11: The Prisoners of Time
| Pending |
| Fixed | ||||
| (er) | Many: | All occurrences of "<rank> or more" with "<rank> or higher" | ||
| (er) | Many: | on to -> onto (REJECTED: 4 [press on to]; 195, 317 [opens on to]; 240, 272, 331 [latch on to]) (FIXED: 320 [yourself onto]; 12 [tip...onto]; 165 [back onto]; 200 [climb down onto]; 319 [onto the platform]) | ||
| (er) | The Story So Far: | Adamas's -> Adamas' | ||
| (er) | The Game Rules: | of your Action Chart. (i.e. if your pencil fell on 4 in the Random Number Table you would write in a COMBAT SKILL of 14.) -> of your Action Chart (i.e. if your pencil fell on 4 in the Random Number Table you would write in a COMBAT SKILL of 14). | ||
| (er) | The Game Rules: | of your Action Chart. (i.e. if your pencil fell on the number 6 on the Random Number Table you would have 26 ENDURANCE points.) -> of your Action Chart (i.e. if your pencil fell on the number 6 on the Random Number Table you would have 26 ENDURANCE points). | ||
| (er) | The Game Rules: | ENDURANCE points fall to zero -> ENDURANCE points fall to zero or below | ||
| (er) | Disciplines: | [CL: add "The fact that you are skilled with three weapons does not mean that you begin the adventure carrying any of them. However, you will have opportunities to acquire weapons during your adventure. For every Lone Wolf book that you complete in the Magnakai series, you may add an additional weapon to your list."] | ||
| (er) | Disciplines: | add only 2 extra points to your COMBAT SKILL. -> add only 2 extra points to your COMBAT SKILL. (Psi-surge and Mindblast cannot be used simultaneously.) | ||
| (er) | Disciplines: | mastery of this skill -> mastery this skill | ||
| (er) | Disciplines: | your list -> your Weaponmastery Checklist [SO: and link to the Action Chart][Dewi Morgan, August 2008] | ||
| (er) | Equipment [x9]: | bow -> Bow | ||
| (er) | Equipment [x7]: | arrow -> arrow | ||
| (er) | Equipment: | combat, therefore it is strongly -> combat; therefore it is strongly [LeRoy McSwain, Jan 2007] | ||
| (er) | Equipment: | Weaponmastery with a -> Weaponmastery with | ||
| (er) | Rules for Combat: | This process of combat continues until ENDURANCE points of either the enemy or Lone Wolf are reduced to zero, ... If the enemy is dead, Lone Wolf proceeds but with his ENDURANCE points reduced. -> This process of combat continues until the ENDURANCE points of either the enemy or Lone Wolf are reduced to zero or below, ... If the enemy is dead, Lone Wolf proceeds but with his ENDURANCE points possibly reduced. | ||
| (er) | Rules for Combat: | at which point the one with the zero score is declared dead. -> at which point that combatant is declared dead. | ||
| (er) | 8, 346: | Lorestone of the Kai. -> Lorestone of Nyxator. [jc: or maybe just Lorestone?] | ||
| (er) | 14, 65, 88, 118, 125, 298: | Mentora or more -> Mentora or higher | ||
| (er) | 17,45, 113, 136, 147, 171, 249, 263, 274, 287, 326: | swordbelt -> sword belt | ||
| (er) | 17, 21, 45, 59, 72, 92, 105, 108, 113, 135, 141, 147, 158, 171, 184, 200, 249, 263, 271, 273, 281, 287, 294, 296, 322, 326, 339: | bow -> Bow | ||
| (er) | 17, 19, 21, 32 [x2], 45, 72, 76, 77, 91, 95, 105, 113, 127, 151, 171, 220, 241, 249, 256, 263, 286, 296 [x2], 322, 326, 333, 339: | arrow -> Arrow | ||
| (er) | 41: | crackling lances, then they -> crackling lances; then they [LeRoy McSwain, Jan 2007] | ||
| (er) | 43: | Discipline of Divination and Huntmastery -> Disciplines of Divination and Huntmastery [LeRoy McSwain, Jan 2007] | ||
| (er) | 56: | Come, esteemed warrior, I -> Come, esteemed warrior; I [LeRoy McSwain, Jan 2007] | ||
| (er) | 63, 150: | en route [foreign] | ||
| (er) | 70, 279: | those who you do pass -> those whom you do pass [LeRoy McSwain, Jan 2007] [tp: This I fully agree with changing. :-) ] | ||
| (er) | 74: | battle wounds -> battle-wounds | ||
| (er) | 83: | new-found -> newfound | ||
| (er) | 84: | echoes, 'And -> echoes, 'and | ||
| (er) | 98, 236: | Zhamin plateau -> Zhamin Plateau | ||
| (er) | 101: | well being -> well-being | ||
| (er) | 109, 309: | Kai mastery -> Kai Mastery | ||
| (er) | 155: | clawed paws, then you -> clawed paws. Then you [LeRoy McSwain, Jan 2007] | ||
| (er) | 194: | imposter -> impostor | ||
| (er) | 195: | drawbolts -> bolts | ||
| (er) | 218: | your guide, then simultaneously -> your guide; then simultaneously [LeRoy McSwain, Jan 2007] | ||
| (er) | 234: | Oede Herb -> Oede herb | ||
| (er) | 289: | pig-like monster, then he -> pig-like monster; then he [LeRoy McSwain, Jan 2007] | ||
| (er) | 320: | of thunder, then a -> of thunder; then a [LeRoy McSwain, Jan 2007] | ||
| (er) | 327: | collosal -> colossal | ||
| (er) | 332: | feet first -> feet-first | ||
| (er) | 340: | drawbolt -> bolt | ||
| (er) | 347: | You tell him of your fall through the Shadow Gate, your flight from the storm and your encounter with the fierce Khozinda [If arriving from ref. 67, you didn't encounter the khozinda] [LeRoy McSwain, Jan 2007] [tp: It seems possible, even likely, that the pair of creatures these hunters were chasing were Khozinda (section 112, cf. section 161; the Khozinda and the pursued creatures are both large red reptilians that live in this area). If this is so, then in section 112, a Khozinda runs towards the cairn which sheltered Lone Wolf from the storm... and then is abruptly mentioned no more, not even to say it kept going and didn't notice you. So it may be that JD had intended some sort of "encounter" with the beast in this branch of the book, but it got cut. Maybe. In any case, this is all pretty much irrelevant speculation, as the book as-is never identifies that creature as a Khozinda, nor do you really "encounter" it. So I think "and your encounter with..." ought to be cut from section 347. At most, my speculation might make an interesting note in the erratum.] [SO: Also, serial comma before 'and'] [tp: No longer relevant if the Khozinda is cut from the sentence, but a simple matter of Manual of Style compliance if it's not.] | ||
| (er) | Combat Rules Summary: | Kai Disciplines -> Magnakai Disciplines | ||
| (er) | Combat Rules Summary: | This is when ENDURANCE points of either character fall to 0. -> This is when ENDURANCE points of either character falls to 0 or below. | ||
| Fixed (Not Errata) | ||
| (ne) | The Story So Far: | struck deer in -> struck deep in [LeRoy McSwain, Jan 2007] |
| (ft) | Equipment: | [jc: How is the Lantern lighted?] [so: Added: The Lantern is designed to be self-lighting. You will not need a Tinderbox or any other means of creating a flame to light it.] |
| (ne) | Equipment: | [NM: Do we really need two footnotes saying the same thing? Can't multiple instances point to the same footnote in this case?] |
| (ne) | Improved Disciplines: | is not be able -> is not able [LeRoy McSwain, Jan 2007] |
| (ne) | Improved Disciplines: | Tutelaries lose only 2 points from your COMBAT SKILL -> Tutelaries lose only 2 points from their COMBAT SKILL [LeRoy McSwain, Jan 2007] |
| (ne) | 22: | he panes your blow -> he parries your blow [LeRoy McSwain, Jan 2007] |
| (ft) | 62, 95, 349: | [SO: Change footnote to read: These bonuses are not cumulative—if you possess both Disciplines, you may only add 4 to the number you pick from the Random Number Table. It is unclear whether a Platinum Amulet should protect you in this situation in lieu of the Discipline of Nexus.] |
| (ne) | 84: | combat. turn -> combat, turn [Neil McGrory Jan 2007] |
| (ne) | Footnotes (Section 34): | Mentora or more -> Mentora or higher |
| (ne) | Footnotes (Section 34): | cf. 298 -> cf. Section 298 |
| (ne) | Footnotes (Sections 62, 95, and 349): | have both Disciplines -> possess both Disciplines [consistency] |
| Rejected | ||
| (er) | The Story So Far: | shock wave -> shockwave |
| (ft) | Equipment: | [dv: There's a superfluous footnote (Nr. 2 and 4 are identical).] [jb: There are identical footnotes because the text itself is redundant. It mentions twice that you can only carry 12 special items. I suppose we could remove footnote 4, however.] [so: Let's keep the copied footnote unless/until we make the xsl more intelligent (i.e. so that multiple footrefs can point to the same footnote...] |
| (er) | Improved Disciplines: | is not able -> will not be able [To match the correct wording in Book 8] [LeRoy McSwain, Jan 2007] |
| (er) | Improved Disciplines: | Primates with this skill have...and are able -> Primates with this skill will have...and be able [To match Book 8] [LeRoy McSwain, Jan 2007] |
| (er) | Magnakai Wisdom: | a wise choice enables any player to complete the quest -> a wise choice enables all players to complete the quest [to agree with the plural 'their' in the following clause] [LeRoy McSwain, Jan 2007] |
| (er) | 57: | break free of their traces [LeRoy McSwain, Jan 2007: Is this OK?] [dd: - yep, dictionary.com has "trace –noun 1. either of the two straps, ropes, or chains by which a carriage, wagon, or the like is drawn by a harnessed horse or other draft animal.... —Idiom 3. kick over the traces, to throw off restraint; become independent or defiant: He kicked over the traces and ran off to join the navy."] |
| (er) | 192: | as if someone nearby were spitting an insect from their mouth -> ...his mouth [LeRoy McSwain, Jan 2007] [tp: As much as I like to preserve usage of "he", "him", "his" as the impersonal pronoun and protect it from the political correctness brigade, I don't think we should go the other way and introduce it in place of impersonal "they", "them", "their".] [jb: Yeah, we don't need to correct this kind of usage which is quickly becoming standard (nor do we need to enforce it).] |
| (er) | 211: | There is T'uk T'ron,' she says fondly. -> 'That is T'uk T'ron,' she says fondly. [so: No; it's acceptable to say, "T'uk T'ron is over there", so "There is T'uk T'ron" is fine.] |
| (ft) | 41: | [jc: Should Jewelled Mace grant here +5 CS bonus?] [so: "It is unclear whether a Jewelled Mace should add 5 to your COMBAT SKILL here (cf. Shadow on the Sand Section 253)."] [DED: I'd be hard pressed to make a concrete case for the jewelled mace here - it would be a nice touch, but seems like wishful thinking to me.] [jb: Agreed, it's hard to make a case here since no other magical weapon is mentioned.] |