, 14, 35, 49, 77, 92, 95, 111, 121, 139, 155, 157, 160, 178, 184, 190, 195, 200, 204, 218, 249, 262, 271, 277, 299, 327, 339, 342: | The Azan [itals] |
| (ne) | 2, 15, 107: | [Thought-speech: itals] |
| (ft) | 2: | [Standard puzzle footnote] |
| (ne) | 4 [x2], 25, 50 [x2], 76, 100, 147 [x2], 191, 275 [x3], 321, 329, 338: | Vargas [itals] |
| (ne) | 6, 109, 216, 244, 272, 298, 331: | Embassage [itals] |
| (ne) | 8: | 1 Gold Crown) -> 1 Gold Crown.) [LM] |
| (ne) | 11, 96, 131, 154, 176, 208, 270: | Zhürc [encode properly] |
| (ft) | 11, 96, 131, 154, 176, 208, 270: | [jc: As written in section 50, Zhürc is magical creation, so in this section should be added: 'If the Kai Weapon you wield is ‘Valiance’, you will benefit from the bonus gained due to its unique properties.'] [jb: Agreed; also, footnote: " 'Valiance' is also effective against magical creatures." in Books 21-28.] |
| (ne) | 12, 16 [x3], 37, 92, 113, 128 [x2], 171 [x2], 202: | The Triasus [itals] |
| (ne) | 12: | the boat, and the tip -> the boat, the tip [LM] |
| (ne) | 14, 16, 39, 40, 119, 305: | recognise -> recognize |
| (ne) | 16 [x4], 137, 171, 180, 239, 280: | Seasprite [itals] |
| (ne) | 22, 30 [x4], 78, 92 [x2], 114, 136, 201 [x2], 232 [x4], 253, 254, 259, 299 [x4], 325, 333: | [Encode ellipsis properly] |
| (ne) | 27: | as the close -> as they close [LM] |
| (ne) | 28, 231, 348: | stuck on the head -> struck on the head [LM] |
| (ne) | 29: | to collect to -> to connect to [LM] |
| (ne) | 34: | door of the bridge -> floor of the bridge (cf.332,251) [LM] |
| (ne) | 34: | vices -> voices (cf.332,251) [LM] |
| (ne) | 35 (Ill II Caption), 306 (Ill XIX Caption): | [Encode ellipses] |
| (ne) | 38, 102, 119, 171: | map [link] |
| (ne) | 39: | The Pride of Sommerlund [itals] |
| (ne) | 40, 237, 305: | Huntmastery and Grand Nexus [and: itals] |
| (ne) | 40: | Yet after a few moments later you [LM: It sounds bad to me with both 'after' and 'later'] [so: Should be: "Yet after a few moments..."] |
| (ne) | 43: | you Kai tunic -> your Kai tunic [LM] |
| (ne) | 49: | Chair of the Heavens [itals] |
| (ne) | 49: | is steepest -> is the steepest [AO] |
| (ne) | 53: | you see can see -> you can see [LM] |
| (ne) | 53: | Soothsayers Shop -> Soothsayer's Shop [LM] |
| (ne) | 60: | side-step -> sidestep [linebreak] |
| (ft) | 67, 166: | If the Kai Weapon you wield is ‘Ulnarias’, you will... -> If the Kai Weapon you wield is ‘Ulnarias’, or ‘Spawnsmite’, you will... [jc: Is Nigumu-sa a reptile? I think so.] [jb: You're almost certainly right, but I'd feel better about footnoting it: "If you wield the Kai Weapon 'Spawnsmite', it seems that you could also benefit from the bonus gained due to its unique properties against this apparently reptilian creature."] |
| (ne) | 68: | race-track -> racetrack [linebreak] |
| (ne) | 69: | he is asks -> he asks [LM] |
| (ne) | 78: | whispers Oriah, 'they are -> whispers Oriah. 'They are [LM] |
| (ft) | 80: | [This is the answer to the puzzle in Section 2] |
| (ft) | 86: | [LM: Needs same footnote as ref.269] |
| (ne) | 95: | chain-mailed -> chainmailed [ik: as everywhere else in this book] [SO: Occurs on a line-break] |
| (ft) | 107: | [Standard puzzle footnote] |
| (ne) | 108: | but than a -> but then a [LM] |
| (ne) | 109: | dawn-to-dusk curfew -> dusk-to-dawn curfew [LM] |
| (ft) | 120: | [This is the answer to the puzzle in Section 107] |
| (ne) | 122: | it terrible attack -> its terrible attack [LM] |
| (ne) | 137: | &Trading -> & Trading |
| (ne) | 139, 178: | as is sails -> as it sails [LM] |
| (ne) | 141: | projecting you healing -> projecting your healing [LM] |
| (ne) | 154 (Ill IX Caption): | [Encode Zhürc properly] |
| (ne) | 156: | purchase of sell -> purchase or sell [LM] |
| (ne) | 196: | [Italicise speech] [jb: agreed] |
| (ne) | 241: | 3 ENDURANCE point -> 3 ENDURANCE points [LM] |
| (ft) | 269: | [Double Mindblast bonuses as well?] [jb: Agreed] |
| (ne) | 282: | ante-chamber -> antechamber [linebreak] |
| (ne) | 287, 295: | It is short voyage -> It is a short voyage (cf.188) [LM] |
| (ne) | 299: | trust of distrust -> trust or distrust [LM] |
| (ne) | 312: | over-reacts -> overreacts [ik: line-break?] |
| (ne) | 315: | It look's like -> It looks like [LM] |
| (ne) | 326: | across market square -> across the market square (cf. 159) [LM] |
| (ne) | 333: | Radyard take -> Radyard takes [LM] |
| (ne) | 333: | countries-to -> countries &emdash; to [ik: or something similar] |
| (ne) | Errata: | Replaced 'LW' with 'LW indicates loss of ENDURANCE points to Lone Wolf' with 'GM indicates loss of ENDURANCE points to yourself'.> Replaced 'Combat Results Tables' with 'Combat Results Table'. -> Replaced 'LW' with 'GM". Replaced 'LW in dicates loss of ENDURANCE points to Lone Wolf' with 'GM indicates loss of ENDURANCE points to yourself'. Replaced 'Combat Results Tables' with 'Combat Results Table'. [LM] |
| Large Illustrations | ||
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| I | 15 | 'Welcome, Grand Master,' he says without speaking. 'We have prayed for your safe arrival.' |
| II | 35 | A flag hangs from a broken masthead . . . a green flag surmounted by a large silver fish. |
| III | 43 | 'Vengeance will be mine!' screams Sesketera. |
| IV | 51 | A crow-faced man in tattered black robes utters a chilling chant. |
| V | 74 | A bolt of energy emerges from the centre of the creature's being. |
| VI | 102 | The dragon becomes Cresosa, leader of the Rivorzha tribe from the Hulhuk mountains. |
| VII | 111 | You hear the rumbling roar of the ship's cannons as the deadly ball and chain shot hurtles towards you. |
| VIII | 126 | 'It is a genuine Nhang Doll, one of the original 100 that were made for Emperor Hyunstai. Very rare indeed.' |
| IX | 154 | In a blur of movement, the Zhürc comes lunging towards you. |
| X | 174 | Melchar's nakedness draws cries of laughter and outrage as you scurry through the maze of passages. |
| XI | 189 | You hear a faint noise, and freeze with fear when you recognize it to be the sound of a blowpipe. |
| XII | 217 | Her piercing grey eyes dart to your satchel as if she knows you are carrying the Moonstone. |
| XIII | 225 | They stand in a circle around the cloaked body of Lord Casis which lies upon a bed of shimmering crystals. |
| XIV | 243 | Its great jaw swings open, revealing a ghastly red maw lined with dozens of dagger-like fangs. |
| XV | 259 | As you take your seat, you are approached by a smiling, fair-haired young man. |
| XVI | 282 | 'Out! Out! Leave here at once!' he blusters. |
| XVII | 291 | The group are listening to the rantings of a bald man with wild, rolling eyes. |
| XVIII | 299 | For a fleeting moment you think you hear the words 'Bad . . . dragon . . . is good.' |
| XIX | 306 | Every arrow strikes the dragon, yet none of them penetrate the creature's scaly hide. |
| XX | 340 | Your fears are confirmed when you find yourself surrounded by six knife-wielding thugs. |
| Illustration Placements | ||
| small 1 | Satchel/Bag | [so: 1, 163, 167, 172, 214] |
| small 2 | Caeno Derby | [so: 110] |
| small 3 | Potions | [so: 61] |
| small 4 | Ship | [so: 16, 195] |
| small 5 | Market | [so: 7, 22] |
| small 6 | Crossed Scimitars | [so: 52, 152] |
| small 7 | Map/chart Lantern | [so: 119, 171] |
| small 8 | Raft | [so: 84] |
| small 9 | Caged parrot | [so: 170] |
| small 10 | Overturned Wagon | [so: 188, 287, 295] |
| small 11 | Ship's Wheel | [so: 25, 147] |
| small 12 | Blowpipe & darts? | [so: 236, 255] |
| Rejected | ||
| (er) | All occurrences (if any) of swordbelt -> sword belt [[SO: no occurrences in this book] | |
| (er) | All occurrences (if any) of look-out -> lookout [SO: no occurrences in this book] | |
| (er) | The Story So Far: | god-like -> godlike |
| (ne) | Grand Master Disciplines: | [Use Magnakai heading illustrations from later books?] [jb: I checked, and I don't seem to have the headings (or even the background) for the Magnakai Disciplines.] |
| (er) | Equipment: | (Special Items) -> (Special Item) [cf. (Backpack Item)] |
| (er) | Equipment [x5]: | (Weapons) -> (Weapon) [cf. (Backpack Item)] |
| (ft) | Rules for Combat: | It is not necessarily the case that the Grand Master will lose any EP during the combat. |
| (er) | Kai Wisdom: | Completion of previous Lone Wolf adventures (Books 1–21) may be advantageous, but it is not essential for the successful completion of this New Order adventure. [jc: It doesn't have much sense... I suggest for all New Order books (except of 21) this: Completion of Lone Wolf adventures (Books 1- 20) is not essential for the successful completion of this New Order adventure. Completion of previous New Order adventures (Books 21 - 2x) may be advantageous, but it is also not essential for the successful completion of this New Order adventure] [jb: Leave as-is] |
| (er) | 2, 107: | hovering to and fro -> moving to and fro [jb: While we may take "hover" to mean remain stationary, many of the definitions that I found mentioned fluttering. One even said "To hang about; to move to and fro near a place, threateningly, watchfully, or irresolutely." OK as-is.] |
| (er) | 3: | power word -> word of power [jb: The spell is called "Power Word" in the Discipline description. If anything, perhaps we should capitalize this, though that would probably look funny next to "Gloar!". OK as-is.] |
| (er) | 4, 81, 130, 234, 296, 302, 328, 335: | camouflage -> Camouflage |
| (er) | 5, 95, 121, 157, 249, 271: | a patrol...come -> a patrol...comes [jb: OK as-is] |
| (er) | 5, 32 [x2], 52 [x3], 95, 121, 148 [x2], 157, 228, 249, 258 [x2], 271, 330, 345: | city watch -> City Watch [jb: I don't think that this is like the Border Rangers or something. It's seems more generic like the "city merchants". I vote to leave as-is] |
| (er) | 6: | He says that -> Melchar says that [lm: improves clarity] [jb: Let's leave this unchanged.] |
| (er) | 12: | crew of The Triasus are -> crew of The Triasus is [LM] [jb: The more of these shades-of-gray issues that we deal with, the more I err on the side of the author. Leave as-is.] |
| (er) | 12: | Sesketera's crew begin -> Sesketera's crew begins [LM] [jb: The more of these shades-of-gray issues that we deal with, the more I err on the side of the author. Leave as-is.] |
| (er) | 22, 30 [x3], 114, 136, 201 [x2], 232 [x2], 253, 254, 259, 325, 333, Ill 2 (Caption), Ill 18 (Caption): | … -> . . . [LM: PAMoS says that the ellipsis should be three periods seperated by spaces, but all of the ellipses in this book are the ellipsis character.] [so: The PAMoS is talking about the proofreading stage; once the proofread text is collated and converted to XML, all instances of " . . . " are stripped out and replaced by "<ch.ellips/>" which is the ASCII ellipsis character.] |
| (er) | 30 [x2], 232 [x2], 264: | an ale -> a pint of ale [jb: This doesn't tweak my idiom violation meter. "Go to the cooler and grab a beer." :) OK as-is.] |
| (er) | 37: | crew of The Triasus are -> crew of The Triasus is [LM] [jb: The more of these shades-of-gray issues that we deal with, the more I err on the side of the author. Leave as-is.] |
| (er) | 37: | Sesketera's crew begin -> Sesketera's crew begins [LM] [jb: The more of these shades-of-gray issues that we deal with, the more I err on the side of the author. Leave as-is.] |
| (er) | 38, 146, 171, 209, 220: | tracking -> Tracking [209: x2] |
| (er) | 40, 129, 189, 227, 237, 248, 305: | or less -> or lower |
| (er) | 43, 274 (+others?): | spear -> halberd [as per JD's original text] [SO: Rejected: Ill3 (Section 43) slearly shows a spear.] |
| (er) | 45: | (If you wish to keep this key, record it on your Action Chart as a Backpack Item.) [Move this to the end of the section] [jb: I think I see what the issue is, but this makes most sense to me where it is.] |
| (er) | 46, 84, 141: | healing -> Healing |
| (er) | 50, 242: | [jb: Didn't the ship make it out of the storm already in 230?] [so: Sections 50 and 242 are not necessarily referring to a storm, or even to the same storm from earlier. I see no problem here.] |
| (er) | 52: | city guard see you, pursue you, and quickly overpower you by their -> city guard sees you, pursues you, and quickly overpowers you by its [LM] [jb: The more of these shades-of-gray issues that we deal with, the more I err on the side of the author. Leave as-is.] |
| (er) | 52: | the city watch round up the Suhnese and guard -> the city watch rounds up the Suhnese and guards [LM] [jb: The more of these shades-of-gray issues that we deal with, the more I err on the side of the author. Leave as-is.] |
| (er) | 58, 109: | West Gate -> west gate [cf. Book 21] |
| (er) | 58, 93, 114, 323: | taverna -> tavern [jb: My understanding is that a taverna is small, so is a "sprawling taverna" like a "jumbo shrimp"? Or perhaps change "sprawling" and "dominates" in 58. Perhaps I'm nit picking too much.] [so: Diagree; Chambers does not refer to a taverna as a small establishment.] |
| (er) | 59, 125, 286, 337: | clicks [onomatopoeia] |
| (er) | 75: | hall below, you are -> hall below; you are [LM] [so: "Immediately" in this sentence means "As soon as", so a semi-colon here would not make sense.] |
| (er) | 78, 170: | New Order [lm: should this be italicised?] [so: No, we just italicise "Lone Wolf" as the series name. We don't italicise "Kai", "Magnakai", or "Grand Master" either.] |
| (er) | 78: | ceremonial weapon -> ceremonial halberd [SO: Rejected: Ill3 (Section 43) slearly shows a spear.] |
| (er) | 92: | feet-first [Is this OK?] [JB: Yes] |
| (er) | 110: | eastern quarter -> Eastern Quarter [jb: Looks generic, not a proper name. OK as-is.] |
| (er) | 116: | per potion [LM: I assume there is no limit on amount] [jb: It seems that way to me.] |
| (er) | 124, 223: | tavern-keeper -> tavernkeeper [cf. Book 21] |
| (ne) | 126: | DULGH'S CURIOS [small CAPS] |
| (er) | 128: | crew of The Triasus are -> crew of The Triasus is [LM] [jb: The more of these shades-of-gray issues that we deal with, the more I err on the side of the author. Leave as-is.] |
| (er) | 128: | Sesketera's crew begin -> Sesketera's crew begins [LM] [jb: The more of these shades-of-gray issues that we deal with, the more I err on the side of the author. Leave as-is.] |
| (er) | 129, 227, 248: | or more -> or higher |
| (er) | 139: | crew cast off and catch -> crew casts off and catches [LM] [jb: The more of these shades-of-gray issues that we deal with, the more I err on the side of the author. Leave as-is.] |
| (er) | 140: | group of native bandits emerge -> group of native bandits emerges [LM] [jb: The more of these shades-of-gray issues that we deal with, the more I err on the side of the author. Leave as-is.] |
| (er) | 148: | The city guard pursue you and quickly overpower you by their -> The city guard pursues you and quickly overpowers you by its [LM] [jb: The more of these shades-of-gray issues that we deal with, the more I err on the side of the author. Leave as-is.] |
| (er) | 148: | the city watch round up the Suhnese and guard -> the city watch rounds up the Suhnese and guards [LM] [jb: The more of these shades-of-gray issues that we deal with, the more I err on the side of the author. Leave as-is.] |
| (er) | 149: | hunting -> Hunting |
| (er) | 150: | militia arrive -> militia arrives [LM] [jb: The more of these shades-of-gray issues that we deal with, the more I err on the side of the author. Leave as-is.] |
| (er) | 178: | crew weigh anchor and prepare -> crew weighs anchor and prepares [LM] [jb: The more of these shades-of-gray issues that we deal with, the more I err on the side of the author. Leave as-is.] |
| (er) | 179: | slow down -> slows down [jb: OK as-is] |
| (er) | 184: | the crew begin -> the crew begins [LM] [jb: The more of these shades-of-gray issues that we deal with, the more I err on the side of the author. Leave as-is.] |
| (er) | 200, 288 (+others?): | crew members -> crewmembers |
| (er) | 202: | crew of The Triasus are -> crew of The Triasus is [LM] [jb: The more of these shades-of-gray issues that we deal with, the more I err on the side of the author. Leave as-is.] |
| (er) | 202: | Sesketera's crew begin -> Sesketera's crew begins [LM] [jb: The more of these shades-of-gray issues that we deal with, the more I err on the side of the author. Leave as-is.] |
| (er) | 204 (+others?): | crew member -> crewmember |
| (er) | 206 [x2]: | tackroom -> taproom [jb: Tack as in equipment for riding a horse?] [jb: The more of these shades-of-gray issues that we deal with, the more I err on the side of the author. Leave as-is.] |
| (er) | 207, 222: | (You are unarmed: ignore all weapon bonuses) -> [Phrase more consistently with other sections.] [jb: How so?] [so: I can't remember what I meant by this.] |
| (er) | 208: | 50 -> 338 [Per JD's original text] [SO: 338 is only for if you have dropped your Kai Weapon (cf. Sections 31 and 242] |
| (er) | 209: | both hungry -> hungry |
| (er) | 216, 298: | east quarter -> Eastern Quarter [jb: OK as-is.] |
| (er) | 216: | He says that -> Melchar says that (improves clarity) [LM] [jb: Let's leave this unchanged.] |
| (er) | 221: | black-stoned -> black, stone [LM] [jb: OK as-is.] |
| (er) | 225: | 10,000 -> ten thousand [as per JD's original text] [jb: I don't know, I kind of like it better the way it was published. Any particular reason for this?] |
| (er) | 228: | The city watch round you up and guard -> The city watch rounds you up and guards [LM] [jb: OK as-is.] |
| (er) | 257: | militia gain -> militia gains [LM] [jb: The more of these shades-of-gray issues that we deal with, the more I err on the side of the author. Leave as-is.] |
| (er) | 258: | training closer -> getting closer [jb: This is a bit unusual. I get the sense that he's using it in: "to bring to bear on some object; point, aim, or direct, as a firearm, camera, telescope, or eye". I lean toward leaving it as-is.] |
| (er) | 258: | city watch training closer -> city watch drawing closer [LM] [jb: OK as-is.] |
| (er) | 259: | Grey Star-the -> Grey Star, the [LM] [jb: OK as-is.] |
| (er) | 259: | 6 Nobles [LM: I assume Gold Crowns are accepted.] [jb: Is the point made clear earlier in the book that GC are readily exchanged for Nobles?] [so: It does now, in the Equipment section.] |
| (er) | 260: | crew appear -> crew appears [LM] [jb: The more of these shades-of-gray issues that we deal with, the more I err on the side of the author. Leave as-is.] |
| (er) | 264: | the line...that are -> the line...that is [SO: Or, the line of ships that are moored -> the line of ships moored] [jb: I think it would read better as "the line of ships moored" however it works as it is. The phrase "that are moored..." modifies "ships" not "line".] |
| (er) | 272: | He says that -> Melchar says that [LM: improves clarity] [jb: OK as-is] |
| (er) | 281: | West Gate -> west gate [cf. Book 21] |
| (er) | 288: | Samor -> samor [IK: No; or else we have to de-capitalize Samor also in 02fotw] |
| (er) | 291: | grimy, tattered grey -> grimy, tattered, grey [LM] [jb: OK as-is] |
| (er) | 299: | Come, we -> Come. We [LM] [so: This is fine as-is.] |
| (er) | 308: | 3 Fish Hooks [LM: Is this really a Backpack Item?] [jb: They're for _really_ big fish. :) I'm with you: it doesn't make a lot of sense, but these are one of those red herrings we've been warned about, so if the reader wants to take up a Backpack slot with one, what can we do?] |
| (er) | 325: | Grey Star-the -> Grey Star, the [LM] [jb: OK as-is] |
| (ft) | 327: | [SD: (From 173) Probably want to add a footnote telling the reader to deduct 1 ENDURANCE point for using Kai-surge. I've seen this before in LW23 (where the player uses Kai-surge on the Inquisitor-major to force him to stop blowing his hunting horn).] [jb: I don't think we can second guess the author's game mechanics here.] |
| (er) | 330: | city watch raise the alarm and give -> city watch raises the alarm and gives [LM] [jb: OK as-is] |
| (er) | 331: | He says that -> Melchar says that (improves clarity) [LM] [jb: OK as-is] |
| (er) | 335: | you blend perfectly -> you blend in perfectly [LM] [jb: OK as-is] |
| (er) | 337: | nerve-racking -> nerve-wracking |
| (er) | 345: | The city watch surround you and guard -> The city watch surrounds you and guards [LM] [jb: The more of these shades-of-gray issues that we deal with, the more I err on the side of the author. Leave as-is.] |